Comment from Preston McWhorter

Exceptional

Hi, Treishcel,
This beautiful lyrical, technically perfect, poem gives us an interlude of peace and quiet in a busy city's streets using figurative language and imagery.
Preston

 Comment Written 12-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 12-Nov-2013

Thank you so much Preston. I am very pleased with the review and the stars.

Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

Another well written and presented poem.
The Octogram also maked use of repeated text
which adds to the effectiveness of the poem.
A good subject choice and cleverly composed.

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2013

Thank you Shirley.

Comment from rod007

Excellent

Your knowledge of various forms of poetry is astounding. I just write from instinct and know how the words affect my emotions. Sometimes I miss the mark but your arrow always hits the mark. I especially liked these lines:
"....With water and flowers full view,
And hues of Autumn there too,
The wonderful colors eclipse,
Making a splash."
Well done.

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2013

Thank you Rod. This one was hard to write as rhyming splash wasn't easy. I also had to figure out way to work it in as the repeating line. I finally came up with splashing drops, colors making a splash, and tossing a coin in. Then , after posting, I saw that the smaller picture doesnt even show the splash, like a larger one does. So, I was disappointed with the result. I'm glad you liked it.

Comment from robina1978

Excellent

Excellent photo, you seem to go around a bit. And the Octogram completely according to the rules. It does indeed look very idyllic.

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2013

Thank you Ine.

Comment from Capricorn30

Excellent

A well-penned octogram to complement a lovely illustration;
Nice alliteration incorporated into a writing of the heart influenced by nature's finest.
Excellent!

 Comment Written 11-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 11-Nov-2013

Thank you Margaret.

reply by Capricorn30 on 11-Nov-2013

~You're welcome~
Lovely thoughts with a touch of summer for added pleasure.

Comment from Sueellen11

Excellent

Excellent presentation of this poetry style,, looks to hard,, do you mind if I copy your authors notes on the formate of this poetry style to try,,, great write and that picture is stunning,thanks for sharing your beautiful picture and poetry style,,,blessings sueellen

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2013

Thank you Sueellen. No problem, that why I post those notes. Give one a try.

reply by Sueellen11 on 11-Nov-2013

Looks hard for me,, as I am not a learned poet I just get by but I will have a go hugs sue

Comment from Frankeddy

Excellent

Your Octogram poem is very well done, well thought out and well written.
Rhyme and syllable count sound pleasing.
Beautiful accompanying picture in clear bright setting.
A few nice alliterations.

Well done. Frankeddy

 Comment Written 10-Nov-2013

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reply by the author on 10-Nov-2013

Thank you Frankeddy.