Ain't That The Truth
Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "senryu (nine needles needed) "Short poems poking fun at the human condition.
27 total reviews
Comment from chasennov
Chapter 30 of the book Burning Memories Self-discovery begins "The Dawning" I thought Tasers were only used by the cops to subdue some unfortunate soul. A sore tooth? Well done.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Chapter 30 of the book Burning Memories Self-discovery begins "The Dawning" I thought Tasers were only used by the cops to subdue some unfortunate soul. A sore tooth? Well done.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Glad you noted the analogy. It's great to have poetic license. :-)
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You're precious!
Comment from Sasha
I had all my teeth pulled 10 years ago and haven't been back to the dentist since! I don't suggest that's what you do, but seems going to the dentist is not fun for you.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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I had all my teeth pulled 10 years ago and haven't been back to the dentist since! I don't suggest that's what you do, but seems going to the dentist is not fun for you.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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My husband did the same thing rather than have his cavities fixed. He's been wearing dentures since age 35.
Comment from Selina Stambi
HI Shari,
The alliteration in the first line is very effective.
NINE needles?? Ouch! You must be a hard nut to crack!
Nice one, dear.
Love,
Sonali
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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HI Shari,
The alliteration in the first line is very effective.
NINE needles?? Ouch! You must be a hard nut to crack!
Nice one, dear.
Love,
Sonali
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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THe dentist kept testing my lip and gum with a probe. Since I kept flinching, she laid it on-- eager to get the job over with.
But hardly any pain or swelling after it all, so my mouth is in good shaped for a while.
Comment from Muffins
Humorous poem with perfect alliteration using: nine, needle and needed. The description of pain is sensory accurate. I say this because 10 years I had a tooth pulled and required 6 to 7 shots of Novocaine and gas before the Dentist could start. It took days for the numbness and puffiness in my gums and lips to go down. Eating and talking wasn't painful but awkward.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Humorous poem with perfect alliteration using: nine, needle and needed. The description of pain is sensory accurate. I say this because 10 years I had a tooth pulled and required 6 to 7 shots of Novocaine and gas before the Dentist could start. It took days for the numbness and puffiness in my gums and lips to go down. Eating and talking wasn't painful but awkward.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Ouch! I got lucky. Hardly any pain or swelling. I imagine your tooth was firmly imbedded. Mine wiggled a little. But not anymore. :-)
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It was in like Flynn!
Comment from mermaids
Your words give me chills,novocaine is not fun. I like how you use the letter N frequently and it adds to the strength of the poem.
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Your words give me chills,novocaine is not fun. I like how you use the letter N frequently and it adds to the strength of the poem.
Comment Written 08-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 08-Sep-2014
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Thanks for the specific review, my friend.
Comment from boxergirl
Great job with the alliteration of n's and your descriptive details are realistic and make it easy for us to connect to your senryu. I can't even feel the slobber running off the edge of my left lift. 8-)
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014
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Great job with the alliteration of n's and your descriptive details are realistic and make it easy for us to connect to your senryu. I can't even feel the slobber running off the edge of my left lift. 8-)
Comment Written 07-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014
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Very clever review- slobber off left lift. LOL
We do talk funny when numbed.
Comment from drivenbackward
Been to the dentist lately? I can relate. I've had a lot of work done on my teeth through the years. Finally got veneers/caps. Good poem.
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014
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Been to the dentist lately? I can relate. I've had a lot of work done on my teeth through the years. Finally got veneers/caps. Good poem.
Comment Written 07-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014
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I've poured so much money into my mouth in spite of the brushing and flossing. I had some caps once but eventually tooth underneath rotted or need a root canal.
Comment from Rosalyne
Hi, Shari.
Ouch! Just the idea of sitting in the dentist chair makes me cringe. Your middle line describes so well the result of the nine needles. I hope your feeling better! Great post.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014
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Hi, Shari.
Ouch! Just the idea of sitting in the dentist chair makes me cringe. Your middle line describes so well the result of the nine needles. I hope your feeling better! Great post.
Bye
Rosalyne :)
Comment Written 07-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014
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I'm glad I had it pulled although I tried to back out at the last moment. Decay is not good!
Comment from Patti R.
Before I start sympathizing about the discomfort, let me say wow! to this little gem. Please pardon me for saying, it rolled off the numb tongue like a cool drop of water. So smooth. That middle line is a beaut!
My dentist does the same, tries to preserve all the healthy natural teeth.
Patti
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014
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Before I start sympathizing about the discomfort, let me say wow! to this little gem. Please pardon me for saying, it rolled off the numb tongue like a cool drop of water. So smooth. That middle line is a beaut!
My dentist does the same, tries to preserve all the healthy natural teeth.
Patti
Comment Written 07-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014
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LOL. Such a poetic review. Our dentists must have gone to the same school.
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Ouch, ouch and double ouch....... Excellent alliteration in:
nine needles needed
I enjoyed the internal rhyme in tongue--gum
Well done, hope you are feeling ok after this 'naughty tooth' experience.
:-) Carolyn
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014
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Ouch, ouch and double ouch....... Excellent alliteration in:
nine needles needed
I enjoyed the internal rhyme in tongue--gum
Well done, hope you are feeling ok after this 'naughty tooth' experience.
:-) Carolyn
Comment Written 06-Sep-2014
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2014
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Thanks, Carolyn, for the detailed review. Fortunately, I experienced only mild swelling and pain. I'm brand new now.