Poetry From The Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Bard of Avon"A book in honor of National poetry writing month.
20 total reviews
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the poem. Shakespeare has lasted over 4 centuries. He was a great poet. People can still relate to him. He wrote about people. He wrote about peoples problems. Most of these problems never change. Great work.
reply by the author on 06-May-2014
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I love the poem. Shakespeare has lasted over 4 centuries. He was a great poet. People can still relate to him. He wrote about people. He wrote about peoples problems. Most of these problems never change. Great work.
Comment Written 02-May-2014
reply by the author on 06-May-2014
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Selina Stambi
Hello, my dear friend,
I've been busy and not had time to get into my mailbox - missed the payout .. darn it! (But you know I don't read your stuff for payment - but because we're friends and I do enjoy your work, Santha. :))
You did well with the sonnet. It's not an easy form to write - keeping track of the rules. A great topic - to laud Shakespeare in his own chosen poetic medium. :)
Just one thing, dear ... the lines below (and this could be me being up late tonight!) ... the iambic pentameter seemed to stumble. Just go back and check to make sure you have the five week/strong accents on these lines - maybe it was just me)
Have a lovely weekend. My best wishes go with you in the contest.
All my love,
xxx
Sonali :)
Lovers thwarted by hate's loudest pitch
Timeless tales of men with fatal flaws
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2014
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Hello, my dear friend,
I've been busy and not had time to get into my mailbox - missed the payout .. darn it! (But you know I don't read your stuff for payment - but because we're friends and I do enjoy your work, Santha. :))
You did well with the sonnet. It's not an easy form to write - keeping track of the rules. A great topic - to laud Shakespeare in his own chosen poetic medium. :)
Just one thing, dear ... the lines below (and this could be me being up late tonight!) ... the iambic pentameter seemed to stumble. Just go back and check to make sure you have the five week/strong accents on these lines - maybe it was just me)
Have a lovely weekend. My best wishes go with you in the contest.
All my love,
xxx
Sonali :)
Lovers thwarted by hate's loudest pitch
Timeless tales of men with fatal flaws
Comment Written 26-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2014
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Sonali, I know you dont review my posts for payment ,that's why I particularly wanted you to benefit from it.I did not write it consciously in the iambic form.(I thought 14 lines,a rhyme scheme and consistent syllable count was enough for sonnet) mainly because the way indians pronounce the words ,i am not sure which are the strong and which are the weak words..As a student of Lit: I found this very tough (especially when we had to do scanning for prosodic feature).Is it important that sonnet has to be in iambic?( Iambic lines should start with weak syllable.here i should change 'lovers' and 'Timeless'? One more person commented about it .I will try to change it.
.I was about to post it on my own .then i noticed this contest.
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A Shakespearan sonnet consists of three quatrains and a rhyming couplet - all in iambic pentameter.
Iamb - a foot with a weak/strong accent.
You can count on your fingers - it helps -
ta-DUM/ta DUM (five times each line) Hope this helps!
Love you!
Comment from MommaT
Although I have not read your prior writings I think I will have to start. I enjoyed and understood you meaning and the fact that although the language seems of earlier the message tells that human nature really has not changed to much. That is a shame. Good job and I look forward to more.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Although I have not read your prior writings I think I will have to start. I enjoyed and understood you meaning and the fact that although the language seems of earlier the message tells that human nature really has not changed to much. That is a shame. Good job and I look forward to more.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Thank you very much.yes so true,no? people have not changed, we have not anything from History. Shakespera has written about everything,racism ,marginalised people, greed, ambitions, jealousy.everything is there .thats why he is still relevant ,in spite of the language.(I have an elderly mother to take care of ,so I write only occasionally. but i read fanstory posts whenever I get some time . This is my bolt hole)
Comment from Green Lake Girl
A superb tribute to Shakespeare. A prolific and popular writer of his time. I'm sure he'd be amazed at his continued popularity 450 years later! Nicely penned poem.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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A superb tribute to Shakespeare. A prolific and popular writer of his time. I'm sure he'd be amazed at his continued popularity 450 years later! Nicely penned poem.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from zanya
A celebration of the Bard and his great gifts 'To delve into the depths of human mind' and his ability to 'spun a tapestry so rich'.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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A celebration of the Bard and his great gifts 'To delve into the depths of human mind' and his ability to 'spun a tapestry so rich'.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Thank you very much
Comment from Njorgensen
O! great Bard, indeed! I consider this a more than adequate tribute to Shakespeare. He was a heartfelt, emotional genius. I think you did an excellent job on this.
Njorgensen
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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O! great Bard, indeed! I consider this a more than adequate tribute to Shakespeare. He was a heartfelt, emotional genius. I think you did an excellent job on this.
Njorgensen
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from padumachitta
Hello. A very nice tribute to old Will. He was the first writer, producer...and best seller. Imagine if he had the world wide net...well, he does I guess, in a way...
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Hello. A very nice tribute to old Will. He was the first writer, producer...and best seller. Imagine if he had the world wide net...well, he does I guess, in a way...
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Thank you very much .I know if he had the www, then !but every character and every emotions are stiill relevant today.
Comment from Willowsong
This is a beautiful tribute to one of the greatest writers in history. A wonderfully written sonnet that ebbed and flowed smoothly from stanza to stanza with an excellent accompaniment of the above image. Very well suited.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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This is a beautiful tribute to one of the greatest writers in history. A wonderfully written sonnet that ebbed and flowed smoothly from stanza to stanza with an excellent accompaniment of the above image. Very well suited.
Comment Written 24-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Thank you very much.
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You're most welcome. Peace be with you :-)
Comment from royowen
An excellent sonnet, written in tribute to possibly the most gifted of poets! This work has been eloquently penned, with a well expressed, descriptive narrative that " brings to life" the ancient bard to the present day time! A sound a ababcc rhyme scheme, and a nice even meter! Well done, good luck, Roy.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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An excellent sonnet, written in tribute to possibly the most gifted of poets! This work has been eloquently penned, with a well expressed, descriptive narrative that " brings to life" the ancient bard to the present day time! A sound a ababcc rhyme scheme, and a nice even meter! Well done, good luck, Roy.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Thank you very much.
Comment from honeytree
Wonderful art work and words for this poem.
Poetry from the masters from the past are very special
Reading, particularly from the masters of poetry.
honey tree
I have no six
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Wonderful art work and words for this poem.
Poetry from the masters from the past are very special
Reading, particularly from the masters of poetry.
honey tree
I have no six
Comment Written 23-Apr-2014
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2014
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Thank you very much.
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I liked what you wrote very much.
honeytree