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Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Speculation & Strategy"Acts of war have plunged Earth into catastrophe.
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Comment from robina1978
The group, although there are several of them, tries to get organised and work out what happened. In the morning Jennifer came running back, looking very scared.
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The group, although there are several of them, tries to get organised and work out what happened. In the morning Jennifer came running back, looking very scared.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2014
Comment from nordicgirl
Interesting to have them speculating and very realistic. This revrals details of how yhey think too which will come in to play later. Great floe again. NG
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Interesting to have them speculating and very realistic. This revrals details of how yhey think too which will come in to play later. Great floe again. NG
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
reply by the author on 02-Mar-2014
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Glad you think so. That is in line with my thinking. Thank you kindly, mikey
Comment from CR Delport
You sure keep the intrigue. They have to face two dangers now. Whatever the threat is, and other people that might want to come after their food. Interesting stuff.
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You sure keep the intrigue. They have to face two dangers now. Whatever the threat is, and other people that might want to come after their food. Interesting stuff.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2014
Comment from l.raven
Oh great Michael...leave us wondering what she saw...Oh that's the idea...now that they are streaming out a little bit to see what is going on...ok let me go read the next one...great write...Luff Ya Linda xxoo
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Oh great Michael...leave us wondering what she saw...Oh that's the idea...now that they are streaming out a little bit to see what is going on...ok let me go read the next one...great write...Luff Ya Linda xxoo
Comment Written 01-Mar-2014
Comment from Darkhorse555
what a picture drawn in words schizophrenic lady with a penchant for non-stop chatter beautifully penned mikey excellent read dear friend
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what a picture drawn in words schizophrenic lady with a penchant for non-stop chatter beautifully penned mikey excellent read dear friend
Comment Written 01-Mar-2014
Comment from Marillion
Moving right along, Mikey, and nicely. Just as would be the next step, the group's dynamic shifts, they continue to piece together what may have happened, nerves start to fray a bit, and the very real possibility of Survival of the Fittest is starting to loom.
Nice chapter. One correction:
We headed back towards the group. They were still having there(their) discussion. I approached Carlos.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Moving right along, Mikey, and nicely. Just as would be the next step, the group's dynamic shifts, they continue to piece together what may have happened, nerves start to fray a bit, and the very real possibility of Survival of the Fittest is starting to loom.
Nice chapter. One correction:
We headed back towards the group. They were still having there(their) discussion. I approached Carlos.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Great to have you following along and pleased that you are enjoying it. funny there/their, I know the difference and still make the mistake all the time. your/you're too. their/there. I just do that to make everyone feel good about themselves. Hahaha mikey
Comment from Rosalyne
Hi, Mikey.
You have done a great job showing concern and the horrible landscape of dead bodies. You have raised well the questions of what now? Good characters and dialogue. The speculation of what happened is an interesting theory.
I have a question about that. If it were toxic gases that caused the mass destruction, how did this group survive, and some of the animals?
One other point.:)
Basic needs would become essential. You showed this well with the concern of food and possible shortage in the future. This is excellent.
Another basic need is shelter. Considering the unknown, would they stay out in the open, or set up house in the
mercantile store, a place where they have some protection from the natural elements. They don't know at this moment if there are other survivors or what dangers lie ahead.
Sorry for all the questions. I'm just thinking how I'd react in such a situation.
Great cliffhanger ending!
Bye
Rosalyne :)
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Hi, Mikey.
You have done a great job showing concern and the horrible landscape of dead bodies. You have raised well the questions of what now? Good characters and dialogue. The speculation of what happened is an interesting theory.
I have a question about that. If it were toxic gases that caused the mass destruction, how did this group survive, and some of the animals?
One other point.:)
Basic needs would become essential. You showed this well with the concern of food and possible shortage in the future. This is excellent.
Another basic need is shelter. Considering the unknown, would they stay out in the open, or set up house in the
mercantile store, a place where they have some protection from the natural elements. They don't know at this moment if there are other survivors or what dangers lie ahead.
Sorry for all the questions. I'm just thinking how I'd react in such a situation.
Great cliffhanger ending!
Bye
Rosalyne :)
Comment Written 28-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Yes, shelter. They were prepared for camping, but I will address that. Good idea. please keep up the questions! Many of them don't occur to me and most of them do need answers. I'm answering these backwards, so I hopefully have answered some of this already. if not, stay tuned, mikey
Comment from GracieAnn
Mikey, this is unfolding nicely and the characters are beginning to take shape. The potential problems you list are potential for disaster with in. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Mikey, this is unfolding nicely and the characters are beginning to take shape. The potential problems you list are potential for disaster with in. Well done. :0 GracieAnn
Comment Written 28-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Great to hear you find it moving along nicely. I'm trying hard not to rush. Posting little pieces like this is hard. I want to drop a bombshell in each posting, but it really can't be done. A strange way to introduce a piece. Can you imagine posting a poem one stanza at a time? Hahaha. mikey
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I guess in poetry it is good to leave the end for the Ahhhh moment since it is so condensed. :0 GracieAnn
Comment from ragamuffin
I think the use of pregnancy can be taken one of two ways, either a tragic thing to bring a child into a "dead world," or the offering a new person to make a difference, or someone who still cares enough to try and make a "good" world for their child, which offers hope. I kinda like the latter. Nice to see that you've got realism of protection needed especially when people go into survival mode, but also at least a few folks that still care about the needs of others. Just a couple of tech notes: than instead of then in the 5th line up from the bottom and too instead of to in the 23rd line up from the bottom. Still loving it; still looking forward to more.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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I think the use of pregnancy can be taken one of two ways, either a tragic thing to bring a child into a "dead world," or the offering a new person to make a difference, or someone who still cares enough to try and make a "good" world for their child, which offers hope. I kinda like the latter. Nice to see that you've got realism of protection needed especially when people go into survival mode, but also at least a few folks that still care about the needs of others. Just a couple of tech notes: than instead of then in the 5th line up from the bottom and too instead of to in the 23rd line up from the bottom. Still loving it; still looking forward to more.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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I'll fix those. Part 4 and an answer already posted. We'll see what you think. So appreciative of your excellent input. Glad you are enjoying and following along! mikey
Comment from Sasha
You are doing a marvelous job with this. I was so engrossed with the story I didn't see anything that needed to be corrected or changed. I anxiously look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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You are doing a marvelous job with this. I was so engrossed with the story I didn't see anything that needed to be corrected or changed. I anxiously look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 28-Feb-2014
reply by the author on 01-Mar-2014
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Great to hear. It keeps changing and expanding as I go. I seem to have improved! I wrote this a couple years ago and I find myself rewriting most of it as I type it in. Glad you are enjoying it. more to come, mikey