Comment from Cass Carlton

Excellent

Am I wrong or do I see a typo in this delightful piece? should the last word be high?
No matter how I try I cannot get a perspective on 'sigh'
Anyway it is lovely Haiku, well done .cheers Cass

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015

Thanks for the review. Some people thought it was a typo, but I wanted sigh, sad because summer is over, cheers j

Comment from Ben Zedrine

Average

A good start but it could be made a bit less cliche with a few twists in the words. Also is sigh meant to be high? If so, try to come up with a different word to high.

I like the subject, a bit more improvement and it could paint a vivid picture.

Good luck.

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015

Thanks for the review Ben. I meant sigh, summer is over, cheers

reply by Ben Zedrine on 29-Jun-2015

My apologies. I understand now. That's actually pretty cool!

reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015

cheers

Comment from zanya

Excellent

A Haiku brimming with ambiance and impact of change 'crisp north wind' but so succinctly referencing seasonal transition 'bonfire sparks fly ' enabling poetry to do what is supposed to be its raison d'etre i.e stimulate our imagination

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015

Thanks for the insightful review zanya. I hated to write about autumn, since summer has just begun, but my muse is a little freak, cheers

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Your syllable count is right, the kigo is winter, the juxtaposion is drift and fly. The title was suppose to be-haiku (first line)
Good job with the haiku and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2015

Thanks Gypsy Rose for the encouraging review. I know I am supposed to put those brackets before the poem title, but I just find it annoying to use them.... really..I appreciate your thoughts on this , cheers

Comment from Eric1

Excellent

Hi Mystery author, this is an excellent entry for this particular competition.I love your choice of brilliant words they work perfectly, only one thing-

Should the final word be High and not sigh?

I wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015

Thanks for the review Eric. The sigh is my reaction to "end of summer" which those geese represent. I want it to be sad a little. cheers, I appreciate your thoughts on this one.

reply by Eric1 on 26-Jun-2015

Oops sorry my friend, that makes sense now.

reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015

cheers

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Good

I want to rate this before the contest is in effect, haiku is not supposed to rhyme and it will be knocked out by the committee. it's a beautiful write but needs to have some words switched around

beyond bare branches
geese turn to go toward south
azure sky watches

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015

Thanks for your timely advice. Don't know what I was thinking, I appreciate, cheers