2015 Haiku
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "haiku (sweet heavy air burns)"A collection of haiku I wrote in 2015
17 total reviews
Comment from Mark Schardine
The sunlight and the color of the grain produce not merely a stunning visual effect, but also cause to look forward to the autumn, to the harvest, when rich rewards are obtained.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2015
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The sunlight and the color of the grain produce not merely a stunning visual effect, but also cause to look forward to the autumn, to the harvest, when rich rewards are obtained.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2015
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Thank you Mark, you 'get it'
Comment from kiwisteveh
Wanna swap weathers? Cold and wet here today...
Your haiku presents a vivid picture of late summer/autumn fields particularly in the first two lines - you capture both the colour and the heavy feel of the atmosphere.
Good luck.
Steve
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2015
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Wanna swap weathers? Cold and wet here today...
Your haiku presents a vivid picture of late summer/autumn fields particularly in the first two lines - you capture both the colour and the heavy feel of the atmosphere.
Good luck.
Steve
Comment Written 02-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2015
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Thank you for the review and kind wishes
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
I think flowing wheat is one of the most beautiful sights nature has to offer. It is so graceful, almost like a thousand ballerina's. I also like the conformity of wheat, The stalks are so semetrically lined up, and the golden color is captivating, just like your poem!
Rhonda
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2015
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I think flowing wheat is one of the most beautiful sights nature has to offer. It is so graceful, almost like a thousand ballerina's. I also like the conformity of wheat, The stalks are so semetrically lined up, and the golden color is captivating, just like your poem!
Rhonda
Comment Written 02-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2015
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thank you rhonda, i appreciate your review :)
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As I do yours on my last poem! I told you before, I value your opinion!
Rhonda
Comment from AvL
To GBR:
Your well-chose words make me feel, and smell, this bucolic scene. Lines one and two may be read as interlinked grammatically and syntactically; and/or they may stand alone, and still make sense. The satori makes the reader long hopefully, expectantly, for the coming seasonal change. Good word-picture.
Haiku-guy
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2015
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To GBR:
Your well-chose words make me feel, and smell, this bucolic scene. Lines one and two may be read as interlinked grammatically and syntactically; and/or they may stand alone, and still make sense. The satori makes the reader long hopefully, expectantly, for the coming seasonal change. Good word-picture.
Haiku-guy
Comment Written 02-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2015
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Thank you Haiku gay, I appreciate your review.
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To GBR:
Haiku-guy, not Haiku-gay. No offense to LGBTT1Q people. Later.
Haiku-guy
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sorry LOL I meant haiku guy
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P.S. The phrase "well-chosen" should appear as it is spelled in this sentence. I apologize for the typo "well-chose" in my review.
Haiku-guy
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no worries :) I knew what you meant
Comment from seaglass
Being raised a country gal, I can appreciate the picture this poem paints. At harvest time there is a feel in the air and the dancing wheat fields are a beautiful sight.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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Being raised a country gal, I can appreciate the picture this poem paints. At harvest time there is a feel in the air and the dancing wheat fields are a beautiful sight.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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Thank you seaglass, I appreciate your review, specially coming from a country girl. :)
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is a super presentation. The artwork is awesome. Good job wit the syllable count. Your lines paint an awesome picture. When we have "heavy air" it is usually a temperature inversion and it is stifling.
Best wishes in the contest. Thank you for the video, too.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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This is a super presentation. The artwork is awesome. Good job wit the syllable count. Your lines paint an awesome picture. When we have "heavy air" it is usually a temperature inversion and it is stifling.
Best wishes in the contest. Thank you for the video, too.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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Thank you Jan, I really appreciate your review. :)
Comment from dragonpoet
You get an image of golden wheat stalks swaying in the wind before they are reaped by the farmer. You use both sight and sound well in this haiku. You get a feeling of late summer or early fall.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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You get an image of golden wheat stalks swaying in the wind before they are reaped by the farmer. You use both sight and sound well in this haiku. You get a feeling of late summer or early fall.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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Thank you dragonpoet, I appreciate your review. :)
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You're welcome.
dragonpoet
Comment from Jackarrie
Hi Gypsy,
I just love your haiku poem, it is so beautiful, I can just see in my minds eye the fields of gold dancing in the breeze. I played the video and I loved it.
I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Mary
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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Hi Gypsy,
I just love your haiku poem, it is so beautiful, I can just see in my minds eye the fields of gold dancing in the breeze. I played the video and I loved it.
I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Mary
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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Thank you Mary, I really appreciate your exceptional 6 star review. :)
Comment from danpald
I smell the wheat in the field
The time is close to cut with care
Gather the wheat into bales
Than move all to the barns as well
So the end of summer does fell
When now comes the turn to autumn thrills
Well this i think the contest to be
The season shown with the harvest to be
Good luck in the contest I entered as well
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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I smell the wheat in the field
The time is close to cut with care
Gather the wheat into bales
Than move all to the barns as well
So the end of summer does fell
When now comes the turn to autumn thrills
Well this i think the contest to be
The season shown with the harvest to be
Good luck in the contest I entered as well
Comment Written 26-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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Thank you Danpald, I really appreciate your review
Comment from boxergirl
Great picture and music to help set the tone for your haiku poem about harvest time in the country.
Good luck in the contest.
Karen
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2015
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Great picture and music to help set the tone for your haiku poem about harvest time in the country.
Good luck in the contest.
Karen
Comment Written 25-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2015
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Thank you boxergirl, I appreciate your review.