Comment from mvbrooks

Excellent

Interesting how a few brief lines can convey so much. You have two characters, a "conflict" and a suggestion of a positive result.

Your poem is light, positive, and touches on a universal theme--to have someone help you conquer the "odds."

Good luck with your contest.

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2015

Thanks for the review mvbrooks. I always find it much more satisfying to have someone to share the win. We went through a rough time and it looked like we would fail, but we won. That's where this came from, cheers

Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

This tetractys is well crafted and very expressive. It bears an encouraging message and shows accomplishment against all odds. Great job!

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2015

Thanks for the encouraging review. It is always more fun to share a victory with someone, cheers j

Comment from Jeanie Mercer

Excellent

I notice this has 25 syllables, instead of 20 as the prompt mentions. I'm thinking maybe they left something out and that you have more information than I do on the tetractys form. I love your upbeat message! Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2015

No, my mistake, and actually it runs better without that line. Thanks for your insightful review Jeanie, I appreciate your thoughts on this one, cheers

Comment from sweetwoodjax

Excellent

this is an excellent write, mystery writer, breathless is the way to be when you're with the one who makes your heart sing. I enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2015

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2015

Thanks for the encouraging review. Yes, victories are always sweeter with someone by your side, cheers