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Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "dog dreams"collection of poems and short stories
5 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 format
I just LOVE your concept of what a dog would dream of, the ideal life in which walks go on for miles and miles and cats have only three legs so they can be easily caught :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 format
I just LOVE your concept of what a dog would dream of, the ideal life in which walks go on for miles and miles and cats have only three legs so they can be easily caught :-) Brooke
Comment Written 04-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2014
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Cheers Brooke and thanks for the review. I was going to have the cat driving a spam truck... slowly.. but figured that I would go with the three legs, thanks
Comment from victor 66
Hello. You definitely wrote a humorous 5-7-5 ending with 17 total syllable count. I found it very funny. This contest is a tough one to vote on because so many are so very good. Best of luck.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2014
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Hello. You definitely wrote a humorous 5-7-5 ending with 17 total syllable count. I found it very funny. This contest is a tough one to vote on because so many are so very good. Best of luck.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2014
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Thanks for your review and encouraging words, cheers
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You bet.
Comment from donette1914
this is one happy camper a dog that go on a trail like this and three feet bones, what a amazing photo and i felt this was a adorable it was a pleasure
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2014
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this is one happy camper a dog that go on a trail like this and three feet bones, what a amazing photo and i felt this was a adorable it was a pleasure
Comment Written 03-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2014
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Thanks for the review. One reviewer pointed out that it was a 3 5 3 instead of a 5 7 5, so I changed it... I must have been dreaming hah
Comment from Glasstruth
LOL. Now, I know what paradise must be for a dog. Especially those three foot long bones, I think my dog would like that. Great humor! Les
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2014
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LOL. Now, I know what paradise must be for a dog. Especially those three foot long bones, I think my dog would like that. Great humor! Les
Comment Written 03-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2014
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Thanks for the review. One reviewer pointed out that it was supposed to be a 575 not 353, so I changed it...I must have been dreaming hah
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
I really love this entry, but there's a problem: The contest calls for lines of 5-7-5 syllables, and this one has 3-5-3 syllables. I bet you can change it, if you want to, before the contest closes. (Let me know if you do and I will change the rating to 5 stars). Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2014
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I really love this entry, but there's a problem: The contest calls for lines of 5-7-5 syllables, and this one has 3-5-3 syllables. I bet you can change it, if you want to, before the contest closes. (Let me know if you do and I will change the rating to 5 stars). Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 02-Jun-2014
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2014
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Thanks for the heads up Jeanie, I have changed it to 575 and hope you like it...I must have been dreaming hah, cheers
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Looks great! I also changed my rating to 5 stars.