tanka (as breeze swirls)
tanka19 total reviews
Comment from Robert Lee Brown
This is a very well written verse. The picture and poem form a perfect pair and complement each other. I makes a very good read which I enjoyed and appreciate your sharing with your fans. Bob
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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This is a very well written verse. The picture and poem form a perfect pair and complement each other. I makes a very good read which I enjoyed and appreciate your sharing with your fans. Bob
Comment Written 07-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Thank you. I am glad you enjoyed it, my friend~Debbie
Comment from me_tudor
I love it! I really love the picture. I'm so ready for the fall to get here. I'm sick of it being so hot. This was a wonderful poem. Great job!
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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I love it! I really love the picture. I'm so ready for the fall to get here. I'm sick of it being so hot. This was a wonderful poem. Great job!
Comment Written 07-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Me too. It was 101 degrees here yesterday! Thank you~Debbie
Comment from krys123
Stove and give you a five-star but your format is wrong or you made a mistake. But a tank a poem is written with 5 7 5 7 7 syllabic format. It is written in the poetry dances and also on the Internet. There is nothing that says it's (31 or
LESS)? I must say your content and concept is superb. And the rhythm is done very well also.
You may research and if you see something that you find that it is different please notify me to a post me.
AK
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Stove and give you a five-star but your format is wrong or you made a mistake. But a tank a poem is written with 5 7 5 7 7 syllabic format. It is written in the poetry dances and also on the Internet. There is nothing that says it's (31 or
LESS)? I must say your content and concept is superb. And the rhythm is done very well also.
You may research and if you see something that you find that it is different please notify me to a post me.
AK
Comment Written 06-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Tanka means short poem or short song in Japanese and is written using 31 Japanese syllables in five phrases in one line. Tanka has a history of more than 1300 years, so people may think that tanka is very old. Yes, it is old, but it has been modernized and many Japanese people today enjoy reading and writing tanka.
When we write tanka in English, we usually use five lines. As for syllable counting, I personally like to use about 20 English syllables because this shortness is very close to Japaneses tanka. If you don't like to count syllables, just count words. Use 10 ~ 15 words, or up to 20 words at maximum. In the past, English tanka were often composed using 31 English syllables, but today's English tanka are much shorter.
The five lines can be arranged in a short/long/shorft/long/long pattern following the Japanese tanka's 5/7/5/7/7 syllable sequence. This sequence is very rhythmical in Japanese, and if you feel the short/long/short/long/long pattern in English very rhythmical, you can follow, but not required always.
From tanka central
Hope that helps. Thank you for your kind review~Debbie
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A little more knowledge for onto your hat Debbie. Actually in 500 A.D. under the Lee Dynasty in China they developed most of the Japanese poetry that we read and see today. The Japanese have used the this poetry and to this day besides arguing over other things the Chinese even went to war for this action amongst other things. Thank you for showing all the knowledge that you given me right now and I appreciate your time and effort you have taught me more than I really think I need to know but I'm really glad you did of what you have written so I could study it further. I made a copy, thank you again Debbie.
AK
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A little more knowledge for onto your hat Debbie. Actually in 500 A.D. under the Lee Dynasty in China they developed most of the Japanese poetry that we read and see today. The Japanese have used the this poetry and to this day besides arguing over other things the Chinese even went to war for this action amongst other things. Thank you for showing all the knowledge that you given me right now and I appreciate your time and effort you have taught me more than I really think I need to know but I'm really glad you did of what you have written so I could study it further. I made a copy, thank you again Debbie.
AK
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You are very welcome~Debbie
Comment from tedanytime
Beautiful tanka.
The swirling leaves certainly have a dance of their own, with the rustling drumbeat of their mass moving with the wind.
Colors as if on patterned dresses, invisible escorts swinging among the trees...
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Beautiful tanka.
The swirling leaves certainly have a dance of their own, with the rustling drumbeat of their mass moving with the wind.
Colors as if on patterned dresses, invisible escorts swinging among the trees...
Comment Written 06-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Thank you so very much, my friend~Debbie
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
THIS IS WELL WRITTEN MY FRIEND FULL OF BEAUTIFUL IMAGERY AND FEELING I ENJOYED ITT READS SO WELL MY FRIEND I AM STILL PLAYING CATCH UP REGARDS JILL
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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THIS IS WELL WRITTEN MY FRIEND FULL OF BEAUTIFUL IMAGERY AND FEELING I ENJOYED ITT READS SO WELL MY FRIEND I AM STILL PLAYING CATCH UP REGARDS JILL
Comment Written 06-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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I'm so very far behind--I sympathize. Glad you enjoyed this~Debbie
Comment from alexgeorge
This poem reminds me of autumn, and how we are all buckling down and preparing for the winter. Seasons are changing and mother nature is wearing her brown and gold frock.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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This poem reminds me of autumn, and how we are all buckling down and preparing for the winter. Seasons are changing and mother nature is wearing her brown and gold frock.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Thank you. I love fall. Winter--not so much~Debbie
Comment from JM daSilva
Yeah, it must be sad for you to think about dancing when you can't dance. I can understand your situation. Nobody can do everything, but when you had it and lost it, it is tough.
However, I just did a documentary about a paralympics event and some of those people can dance like hell.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Yeah, it must be sad for you to think about dancing when you can't dance. I can understand your situation. Nobody can do everything, but when you had it and lost it, it is tough.
However, I just did a documentary about a paralympics event and some of those people can dance like hell.
Comment Written 06-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Yes, some are able to do amazing things. My balance is very poor. I don't think I'll be dancing. Thank you~Debbie
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Welcome.
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Debbie,
this tanka had the imagery to watch every move unfold, line by line... Beautifully written my dear friend!
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Hi Debbie,
this tanka had the imagery to watch every move unfold, line by line... Beautifully written my dear friend!
Kindest thoughts,
James xx
Comment Written 05-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Thanks so very much, James. I am glad you enjoyed this, dear friend~Debbie xx
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Nicely done Debbie, I could feel the breeze and see those golden autumn leaves floating like well choreographed dance moves. Good job, Carolyn
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Nicely done Debbie, I could feel the breeze and see those golden autumn leaves floating like well choreographed dance moves. Good job, Carolyn
Comment Written 05-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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Thanks so very much, Carolyn. Glad you enjoyed~Debbie
Comment from JW
as breeze swirls
golden leaves float gracefully
memories of dance moves
once performed with precision
between passionate lovers
And then after a number of days, you have to take out the rake and get to work.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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as breeze swirls
golden leaves float gracefully
memories of dance moves
once performed with precision
between passionate lovers
And then after a number of days, you have to take out the rake and get to work.
Thanks for sharing this. JW
Comment Written 04-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2013
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So very true. I bet you work hard doing fall clean-up. And then snow removal time comes. The work is never done. Thank you~Debbie