Comment from mermaids

Excellent

This is an excellent example of Christian fiction, it could be used in a Sunday School class. I like how God intervenes so the little girl can get water. Your theme is clear and you tell a story here.

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2015

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reply by the author on 07-Feb-2015

Thank you Miss Mermaid
for the review!

Comment from Eric1

Excellent

Hi Ricky, I enjoyed reading your wonderful story about the water my friend, there are strong characters and good use of description and imagery, You need to check it out for typos though, there are quite a few.

 Comment Written 06-Feb-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2015

Thankz so much Eric.
"Glad you like and I will review!"
Ricky1024

reply by Eric1 on 07-Feb-2015

You are very welcome Ricky

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

I love this I love the happy ending that God prevailed...I love the names..
Annie Oakley a true Wild West heroine...
There are several typos Prowritingaid helps with that
God bless

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2015

Thankz so much my Miss kiwi!
"Marry me and we will have a tree of KIWIS!"
LOL!
ricky1024

reply by kiwijenny on 06-Feb-2015

Lol

Comment from Walu Feral

Excellent

G'day Ricky. I haven't seen you post for a little while mate. As always I can see the improvement in your writing. I hope things are going well for you. Cheers and peace Fez

 Comment Written 05-Feb-2015

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reply by the author on 06-Feb-2015

Thankx Master Fez.
"Gotta review you and friends.
"This piece follows now with the Donkey "Bray" one! "
ricky1024