Comment from Preston McWhorter

Excellent

Hi, Richard,
"Leaves of Grass" is excellent free style poetry celebrating the arrival of spring and for casting the possibility of autumn. It has excellent figurative language and imagery (canceling past gloom). It has some internal rhyme and good flow.
Preston

 Comment Written 07-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 08-Apr-2014

Thanks Sir Preston!
"To get a nice review and utilizing "Whitman's" most famous piece was a challenge but attainable.
His mind and thoughts back then to toady's standards almost 2 hundred yeas later are remarkable!
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Exceptional

Now there's some Whittman that will keep you going.....ahh sorry Brooke.... just trying be funny thats all...love you....yea be careful pickin' on Walt around here.....lots a relatives...-headshake-..yep.....alright brother...yes season of the rut.....i'm excited. alright love ya dude Michael

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014

Jason was a "Gift of Life" donor. {I'm a spokesman.}
"After His unfortunate accident in 2003, I retired
I then started a multi-conglomerate of 7 business............{RCL. Enterprises of Ocean County}, got bored, and
started writing.
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A Dedication for two whom passed away.
"My Long, Lost, Son, Jason." by Ricky1024

My heart is broken at the loss of my son.
"My Good Boy" by grannyfrannie
My child, my only son
Never will I hold him again
Our God has him now
Peace and love surround him
Quietly I mourn...
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My wonderful son passed away in December.
The pain is unbearable.
I am letting God guide my thoughts and carry me
through this journey of grief.
Someday I will be with him again in Heaven.
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{Review in Poetry}
"By Dr. Richard Edward Smrkovsky.
Slam-Poet.
Master Writer, reviewer Artist.
And "Latter Day Saint Priest
of "The Church Of Jesus Christ."
"My Long, Lost, Son, Jason."

Adjective Content -*****
Life will never again be the same...
Only past memories remain...
Thoughts of You,
The things that we used to do...
now just paint a colored hue.
If only I knew..
Grammar-*****
"What's now the matter?
Can't seem to gather...
Thought, regrets, all remain..
Forever lost...
My life's a wasted
memory...
Washed down that DAMN DRAIN!!!
"The River of Woe" flows so as
my pen know is my best friend..
Pronounciational Appeal-*****
Come'n God lets keep it real,
lost the son than the wife,
what's the deal?"
...
"Objective Content-*****
"And as My eyes cloud again in misty tears...
All of those lost, and many years...
{Jason Richard Smrkovsky}
{11-05-1884-*_*03-31-2003
"Organs donated'
{04-01-2003{April Fools Day"
And now what more can a lonely boy say?"
...
"Complete Synopsis-*****
"And all of the many, many, Angels
in the Heaven's above...
The clouds stood still...
The Stars are so far...
Nothing here on this old Earth for me to do...
Lost perspective...
Lost my sense of You...
They all; cried in grieving tears for
three months!
They welcomed You...
Back to that place where You belonged...
"My Long, Lost Son."
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Started today 4-05-2014 and written at
"MC Donalds in Manahawkin, NJ.
Started at 8:03 AM. and conmpleted at 8:08 AM.
Eastern Standard Time.
{A Slammed-poem in non-prose}.
Special thanks goes out first to God,
Also, special thanks to all of the
people and parents whom lost as son
like mt writing friend "grannie" and
those like me and grannie who gifted
our sons organs to save other unfortunate
people like grannie and me and lastly,
this Artist and also a friend,
"MK Flood" and his cool pic "Blue City Angel."
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, for the time, and stars...
Usually I dedicate and post in the editors note.
Oops I did it again.
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Comment from His Grayness

Excellent

Dear Ricky 1024: This is a new experience for me regarding "slam" poetry but I think I can guess how this works (fast)and if you really did this in four minutes without any pre-thought or notes...that is indeed amazing! If it was all corn and fluff who would really care? But the content is very good and I did enjoy the read! Slam on friend and keep it coming! HIS GRAYNESS: Vance

 Comment Written 06-Apr-2014

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reply by the author on 07-Apr-2014

An ability to write a beautiful piece is a blessing and a miracle at the same time in "Slamming Ability!"
But to write 22 religious poems 1, 2, and 3 minute and a
5-7-5 haiku in 5 seconds, and finish them all in 29.85 minutes {Pre-titled}...
Witnessed by a Mormon Sister on her mission..
Is Simply a Gift from God and MR. "Graveness" that is exactly how I do it!
Thanks for your review and stars,
I'll shall now follow you..
Ask me anything..
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