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Help me

kick me in the ass if I need it.

4 total reviews 
Comment from danpald
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Time comes to teach the truth
Love forms from many bruises
That over years become the glue
To remember that true love is truth

Always honest with each other
Forming the life that needs the other
Searching for the way to please the other
Then love becomes seen in no one else but the other

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
    Thank you for the unique review.
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
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This meets the contest requirements beautifully with a spot on line and syllable count. You deliver a lovely affirmation from a heartfelt plea for help. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you for sharing it.

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 06-Jun-2015
    Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Spunkywriter
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Your poem along with the picture speaks volume. After reading the poem, I was left to wonder about all the situation in which one cries out for help. It's riveting. Excellent.

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
    Thanks for the great review. The picture seemed a perfect match.
Comment from kiwisteveh
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There is a nice symmetry to your poem which fits sweetly with the balance of the Rictameter form. In particular, your identical beginning and ending lines don't sound forced, fitting in with the flow. I like the hint of rhyme in blister/whisper too and the message which is central to the piece.

Good luck - this should do well.

Steve

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 05-Jun-2015
    thanks for the great review.