Apollo's First Love
Rondeau Redouble28 total reviews
Comment from May 1
I love the image that this creates in my mind. Your choice of vocabulary is simply magical. It's also very exciting and fun to read. All in all, I really enjoyed reading this. P.s. since my membership is expiring in a day or two I just wanted to say that I admire your work and feel honored that I had the privilege to read it. I wish you all the best in your future endeavors.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2020
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I love the image that this creates in my mind. Your choice of vocabulary is simply magical. It's also very exciting and fun to read. All in all, I really enjoyed reading this. P.s. since my membership is expiring in a day or two I just wanted to say that I admire your work and feel honored that I had the privilege to read it. I wish you all the best in your future endeavors.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2020
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Hi May 1,
Thank you so much for the terrific six star rating and the encouraging comments about the writing.
I am sad to hear you are leaving. I always look forward to reading your work.
Comment from adewpearl
solid use of abab rhyming
effective use of this form's repeat lines derived from the opening stanza
excellent use of steady iambic meter and enjambment to give the poem good cadence and flow
a most effective closing
love the emotion and the story line
Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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solid use of abab rhyming
effective use of this form's repeat lines derived from the opening stanza
excellent use of steady iambic meter and enjambment to give the poem good cadence and flow
a most effective closing
love the emotion and the story line
Brooke :-)
Comment Written 04-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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Thank you for the upbeat and encouraging review, Brooke. I worried a little about the closing so thank you for mentioning that it worked! Debi
Comment from michaelcahill
Well you have saved me the stress of being thrashed by YOU in the contest. Hahaha. You have just nailed this!! Wow. The story is concise and easy to follow. The repeated lines make perfect sense in every case and move the story along quickly. The ending line is genius. I declare you the winner in abstentia. It doesn't get any better. Well done, mikey
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Well you have saved me the stress of being thrashed by YOU in the contest. Hahaha. You have just nailed this!! Wow. The story is concise and easy to follow. The repeated lines make perfect sense in every case and move the story along quickly. The ending line is genius. I declare you the winner in abstentia. It doesn't get any better. Well done, mikey
Comment Written 02-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Hi Mikey. It is good to hear from you. Thank you so much for the wonderful review, full of such nice comments about the writing. We will never know since I didn't enter, but it is nice of you to give me your nod in absentia. You seem to do quite well in the contests lately. I hope you do well in this one too. I am not sure which entry is yours, but the voting should be done soon. Good luck, and thank you for the encouragement. Debi
Comment from Leigh Ann
How brilliantly you have taken this tale and spun it into a great work of poetry. Thanks for the explanation of the story. You did an excellent job here. It deserves this 6 star rating.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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How brilliantly you have taken this tale and spun it into a great work of poetry. Thanks for the explanation of the story. You did an excellent job here. It deserves this 6 star rating.
Comment Written 01-Oct-2014
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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Thank you for the wonderful galaxy of six stars, Leigh Ann. I appreciate the wonderful comments. Thank you so much for the encouragement! Debi
Comment from onebrit
Thank you for all that lovely information in the authors notes, it was amazing how much I learned. The picture was perfect as always and I loved the poem, so beautifully written.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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Thank you for all that lovely information in the authors notes, it was amazing how much I learned. The picture was perfect as always and I loved the poem, so beautifully written.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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Thank you for the wonderful review with its encouraging comments. I am glad you enjoyed the notes. This is one of my favorite myths, but I'm not sure how many are familiar with it. Thank you for dropping by. I appreciate it.
Comment from flamingstar
Most cleverly done. This is very difficult to do and it's a shame you did not enter the contest. I'm always astounded by people's creativity, which is why I'm enjoying this site so much.
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Most cleverly done. This is very difficult to do and it's a shame you did not enter the contest. I'm always astounded by people's creativity, which is why I'm enjoying this site so much.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Thank you for the encouraging comments and the very shiny six stars. I am still smiling! I enjoyed writing it and am pleased you enjoyed reading it. Thank you! Debi
Comment from Mastery
Hi, deb. Sorry I haven's seen much of your writes lately. As you know, I have been away. This is a magical write, I liked very much. Especially these lines:
"twigs sprout from fingers, leaves then grow
and laurel bark engulfs her frame.
Apollo shouts a plaintive, "No!"
The golden dart of Love's acclaim"
Bravo! Bob
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Hi, deb. Sorry I haven's seen much of your writes lately. As you know, I have been away. This is a magical write, I liked very much. Especially these lines:
"twigs sprout from fingers, leaves then grow
and laurel bark engulfs her frame.
Apollo shouts a plaintive, "No!"
The golden dart of Love's acclaim"
Bravo! Bob
Comment Written 30-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2014
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Hi Bob,
It is good to hear from you. I hope all is going well with getting your book launched.
Thank you so much for the encouraging review. I appreciate it. Debi
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Hi, my friend. Fatal Beauty will be released February 26, 2015. :) Bob
Comment from c_lucas
All is fair in Love and War. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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All is fair in Love and War. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very interesting read. There is good imagery.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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Thank you, Charlie. I appreciate the encouraging comments. Debi
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You're welcome, Debi. Charlie
Comment from GracieAnn
W.j., this Rondeau Redouble is well composed and follows the prescribed elements with natural flow of thought and meaning. Well done. All the best in the contest. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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W.j., this Rondeau Redouble is well composed and follows the prescribed elements with natural flow of thought and meaning. Well done. All the best in the contest. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 30-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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Thank you for the kind comments, GracieAnn. I appreciate the good luck wishes and encouragement. Debi
Comment from Spitfire
I love these mythology stories and you tell them so well in verse. Good use of enjambment between stanzas. Apollo, the stalker. LOL. With Daddy's spell he can wear Daphne forever.
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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I love these mythology stories and you tell them so well in verse. Good use of enjambment between stanzas. Apollo, the stalker. LOL. With Daddy's spell he can wear Daphne forever.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2014
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I love your review. The thought of Apollo being a stalker did cross my mind, but not the part about him wearing Daphne forever. You are so right. Looks like Apollo get what he wanted anyway, just not the way he expected. LOL