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The Honeymoon Is Over

A humorous 5-7-5 poem

9 total reviews 
Comment from Gert sherwood
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Hi Cedar

I can see why you received first prize.

My response doesn't the wife realize there is beauty to be found beneath the skin.

Gert

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
    Thanks Gert for your excellent review, I appreciate it. Have a blessed day. Bill
reply by Gert sherwood on 29-Jun-2015
    You are welcome Bill.

    gert
Comment from Louise Michelle
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LOL - I'm not big on these short, shorts unless it's written very well and especially with humor. Well, Cedar, you hit the jackpot. Thank you for putting a big old grin on my face. Hugs, Lou

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2015
    Thanks Lou. I'm glad it made you smile, that makes it all worthwhile. Have a great day my friend. Bill
Comment from l.raven
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HI Bill, you are such a nut...CONGRATEULATIONS on a great poem you...very funny....ya know I love it...so sorry I missed the contest...sigh...Luff Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 08-Jun-2015
    Thanks Linda, I'm really glad you liked it. That guy must have been really U-G-L-Y (ha). Take care of yourself my friend. Bill
reply by l.raven on 12-Jun-2015
    I know check your name more often...you are so welcome sweet man...you take care too...Luff xoox
Comment from NannaC43
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Well, it's funny but it's not...Does that make sense to you? From his view point, I felt a little sorry for him. He must look like a dog! But from her view point, she can see! So that says it all! I do think it was funny though, couldn't help myself!
The dog part, well, that was the reason for only four stars, I had to let someone know I felt a little sorry for the man. I guess I figured it was a little critical to put him down so badly but heck, a girls gotta do what a girls gotta do!

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
    Thank you Nanna for your review. It won the contest. Welcome to this site. If I can help you in anyway, just let me know. I'm in my 7th year here. Have a great day. Cedar (Bill).
reply by NannaC43 on 04-Jun-2015
    Thank you and congratulations!
Comment from danpald
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Love is blind they say
Better to keep it that way
Surgery of the eyes
Make the vision no surprise

Best result for the time
Have the bill sent to the lawyer
He made the seeing possible
For the price of being deny-able

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
    I really enjoyed your review my friend. It gave me a good laugh and I thank you for that. Have a great day...
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
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This meets the contest requirements nicely with a spot on line and syllable count. Maybe once she could see things didn't look quite so rosy any more LOL. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you for sharing it.

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
    Thank you Angel for your great review, I appreciate it. A lot of things don't look so good when you have a clear view of them (ha). Have a blessed day my friend.
Comment from TPAC
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Yeah that happens. Funny and giving a grinning charms
within message contents I like work simplicity either
presentation works as written both coherent in defined facts


after our marriage
my wife had eye surgery
then filed for divorce

after marriage my
wife had eye surgery done
then filed for divorce

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
    Thank you for your excellent review and your example works very well also. I like it. Have a great day.
Comment from donalola
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Funny, ironic, charming little thing you wrote here. You followed the rules and made me laugh with a simple 3 line. Your objective was making us smile, well done, you did. Expanding on it...how true it could be on the spiritual eye glasses we all carry!!
well done
Donalola

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
    Thank you for your excellent review and yes, I agree with you on the spiritual eyeglasses. Have a blessed day my friend.
reply by donalola on 03-Jun-2015
    Same to you dear!
    DL
Comment from LIJ Red
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Well, it's hard to review a one line joke with it's syllables arranged into five seven five format, even if it's a pretty good joke. Basically that is what the prompt demands, so this must be excellent.

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2015


reply by the author on 03-Jun-2015
    Yes, I agree with you. These 5-7-5 syllable poems are very hard to review, but as you said, that is what the contest rules demand. Thank you my friend for your excellent review.