Until The Waters Flow Again
Stacked 5-7-5 free verse13 total reviews
Comment from amanda98653
This is an impressive write, Mikey!!
The format is a cool trickster. Readers have to journey through the bone-chilling aspect of love, to read till the very end to discover the hidden completion of the poem.
Love these poignant verses:
"bones lay in repose
the ocean has no mem'ry
deserts once
knew seas"
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Amanda
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This is an impressive write, Mikey!!
The format is a cool trickster. Readers have to journey through the bone-chilling aspect of love, to read till the very end to discover the hidden completion of the poem.
Love these poignant verses:
"bones lay in repose
the ocean has no mem'ry
deserts once
knew seas"
Hugs
Amanda
Comment Written 04-Oct-2014
Comment from Dawn Munro
Wow, this is a MOST impressive stacked 5-7-5 entry - absolutely superb imagery, powerful language and marvelous flow from one 5-7-5 to the next. Dark and lovely! Six stars, if only I had any left!
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reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Wow, this is a MOST impressive stacked 5-7-5 entry - absolutely superb imagery, powerful language and marvelous flow from one 5-7-5 to the next. Dark and lovely! Six stars, if only I had any left!
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Comment Written 03-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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I am so delighted you enjoyed it. I did try to tie them together. A virtual six will do just fine. What a positive review. Thank you so much. I almost won! mikey
Comment from Jackarrie
I enjoyed reading this stacked 5-7-5 entry, Some very well chosen words to express the sentiments.
ones lay in repose
the ocean has no mem'ry
deserts once knew seas
Well written and presented, good luck in the contest. Mary
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I enjoyed reading this stacked 5-7-5 entry, Some very well chosen words to express the sentiments.
ones lay in repose
the ocean has no mem'ry
deserts once knew seas
Well written and presented, good luck in the contest. Mary
Comment Written 02-Oct-2014
Comment from GracieAnn
This Stacked 5-7-5 writing prompt entry is creative in presentation and dark in its content. The dark takes the reader by surprise. Very powerfully done. All the best in the contest. :0 GracieAnn
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This Stacked 5-7-5 writing prompt entry is creative in presentation and dark in its content. The dark takes the reader by surprise. Very powerfully done. All the best in the contest. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 02-Oct-2014
Comment from ProjectBluebook
This must be a repeat 5/7/5. I know this feeling. Lots of stanzas. Excellent word choices and character. Flows good, the picture relates to the poem. Nice image. I wish you luck in the contest. Count your doubloon. do loco
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This must be a repeat 5/7/5. I know this feeling. Lots of stanzas. Excellent word choices and character. Flows good, the picture relates to the poem. Nice image. I wish you luck in the contest. Count your doubloon. do loco
Comment Written 02-Oct-2014
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements nicely. This is a style I publish quite frequently so I tend to be picky about them since they have become my favorite writing style over the past few months. Each stanza stands alone well, more importantly, you flow in a smooth progression from beginning to end. The imagery is well done and you avoid those little filler words for the most part which improves the overall experience. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
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This meets the contest requirements nicely. This is a style I publish quite frequently so I tend to be picky about them since they have become my favorite writing style over the past few months. Each stanza stands alone well, more importantly, you flow in a smooth progression from beginning to end. The imagery is well done and you avoid those little filler words for the most part which improves the overall experience. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you so much for sharing this with me.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2014
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Great picture. I like the way you have arranged the lines under the picture. The flow is very good. I feel the arrangement just guides the reader from verse to verse. No changes. Good job and good luck in the contest.
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Great picture. I like the way you have arranged the lines under the picture. The flow is very good. I feel the arrangement just guides the reader from verse to verse. No changes. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2014
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
I noticed that the formatting on this causes some of the lines in the first and last stanzas to appear with the wrong syllable counts. To keep out of trouble with the compliance committee, I'd suggest making the formatting plainer and the letters a bit smaller. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014
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I noticed that the formatting on this causes some of the lines in the first and last stanzas to appear with the wrong syllable counts. To keep out of trouble with the compliance committee, I'd suggest making the formatting plainer and the letters a bit smaller. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 01-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2014
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Hi. I'm not sure what you are viewing this on. It looks perfect, even on my wife's notebook. I checked the syllable count a hundred times. Maybe I'm missing something, it wouldn't be the first time!! The first three lines are staggered and the last line is offset a bit, but it's pretty straight forward. thank you for your diligence. If you have any word or phrase you could point out that would help. I'll keep looking at it!
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I'm going to assume the problem is with my computer, since it looks okay on your and your wife's screens. I have changed the rating to 5 stars. I suppose the staggering and offsetting of the lines is what causes the problem. I feel sure you must have counted the syllables correctly. Sorry for the hassle.
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Oh, no problem! When I had a smaller screen I had a terrible time reading Reconciled's pieces. He's another one of those giant letter guys. Sounds like a horror story! :)
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By the way, THANK YOU for taking the time to notice. I've been disqualified four times!! Hahaha. Most of them where for easy fixes that none of my reviewers paid any attention to. I always keep that in mind when it's a contest. No fun getting disqualified. Glad to see I'm not the only one looking! :)
Comment from onebrit
This is beautiful in a very menacing way. It is sad, and also forward looking at the same time. I love the artwork that compliments the words so well. I can tell you took a lot of time with making it perfect. Nicely done.
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This is beautiful in a very menacing way. It is sad, and also forward looking at the same time. I love the artwork that compliments the words so well. I can tell you took a lot of time with making it perfect. Nicely done.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2014
Comment from sweetwoodjax
there's excellent imagery presented in these 5 7 5 poems, especially the last stanza, deserts were once oceans. I enjoyed reading them and wish you the best of luck in the contest.
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there's excellent imagery presented in these 5 7 5 poems, especially the last stanza, deserts were once oceans. I enjoyed reading them and wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2014