Beautiful Death
Viewing comments for Chapter 10013 "10 little girls & monsters did play"from birth I have longed for death
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Comment from Walu Feral
G'day CJ. Take a bow mate. This is a fantastic piece of poetry and I am proud of you. The flow is beautiful and the story told in superb fashion. You should be proud of this one my friend, I wish I had a six to give you for it, but sadly they haven't come yet. No mistakes that I could see, well done, cheers Fez
reply by the author on 31-May-2015
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G'day CJ. Take a bow mate. This is a fantastic piece of poetry and I am proud of you. The flow is beautiful and the story told in superb fashion. You should be proud of this one my friend, I wish I had a six to give you for it, but sadly they haven't come yet. No mistakes that I could see, well done, cheers Fez
Comment Written 30-May-2015
reply by the author on 31-May-2015
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I have enjoyed your imput more than you could know.
Thank you!
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Once again, you have presented a beautiful poem about your life. Wow, what a wonderful way to tell about the ten of you and the monsters you met. The amount of words you used was few, but you transmitted a lot of information with it.
"One using her pen, she wrote with her might" - yea, that is you! Sorry you lost one of your babies, though.
I'm not a very good editor, but the only mistake I caught is: breath to breathe, and that's any easy mistake to make. (probably why I caught it).
Such a good job and a good story you have shared.
Rhonda
reply by the author on 30-May-2015
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Once again, you have presented a beautiful poem about your life. Wow, what a wonderful way to tell about the ten of you and the monsters you met. The amount of words you used was few, but you transmitted a lot of information with it.
"One using her pen, she wrote with her might" - yea, that is you! Sorry you lost one of your babies, though.
I'm not a very good editor, but the only mistake I caught is: breath to breathe, and that's any easy mistake to make. (probably why I caught it).
Such a good job and a good story you have shared.
Rhonda
Comment Written 30-May-2015
reply by the author on 30-May-2015
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Thank you again, for your great help.
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You are a good writer, and I enjoy reading your work. Oh, and I meant to say that I love the title. It really catches the attention.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Nice poem Cbat! I like the message of women fighting monsters, in life there are plenty of those. The style was rhyming some stanzas and free verse others. The format is good. No errors. Good job Cbat!
reply by the author on 30-May-2015
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Nice poem Cbat! I like the message of women fighting monsters, in life there are plenty of those. The style was rhyming some stanzas and free verse others. The format is good. No errors. Good job Cbat!
Comment Written 30-May-2015
reply by the author on 30-May-2015
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Thank you.
I wish I understood the poem words and styles.
I need to go back on line and educate myself on this.
I think I copied something from you.
But truly we were ten sisters with same biological mom.
Comment from lancellot
It has a good message and also tell of how the world gives and takes but we must continue to go out into and make the best life we can. Well done.
reply by the author on 30-May-2015
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It has a good message and also tell of how the world gives and takes but we must continue to go out into and make the best life we can. Well done.
Comment Written 30-May-2015
reply by the author on 30-May-2015
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Thank you!