Comment from PoemsOfDD

Excellent

An enjoyable read. Life as a busy young adult without the care and responsibilities of life. I could see your daughter's hectic life as I read it. The picture and colour font all add to the story being told. Well done :-)

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2015

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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2015

Thanks so much! Yes I think young adulthood can be one of the best times of life.
The picture from fan review looks a little like my daughter!
Thanks again for stopping by! Looking forward to reading more of your work:)
Stacia

Comment from ciliverde

Excellent

Lovely artwork and a fun poem. I don't have children myself, but I can sure see this in my stepdaughter...the hair, the makeup, the LOAN, haha!

The only thing I'd add (just for me, personally) is the lack of getting a return text - Lol. I don't even try to call her anymore.

They have fun, don't they! Lovely piece.
-Carol

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2015

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2015

Thanks Carol again for stopping by! Your interest is so appreciated.
Step parents are parents too! I bet you're a great mom or co-mom if you will to your step daughter.
A great idea to consider for revision, the return or lack thereof of a text. Although my daughter does return mine...eventually. ..
Looking forward to reading your work !
Thanks again for stopping by.
Stacia

Comment from angel123

Excellent

I like your short poem about the life of a teenager. I enjoyed reading it and it flows well. Your artwork choice is wonderful. Good alliteration of words her hair in your second sentence.

Angel123

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015

Thanks so much for the reading and review, Angel! Much appreciated. Glad it worked for you. I'll have a look at your work as well as soon as possible.
Have a great weekend:)

Comment from TPAC

Excellent

Writer captures reader attention defining to them the young and their efforts in summer, I find it a delightful read, writer presentation of lines making this work precise in concepts

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015

Thanks so much for the reading and review! Much appreciated. Glad if you "felt" it in some way--I think what I intended came through. You're right--you have to be so precise in poetry, more so than in prose.
Thanks again. I'll stop by and look at your work when I can. Have a great weekend.

Comment from Mary H-W

Excellent

Mystery writer, I'm guessing you were once a teenage girl OR perhaps the father of a teenage girl. As a female myself, I can appreciate this insightful poem. Realistic, well told, and right to the point.
Well done, and good luck

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015

I think it's okay to reveal that I have the XX chromosome, LOL, so I'm writing from both memory and watching my daughter.
Thanks so much for the reading and review, much appreciated:)
I'll stop by and look at your work too as soon as I can.
Have a great weekend.

Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

This is very descriptive and well written. Th Teenager's lifestyle is well depicted. The presentation is nicely done and the word pattern sets the carefree mood of the poem

 Comment Written 09-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Jul-2015

Thanks so much Ryme for stopping by! Much appreciated that the poem's meaning and tone came through:)
Thanks again. I'll try to stop by and have a look at your portfolio soon.

reply by the author on 10-Jul-2015