Comment from RGstar

Excellent

This was nicely written, Mary. The only thing I would change here would be the word 'me' on the last line in reducing to just one.
Sometime we find a place that we are totally at home with, and it seems this was one of them.
Good write, Mary.
RG

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014

Hi RG, Thank you so much for your review, and your suggestions. I appreciate it, but I actually prefer my last line because it emphasizes how I feel, and it rhymes. Mary

reply by RGstar on 28-Mar-2014

Yes, I see the point, mary. Sometimes, I believe emphasis is more important than structure as I also do the same within my writing if the need be.
Best wishes,
have a great day.
RG

reply by the author on 28-Mar-2014

Thanks, RG, Mary

Comment from mfowler

Excellent

There is nothing like a place with connections to a time of renewal and peace. This place is clearly your connection to happy times. Revisiting triggers those memories of good emotions. It's a human thing, that connecting to place. The cliffs by the sea give you feelings of freedom. Birds, water, sunny skies, wide horizons....as you say you were shown the beauty of nature. Cahore by the Sea...nice name; lovely poem of renewal.

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014

Thanks for the great review. I appreciate your comments. Mary

Comment from judester

Excellent

A wonderful poem describing one of those special places that resonate and warm our spirits. Rolling,passion,magic,lifting, these words bring this poem to life and capture your love for it.The painting is lovely. Cheers Judester

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014

Thank you so much for your wonderful review. and your kind comments on my painting. Mary

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

Thank you for sharing the quaint village in Ireland through your painting and your words. I felt transported by your rhymed couplets in these quatrains. How fortunate you were to find this special place. Cheers- Joan

 Comment Written 27-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2014

Thanks Joan for the lovely review, and your comments. Mary

Comment from GregoryCody

Excellent

Oh so beautiful. AND what a beautiful picture! You're quite the talent wow.
I love your rhythm, cadence throughout. Nice rhymes, not forced at all. Such flow.
A lifting spirit of awareness to me did appear
Love that. You make it come Alive! Great piece.

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014

Thank you for your wonderful review and great comments. Mary

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Hello and smiles Jackarrie
You write such pleasing thoughts with rhyme of your special place (Cahore)
Thank you for sharing

Gert

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014

Thanks Gert for the great review, I appreciate it. Mary

reply by Gert sherwood on 25-Mar-2014

You are welcome Mary
Gert

Comment from Jumbo J

Excellent

Hi Mary,
I wish I had a six just for your art... it really added the flavour to the story of where you were able to be you... love the descriptive tones and the haunting music that accompanied the magic of your words... what did you say? There was no music? Ah, yes there was... I heard it all the way through... it would have been really grand with a pint or two of Guinness.

With our thoughts we create,
the moment and time,
James xx

******Stars!!!!!!

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014

A great review, James, I am glad you enjoyed my poem and artwork. Thanks for your kind comments. I used to have a pint of Budwizer sitting on the hilll in front of the Strand Bar in the painting. My DAd had the pint of Guiness Mary

Comment from maggieadams

Excellent

Mary, thanks for sharing this heartfelt place and your beautiful artwork. You are one talented lady. Through your words and art, you make me want to go there. It sounds and looks like a healing place.

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014

Thanks Maggie for your wonderful review and your kind comments. Mary

Comment from Righteous Riter

Excellent

Good use of the aabb rhyme scheme. Good end rhyming. Good alliteration with then/the...awareness/appear...was/wanting...can/clearly. Good eye catching photo followed by a clear message.

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014

Thanks for your comments and great review. Mary

Comment from PaddyMac

Excellent

A moving poem of self discovery, such a pity your painting does not show well on my screen. The final verse has a wonderful last line but I would prefer "felt THE beginning" in line 2 and you need to drop an "I" in the 3rd line so it reads "yet I still can clearly see". The meter seems slightly off to me, though apart from that second last line, I cannot find exactly where. I enjoyed your poem, but feel it could have been better. How do you pronounce "Cahore"?
Paddy

 Comment Written 25-Mar-2014

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reply by the author on 25-Mar-2014

Hi Paddy, I agree with you it did need some editing, and I am grateful to you for pointing it out.
I am sorry you cannot see my artwork, Is this a normal problem with your computer, or is it just mine?

You have a very Irish name any connections.

Cahore, CA-Hor.
Thanks for your review I appreciate it. Mary

reply by PaddyMac on 25-Mar-2014

Thanks Mary, only an Irish grandfather but, I have visited Ireland and I do love them. Not sure why your painting is fuzzy, other artwork, from FanArt for example, is fine.
Paddy