Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

Dear Aiona - this story poem has strong expressive word choices, lines that tell a deeper story to me. The rhyme was also a nice addition. A great overall work I enjoyed reading this one.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014

Thank you, Maureen!

Comment from Misrael

Excellent

I thought the poem was very cute but for the life of me I can't see how dogs and snakes are compatible but I don't know anything about the Chinese horoscope. But I enjoyed the read. Keep up the good work.

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014

Thanks, Misrael. Yeah, I dont get it either... but as long as they're happy! 8)

Comment from TOMORAL

Excellent

Wow, I did not understand this poem until I read your notes! Now I see it is a very tender love poem. I love that the snake stayed on the ground and put his ball and chain on. Great writing!

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2014

Mydad always complains, but they're still together! Thanks, TOMORAL!

Comment from zanya

Excellent

So the Chinese horoscope can carry a grain of truth at least and here we have a real life love story in this Share a story in a poem that bears that out -well done

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014

Thank you, zanya.

Comment from DanielEkine

Excellent

How beautiful and cute. A dog and a snake making a compromise, falling in love and building a family. Exceptional work from the author. Great use of SPAG and diction. I like the fact, that the artwork complements the piece as lovers should. Good color concept.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2014

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2014

Thank you, Daniel.