Something's Fishy
Please, somebody help me. I'm here...in here! Let me out...47 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
Great little story--and the wife wasn't involved. She's free and clear and rid of the bastard. Mark's desire for the fish did him in. Your writing is stellar, as usual. Both your story and author's note are horrific.
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
Great little story--and the wife wasn't involved. She's free and clear and rid of the bastard. Mark's desire for the fish did him in. Your writing is stellar, as usual. Both your story and author's note are horrific.
Comment Written 24-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 09-Feb-2014
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Thanks, BeasPeas! I appreciate the great review...
Comment from vapros
Whooee, Dean, this is a macabre tale you have offered. Dying from a bad puffer fish would be bad enough, but dying under the autopsy knife is unimaginable. Your account of Mark's end was skillfully done, as always. Good work.
Bill
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
Whooee, Dean, this is a macabre tale you have offered. Dying from a bad puffer fish would be bad enough, but dying under the autopsy knife is unimaginable. Your account of Mark's end was skillfully done, as always. Good work.
Bill
Comment Written 13-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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Thanks a lot, Bill. I appreciate the read and kind review!
Comment from Janie King
Congratulations on the win. This is definitely a horrifying thought for sure. I'm not a real seafood person and that may be a good thing. i just posted a piece, under my name, that if you have time I would appreciate your reading. A lady at church has asked me to ghost write her book. I love to ghost write. She began to tell me her story and it blew my mind. She was born into family of satanic worship. The things done to her from the time she was three should get the whole lot of them executed. keep me in prayer as I work with this lady and that I will be totally tuned into to the Holy Spirit where the writing is concerned. God loves you and I do too.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
Congratulations on the win. This is definitely a horrifying thought for sure. I'm not a real seafood person and that may be a good thing. i just posted a piece, under my name, that if you have time I would appreciate your reading. A lady at church has asked me to ghost write her book. I love to ghost write. She began to tell me her story and it blew my mind. She was born into family of satanic worship. The things done to her from the time she was three should get the whole lot of them executed. keep me in prayer as I work with this lady and that I will be totally tuned into to the Holy Spirit where the writing is concerned. God loves you and I do too.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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I will read it, Janie, and thank you for the heads-up on that posting. Thanks as well for the read & review of my story.
Comment from ragamuffin
Wow. Scary... not only because it was written so well with excellent description, (just the right amount without being overdone and leaving something to the imagination), but because it's in essence true. Knew there was a reason I never really cared for fish. Certainly not only a cautionary tale, but quite thought provoking. And as always, excellently/professionally written.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
Wow. Scary... not only because it was written so well with excellent description, (just the right amount without being overdone and leaving something to the imagination), but because it's in essence true. Knew there was a reason I never really cared for fish. Certainly not only a cautionary tale, but quite thought provoking. And as always, excellently/professionally written.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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Thank you, ragamuffin. I appreciate the feedback, it is always very helpful.
Comment from elchupakabra
This was excellent, Dean. It's been a while since you've posted but this was worth the wait. I enjoyed the story here and I didn't notice any spag or any places to improve upon. Fantastic work on this piece, and best of luck in the contest, thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
This was excellent, Dean. It's been a while since you've posted but this was worth the wait. I enjoyed the story here and I didn't notice any spag or any places to improve upon. Fantastic work on this piece, and best of luck in the contest, thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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Yeah, it has been awhile, 'Chup. I just had to take a little break for awhile.
I really appreciate the great review buddy!
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No problem. Whenever you get a chance, please check out chapter 24 of my script the Change. It's titled Devestation and is being promoted on the top page :)
Comment from lancellot
Great job with the creepiness factor with this one. I think you tapped into a few people's nightmares of being on that cold table and being helpless.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
Great job with the creepiness factor with this one. I think you tapped into a few people's nightmares of being on that cold table and being helpless.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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Thanks, lancellot, that's what I was shooting for, obviously. I hope I've achieved the desired "FEAR FACTOR", without being too overdone.
Comment from Writingfundimension
This has got to be the most horrific entry I've EVER read for this contest. OMG, you sure know how to build the horror, Dean. What a monstrous possibility you draw on for this prize winner. Well done!!
Bev
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
This has got to be the most horrific entry I've EVER read for this contest. OMG, you sure know how to build the horror, Dean. What a monstrous possibility you draw on for this prize winner. Well done!!
Bev
Comment Written 12-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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Thank you kindly, Bev. I truly appreciate your reading my story as well as the fine comments.
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You're very welcome, Dean. I hope all is well with you... Bev
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I'm good, Bev, thanks. I hope all is well with you, too!
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Yes, it is Dean, thanks. :0)
Comment from Spiritual Echo
Well, no bloody wonder you won. A brilliant story, a classic from your magic pen that seems to draw loops of terror so effortlessly around your readers.
Fantastic story. Hope it moves past the pond of FS and finds its way into mainstream.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
Well, no bloody wonder you won. A brilliant story, a classic from your magic pen that seems to draw loops of terror so effortlessly around your readers.
Fantastic story. Hope it moves past the pond of FS and finds its way into mainstream.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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Thanks very much, Spiritual Echo. I really appreciate that!
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Dean Kuch,
I suspect the man who did the autopsy ended up facing some serious charges. This is always a risk with serious trauma in an accident and it can easily be compounded by a doctor in a hurry seeing only what they expect to see.
Well written, it conveys the horror of the situation for the victim very well.
Patrick
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
Hi Dean Kuch,
I suspect the man who did the autopsy ended up facing some serious charges. This is always a risk with serious trauma in an accident and it can easily be compounded by a doctor in a hurry seeing only what they expect to see.
Well written, it conveys the horror of the situation for the victim very well.
Patrick
Comment Written 12-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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Thanks so much, Patrick. Coming from a talented author such as yourself, that truly means a great deal to me!
Comment from Gungalo
Boy Dean, this is an artful handful of potent information. LOL I can't even imagine being alive and being autopsied. It must be very stressful eh? LOL.
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
Boy Dean, this is an artful handful of potent information. LOL I can't even imagine being alive and being autopsied. It must be very stressful eh? LOL.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2014
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Oh, it sure is 'G'! At least, so I've heard, LOL...
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LOL