Miscellaneous Poems - vol 3
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Comment from Judy Couch
Your poem has good rhyme and rhythm. It flows smoothly and describes a scene of tranquility and peace. It isn't quite like my vision of heaven, but it's close.
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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Your poem has good rhyme and rhythm. It flows smoothly and describes a scene of tranquility and peace. It isn't quite like my vision of heaven, but it's close.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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Perhaps it's more a description of utopia, or heaven on earth, from my perspective. Thank you Judy, for your kind words - they're much appreciated.
Comment from RYME4U
This is excellent. What delightful scenes you set! The words flow well, The rhythm is smooth and even. A very descriptive story told throughout. Exquisite work!
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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This is excellent. What delightful scenes you set! The words flow well, The rhythm is smooth and even. A very descriptive story told throughout. Exquisite work!
Comment Written 13-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much, RYME4U, for the wonderful rating, and for appreciating my poem. All the best to you, have a great day/evening!
Comment from DALLAS01
I journeyed on at quite a pace,
'Til I felt rain upon my face.
"What's this?" I thought, "In paradise
I'm sure there is no rain, or ice"
And as the fog began to lift
There came a realization, swift:
Now this stanza is my idea of Paradise.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
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I journeyed on at quite a pace,
'Til I felt rain upon my face.
"What's this?" I thought, "In paradise
I'm sure there is no rain, or ice"
And as the fog began to lift
There came a realization, swift:
Now this stanza is my idea of Paradise.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much for taking the time to read my poem. I'm glad you liked it, and thanks for the generous rating :-)
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements beautifully. I thoroughly enjoyed your perception of paradise as it incorporates all the elements of a transformed world I would like to see. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you for sharing it.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
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This meets the contest requirements beautifully. I thoroughly enjoyed your perception of paradise as it incorporates all the elements of a transformed world I would like to see. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you for sharing it.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
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Thank you so much for your very kind comments, and your generous rating. Thanks too for your good wishes - glad you enjoyed my poem.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I enjoyed reading your poem -To Heaven and Back- I really like the way you write. You did an awesome job with this. The lines rhyme well and and the format is nice, I like the picture too.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
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I enjoyed reading your poem -To Heaven and Back- I really like the way you write. You did an awesome job with this. The lines rhyme well and and the format is nice, I like the picture too.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2015
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Thanks very much for your kind comments, and for the excellent rating, Gypsy Blue Rose. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
What a journey to have been on, if only in a dream. This well written story should be a real good contest entry. Holds plenty of interest throughout.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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What a journey to have been on, if only in a dream. This well written story should be a real good contest entry. Holds plenty of interest throughout.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Thanks for checking out my poem, and I appreciate your kind comments :-)
Comment from TPAC
Simple wonderful in its conveyance this work presents an amazing story, poet assures their reader course holding their hand through trip I have one thought suggestion upon this work
All life is sacred, not just for man
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Simple wonderful in its conveyance this work presents an amazing story, poet assures their reader course holding their hand through trip I have one thought suggestion upon this work
All life is sacred, not just for man
Comment Written 08-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
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Thank you for taking the time time review my poem, and for your very kind comments. I appreciate the suggestion re the "not just for man" line - I've made note of it, and will look at it with some other suggestions I've received shortly. Thanks again.
Comment from Jackarrie
This is a beautifully written poem mystery author. I loved every stanza. Your dream was so beautiful to put down with a pen and share with us here on fanstory. The contents and the sentiments are supberb, I relate to it big time. I am rating this a six for exceptional.
Well done
Mary
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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This is a beautifully written poem mystery author. I loved every stanza. Your dream was so beautiful to put down with a pen and share with us here on fanstory. The contents and the sentiments are supberb, I relate to it big time. I am rating this a six for exceptional.
Well done
Mary
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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Wow, thank you so much Mary, for your time in checking out my poem, and especially for your very generous review. I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
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You are most welcome, Mary
Comment from Janelle
Well you pretty much described how I picture heaven, right there. It's not full of drifting angels, joyfully playing trumpets while we humans loll about sipping wine and eating grapes, or cake. It's just a place free of hate, envy, lust, greed and all they other things that make us humans turn on each other. I can't wait to get to your version! Well, I can, but I'm certainly looking forward to arriving there when I do fall off the perch! Great entry for the comp, well done and good luck. Regards, Jan
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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Well you pretty much described how I picture heaven, right there. It's not full of drifting angels, joyfully playing trumpets while we humans loll about sipping wine and eating grapes, or cake. It's just a place free of hate, envy, lust, greed and all they other things that make us humans turn on each other. I can't wait to get to your version! Well, I can, but I'm certainly looking forward to arriving there when I do fall off the perch! Great entry for the comp, well done and good luck. Regards, Jan
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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No wine, no cake? :-( Just kidding! Thanks so much for your kind words Jan, and for taking the time to check out my poem. Much appreciated.
Comment from I am Cat
Oh oh oh oh oh... yes.
THIS is truly deserving of my first six.
I was on my way somewhere else... and I found paradise...
Not that divided up labeled up put up segregated up messed up stuck up kind of paradise that I was afraid I was about to find... no.
TRUE paradise.
Well done.
The cadence had me loping along, and it was flawless.
Oh, I have to know who this is... because I know I know this person.
Well done.
bravo...
or shall I say...
brava? :)
Cat
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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Oh oh oh oh oh... yes.
THIS is truly deserving of my first six.
I was on my way somewhere else... and I found paradise...
Not that divided up labeled up put up segregated up messed up stuck up kind of paradise that I was afraid I was about to find... no.
TRUE paradise.
Well done.
The cadence had me loping along, and it was flawless.
Oh, I have to know who this is... because I know I know this person.
Well done.
bravo...
or shall I say...
brava? :)
Cat
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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Well, I can only say I'm absolutely thrilled you liked my poem, because I'm a huge fan of your work. If I gave you some enjoyment back in return for the fun I've had reading yours, that's great :) Thank you so very much for the wonderful rating, and your very kind words!