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Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent horror story. It was very gruesome. The way it begun, I thought your protagonist was some kind of sex-beast, but soon enough I found myself entangled in the horror of a serial killer.
Good job!
reply by the author on 27-May-2015
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Excellent horror story. It was very gruesome. The way it begun, I thought your protagonist was some kind of sex-beast, but soon enough I found myself entangled in the horror of a serial killer.
Good job!
Comment Written 27-May-2015
reply by the author on 27-May-2015
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Thank you, GBR, for reviewing. I came in third in that horror story contest. Bill
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congratulations!
Comment from giraffmang
Hi Bill,
Firstly congratulations on the third place in this competition. Very nice.
This was totally en-gross-ing!! Very inventive and well executed.
Nice job
GMG
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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Hi Bill,
Firstly congratulations on the third place in this competition. Very nice.
This was totally en-gross-ing!! Very inventive and well executed.
Nice job
GMG
Comment Written 26-May-2015
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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Hey, how about that. You are the first to tell me. Thank you. Bill
Comment from amahra
Great job, my friend. This story is a combination of horror, some humor and all around good writing. Great entry for this contest.
reply by the author on 25-May-2015
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Great job, my friend. This story is a combination of horror, some humor and all around good writing. Great entry for this contest.
Comment Written 25-May-2015
reply by the author on 25-May-2015
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Thank you, amahra, for the excellent review. Bill
Comment from Brett Matthew West
See you are at it again. Well told story with an easy to follow story line. Action packed. A real good horror tale is always fun to read. Keep at it.
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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See you are at it again. Well told story with an easy to follow story line. Action packed. A real good horror tale is always fun to read. Keep at it.
Comment Written 23-May-2015
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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Thank you, Brett. I find that horror has to be campy to work in short fiction. Bill
Comment from Gloria ....
Terrific job with this, Bill. What a unique presentation with the horror writing unfolding in between fruitful, ambient experiences. I got quite the chuckle out of Amonia.
Your protagonist, a remorseless psychopathic killer is horrifying and fascinating in equal measure because of his naivety and pop culture intellect. Mixed in with great humour it comes off with the wry pathos of trying a new recipe whilst getting sloshed on fine wine.
Super entry to the contest. I wish you all the best.
Gloria
reply by the author on 19-May-2015
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Terrific job with this, Bill. What a unique presentation with the horror writing unfolding in between fruitful, ambient experiences. I got quite the chuckle out of Amonia.
Your protagonist, a remorseless psychopathic killer is horrifying and fascinating in equal measure because of his naivety and pop culture intellect. Mixed in with great humour it comes off with the wry pathos of trying a new recipe whilst getting sloshed on fine wine.
Super entry to the contest. I wish you all the best.
Gloria
Comment Written 19-May-2015
reply by the author on 19-May-2015
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Thank you, Gloria, for the enthusiastic, encouraging, and positive review. Bill
Comment from Jay Squires
Bill, if you don't make it as a horror writer, you might try putting out your resume as a hitman.
This is gory, but it's told in a humorous voice that makes the reader smile in spite of himself.
A couple of things to look at:
at the disembowel corpse, [the DISEMBOWELED corpse.]
. The one that was left, or right, looks dumb now, [Funny line!]
Last week I went back out to the McWendy farm. [Paragraph spacing error.]
Good job, Bill
reply by the author on 19-May-2015
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Bill, if you don't make it as a horror writer, you might try putting out your resume as a hitman.
This is gory, but it's told in a humorous voice that makes the reader smile in spite of himself.
A couple of things to look at:
at the disembowel corpse, [the DISEMBOWELED corpse.]
. The one that was left, or right, looks dumb now, [Funny line!]
Last week I went back out to the McWendy farm. [Paragraph spacing error.]
Good job, Bill
Comment Written 19-May-2015
reply by the author on 19-May-2015
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Thank you, Jay, for pointing those items out. I corrected them. I hoped to take the campy route with this.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Talk about getting into character for a story. This guy (I don't think you mentioned his name) has that part of the process down in spades.
Just think, it all began with an idea he had to write a horror story for a contest to win a hundred bucks.
I suppose in his instance, money is indeed the root of all evil.
In order to learn more about horror -- which repulsed him initially -- he set about to create and stage his own horrific events. He did everything from eviscerating two pretty college co-eds, to killing animals down on Old MCWendy's farm, killing and canning all the animals (and the farmers themselves), to killing a UPS driver, burying him in a shallow grave on the same farm, to sending a truck bomb into the tiger cage at the city zoo.
But hey, gaining knowledge and experience is important. When you're able to gain that knowledge, well...writing a horror story is easy.
A very unique premise and storyline, Bill. Bloody, gory and packed with morbid scenes of murder, madness and mayhem, I think this engaging, gut-wrenching page-turner will be a contender for top honors in this contest.
I wish you the best of luck...~Dean
reply by the author on 19-May-2015
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Talk about getting into character for a story. This guy (I don't think you mentioned his name) has that part of the process down in spades.
Just think, it all began with an idea he had to write a horror story for a contest to win a hundred bucks.
I suppose in his instance, money is indeed the root of all evil.
In order to learn more about horror -- which repulsed him initially -- he set about to create and stage his own horrific events. He did everything from eviscerating two pretty college co-eds, to killing animals down on Old MCWendy's farm, killing and canning all the animals (and the farmers themselves), to killing a UPS driver, burying him in a shallow grave on the same farm, to sending a truck bomb into the tiger cage at the city zoo.
But hey, gaining knowledge and experience is important. When you're able to gain that knowledge, well...writing a horror story is easy.
A very unique premise and storyline, Bill. Bloody, gory and packed with morbid scenes of murder, madness and mayhem, I think this engaging, gut-wrenching page-turner will be a contender for top honors in this contest.
I wish you the best of luck...~Dean
Comment Written 19-May-2015
reply by the author on 19-May-2015
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Thank you, Dean, for the terrific summary and vote of confidence. Bill
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My pleasure, Bill. Great story, and good luck.
~Dean