Flies (1-6-1 contest)
Toroment of many flies.6 total reviews
Comment from NurseBarb
I really like your 1-6-1 entry and can relate to this as I can't stand those disgusting things. I also like your author notes explaining a little more about the daily hassles you endure with them. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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I really like your 1-6-1 entry and can relate to this as I can't stand those disgusting things. I also like your author notes explaining a little more about the daily hassles you endure with them. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2014
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thank you for your awesome review and gracious stars. This was my first attempt with this type of poetry, I found it stimulating. Thank you again and God Bless.
Comment from emrpoems
Flies
Invading from the skies
Surprise ---sur / prise
Your syllable count in the 3rd line should be 1-one syllable.
Change before contest voting begins and I will also upgrade .
I have upgraded since your change
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Flies
Invading from the skies
Surprise ---sur / prise
Your syllable count in the 3rd line should be 1-one syllable.
Change before contest voting begins and I will also upgrade .
I have upgraded since your change
Comment Written 22-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Wow, thank you so much for catching this. I can't believe I did that, I will definitely modify. God Bless!
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It has been revised, thank you again.
Comment from Dawny53
Good luck to you with these pests! After reading your piece I feel ashamed for being so upset with my little fruit flies.You have much bigger battles!
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Good luck to you with these pests! After reading your piece I feel ashamed for being so upset with my little fruit flies.You have much bigger battles!
Comment Written 22-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Thank you very much for the awesome star count and review. Fruit flies are just as bad by the way. I understand their purpose but man!
God Bless!
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This meets the criteria as stated for this prompt as to form and syllable count. It is on an unusual subject. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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This meets the criteria as stated for this prompt as to form and syllable count. It is on an unusual subject. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 22-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Thank you for your kind words and stars, I deal with flies often so I thought I would share lol.
Comment from patcelaw
The photo alone conjured up feelings in me. I hate flies with a passion. But your rendering in the short write in only 3 lines with only 6 words in the end made me smile, but that does not keep me from hating flies.
Pat
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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The photo alone conjured up feelings in me. I hate flies with a passion. But your rendering in the short write in only 3 lines with only 6 words in the end made me smile, but that does not keep me from hating flies.
Pat
Comment Written 22-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Thank you for your kind review and stars and I certainly don't like the little critters myself.
Comment from Wendyanne
Yuk sounds horrendous! I hate flies especially in swarms. You have described the experience well with just a few words and alliteration. good luck.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Yuk sounds horrendous! I hate flies especially in swarms. You have described the experience well with just a few words and alliteration. good luck.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2014
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Thank you for the awesome star count and review. Not big fan of the critters myself.