cygnets
Summer Fun9 total reviews
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi deepwater - I hate to give such a low rating but really your work has not followed any of the prompt rules. I think you must have misread. If you have time to edit I shall be happy to re-rate your work. Kind regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Hi deepwater - I hate to give such a low rating but really your work has not followed any of the prompt rules. I think you must have misread. If you have time to edit I shall be happy to re-rate your work. Kind regards Dorothy
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Thanks
Comment from Debra White
Hi deepwater :)
I like your poem and I'd like to be able to rate it higher than 3 stars but unfortunately it doesn't adhere to any of the contest rules - as follows:
The poem is to be a 5-7-5 poem (line 1: 5 syllables, line 2: 7 syllables, line 3: 5 syllables)
your syllable count is 5-4-4;
Flit/ter/ing/cyg/nets (5)
Re/spond/in/ranks (4)
To/mo/thers/call (4)
The poem should be an acrostic poem (The first letter of each line should spell a word) That word should spell the subject of what the poem is about.
Your acrostic is FRT (which isn't a word!) - and your subject is Cygnets.
You still have time to edit your entry to adhere to the contest rules. I will be happy to reassess and regrade should you amend your entry - let me know if you do!
Kindest regards, Debra :)
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Hi deepwater :)
I like your poem and I'd like to be able to rate it higher than 3 stars but unfortunately it doesn't adhere to any of the contest rules - as follows:
The poem is to be a 5-7-5 poem (line 1: 5 syllables, line 2: 7 syllables, line 3: 5 syllables)
your syllable count is 5-4-4;
Flit/ter/ing/cyg/nets (5)
Re/spond/in/ranks (4)
To/mo/thers/call (4)
The poem should be an acrostic poem (The first letter of each line should spell a word) That word should spell the subject of what the poem is about.
Your acrostic is FRT (which isn't a word!) - and your subject is Cygnets.
You still have time to edit your entry to adhere to the contest rules. I will be happy to reassess and regrade should you amend your entry - let me know if you do!
Kindest regards, Debra :)
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Comment from IndianaIrish
I'm so sorry to give your poem a low rating, but I'm afraid you need to read the rules to this contest. First of all, you need the first letter of the first word of each line to spell a word. That is an acrostic poem. The rules has an example, and you can also read some of the other entries to see examples of acrostic.
The rules also state this needs to have three lines with 5-7-5 syllable count. Your poem is presently 5-4-4 syllable count.
mothers (mother's) call
I fear your poem will be disqualified since the rules are not followed, deepwater, but I think you have time to make corrections before the voting starts. Please let me know when you fix the,poem, and I'll be happy to upgrade the rating. If you would like any help, please PM me.
Smiles,
Indy : )
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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I'm so sorry to give your poem a low rating, but I'm afraid you need to read the rules to this contest. First of all, you need the first letter of the first word of each line to spell a word. That is an acrostic poem. The rules has an example, and you can also read some of the other entries to see examples of acrostic.
The rules also state this needs to have three lines with 5-7-5 syllable count. Your poem is presently 5-4-4 syllable count.
mothers (mother's) call
I fear your poem will be disqualified since the rules are not followed, deepwater, but I think you have time to make corrections before the voting starts. Please let me know when you fix the,poem, and I'll be happy to upgrade the rating. If you would like any help, please PM me.
Smiles,
Indy : )
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Comment from sweetwoodjax
this isn't the correct format, deepwater, it is an acrostic but it is not in the required 5 7 5 format. you still have time to change it before the contest begins....
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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this isn't the correct format, deepwater, it is an acrostic but it is not in the required 5 7 5 format. you still have time to change it before the contest begins....
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Comment from lancellot
Well I read it several times, but I'm afraid I don understand this one with notes, I may have to cheat and use Google. But that is my fault. Good luck
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Well I read it several times, but I'm afraid I don understand this one with notes, I may have to cheat and use Google. But that is my fault. Good luck
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Thank you
Comment from Eigle Rull
This poem is a hard one to review as it is so short. I did not know what a cygnet is so I looked it up and found it to be a young swan. That makes this poem come to live with meaning. Very good subject and very good description.
Always with respect,
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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This poem is a hard one to review as it is so short. I did not know what a cygnet is so I looked it up and found it to be a young swan. That makes this poem come to live with meaning. Very good subject and very good description.
Always with respect,
Comment Written 22-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2014
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Thank you Eigle
Comment from giovannimariatommaso
I learned a new word; yes, they do look beautiful all in a row, & again I look on the net to make sure & I see beautiful Swans in a row & in a group huddle.
I don't see any spelling or grammatical errors.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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I learned a new word; yes, they do look beautiful all in a row, & again I look on the net to make sure & I see beautiful Swans in a row & in a group huddle.
I don't see any spelling or grammatical errors.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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thank you
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Y/W GMT
Comment from c_lucas
This is one that could actually benefit with an image. It made me do some research. This is a well written acrostic. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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This is one that could actually benefit with an image. It made me do some research. This is a well written acrostic. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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thank you
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You're welcome, Gary. Charlie
Comment from adewpearl
flittering cygnets has 5 syllables as required
respond in ranks has only 4 syllables where you need 7
line 3 has only 4 syllables instead of 5
I like the alliteration in line two
mother's call - add the apostrophe for possessive
you appeal to the sense of sound well and create a lovely scene
FRT = that is also not an acrostic
the 3 rating is because having a 5/7/5 syllable count is a key element in this contest and so is being an acrostic
Brooke
flit/ter/ing/cyg/nets - that is 5 syllables
re/spond/in/ranks - that is 4 syllables
to moth/ers/call - that is 4 syllables
that is the same count I got before - the count is supposed to be 5/7/5, not 5/4/4 - I don't understand why you think I need to recount
also, your opening letters do not spell anything out - FRT does not spell something, so this is also not an acrostic
Brooke
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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flittering cygnets has 5 syllables as required
respond in ranks has only 4 syllables where you need 7
line 3 has only 4 syllables instead of 5
I like the alliteration in line two
mother's call - add the apostrophe for possessive
you appeal to the sense of sound well and create a lovely scene
FRT = that is also not an acrostic
the 3 rating is because having a 5/7/5 syllable count is a key element in this contest and so is being an acrostic
Brooke
flit/ter/ing/cyg/nets - that is 5 syllables
re/spond/in/ranks - that is 4 syllables
to moth/ers/call - that is 4 syllables
that is the same count I got before - the count is supposed to be 5/7/5, not 5/4/4 - I don't understand why you think I need to recount
also, your opening letters do not spell anything out - FRT does not spell something, so this is also not an acrostic
Brooke
Comment Written 21-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2014
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you need to recount
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I just added to my review after I recounted - my comments still stand as my count and other observations were spot on.