Christine's Poems
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Comment from Bill Schott
This two - four - two, Wine O Time, reminds me of my drinking days when I ended each days work with a night of drunken debasement. I am envious of those who can drink responsibly. Cheers.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2015
This two - four - two, Wine O Time, reminds me of my drinking days when I ended each days work with a night of drunken debasement. I am envious of those who can drink responsibly. Cheers.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2015
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Thanks Bill, for having a read and your comments are quite true . One must limit the enjoyment of a drink and have a couple of Days off . Just a bit of fun with the contest requirements Here's Cheers
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
LOL self-improvement wino... that is cute. I like your 2/4/2 poem and you did a good job with the syllable count. The picture goes nicely with the poem.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015
LOL self-improvement wino... that is cute. I like your 2/4/2 poem and you did a good job with the syllable count. The picture goes nicely with the poem.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2015
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Ha Ha Thank Gypsy Blue Rose yes I thought that category may sum this up It could be self improvement after a hard days work. Glad you stooped by for a wine with me and fore your review. A bit of fun Here's Cheers Christine
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is a cute 2 4 2 poem about winding down after a hard day's work, there are times I wish that I drank so I could do that, I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2015
this is a cute 2 4 2 poem about winding down after a hard day's work, there are times I wish that I drank so I could do that, I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2015
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Thanks sweetwoodjax for having a read and giving me feedback and good luck wishes for the contest really appreciated this review Cheers
Comment from Glasstruth
It's difficult to write such a short poem. You've set the mood and met all the requirements. I do have one suggestion to "Here's Cheers" The word: "here's" is really a filler. Cheers really says it all. I would use that syllable to paint an even stronger picture in mind. What a word? Don't know. Good luck! Les
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2015
It's difficult to write such a short poem. You've set the mood and met all the requirements. I do have one suggestion to "Here's Cheers" The word: "here's" is really a filler. Cheers really says it all. I would use that syllable to paint an even stronger picture in mind. What a word? Don't know. Good luck! Les
Comment Written 14-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2015
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Thanks Les for stopping by to have a read and review this entry. Also for your suggestions, re here's as a filler, I will keep this in mind if I enter any more 2-4-2 contests, it is always good to get a review with helpful hints much appreciated Cheers
Comment from mvbrooks
Your poem is a great salute to the end of the working day.
In a few syllables, you convey a story and connect with readers who are ready to celebrate the end of a work day.
This was a challenging poem format and your poem shows you not only rose to the challenge, but will likely rise to the top in your contest. Good luck
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2015
Your poem is a great salute to the end of the working day.
In a few syllables, you convey a story and connect with readers who are ready to celebrate the end of a work day.
This was a challenging poem format and your poem shows you not only rose to the challenge, but will likely rise to the top in your contest. Good luck
Comment Written 14-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2015
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Thanks mvbrooks for having a read and reviewing this entry and giving me a lovely comments and good luck wishes. I find this style challenging to come up with something reasonable and win lose or draw it's fun anyway. Appreciate your time Cheers
Comment from Brett Matthew West
A nice glass of wine for many people is the cap for a hard day's work indeed as this well written 2-4-2 poem depicts. Noticed in your notes that "days" should be "day's," and "fitted" should be "fit". May want to consider these especially since this is a contest entry. Outside of that the entry is a good one. Well done.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2015
A nice glass of wine for many people is the cap for a hard day's work indeed as this well written 2-4-2 poem depicts. Noticed in your notes that "days" should be "day's," and "fitted" should be "fit". May want to consider these especially since this is a contest entry. Outside of that the entry is a good one. Well done.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2015
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Thanks Brett for your review and comments and helpful advice. I will revisit my notes and make corrections. Glad you thought it good anyway Cheers
Comment from royowen
I guess after a productive but hard day at work, it is reasonable to expect a relaxing reward, like a "snifter". A good entry in this 2/4/2 poetry contest, nice complimentary artwork, make this a worthy and qualifying entry, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015
I guess after a productive but hard day at work, it is reasonable to expect a relaxing reward, like a "snifter". A good entry in this 2/4/2 poetry contest, nice complimentary artwork, make this a worthy and qualifying entry, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015
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Thank you royowen for your time and review and your best wishes for the contest ( yes a little reward after a day's grind is often the way to go only one mind lol) Here's Cheers
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Hee hee, welcome.
Comment from angel123
I enjoyed reading your poem. It held my attention of course. It flows well and your artwork choice goes well with your thoughts.
Angel123
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015
I enjoyed reading your poem. It held my attention of course. It flows well and your artwork choice goes well with your thoughts.
Angel123
Comment Written 14-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015
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Thank you angel123 for stopping by to have a wine with me I appreciate your comments Here's Cheers
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements perfectly with a spot on line and syllable count. Ah the joys of happy hour once the daily grind is through. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015
This meets the contest requirements perfectly with a spot on line and syllable count. Ah the joys of happy hour once the daily grind is through. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015
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thank you Mystic Angel for your great review and best wishes for the contest. A bit of fun to write these glas you liked it Here's Cheers
Comment from ann marie mazz
hello poet
the theme is fun and enjoyable
the words set the scene
format is true
presentation is marvelous
all is well within the entry
thank you for sharing your talent
best of luck with the contest
ann marie
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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015
hello poet
the theme is fun and enjoyable
the words set the scene
format is true
presentation is marvelous
all is well within the entry
thank you for sharing your talent
best of luck with the contest
ann marie
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2015
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Thank you ann marie mazz for your great review and comments I' m glad you liked it and have a great day Here's Cheers