Comment from Jean Lutz

Excellent

Is there anyone who does not love butterflies? I don't think so. You surely delivered in this one. I love how you refer to them as nature's tapestries.

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2013

Thanks so much for a generous review and comments. I think buttterflies are amazing and the myriad of colours they carry are beautiful.I appreciate your time.

Comment from Sararb

Excellent

First off the beautiful butterfly is a good subject to write about. I think you did well describing the butterfly gathering the sticky nectar. Your syllable count followed the rules. Sararb :)

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2013

Thanks so much for a generous review and comments. I appreciate it.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

Your poem is in good syllable count for the tanka
I like the assonance of short I sounds in silkily tickles within and the consonance of hard C and L sounds in silkily tickles
good assonance in fickle insect
and I like the way the fickle picks up the rhyme from tickle
lovely descriptive detail with good sensory appeal
:-) Brooke

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2013

Thank you fora positive review and five stars. I appreciate your detailed and positive comments. To a learner the passing on of knowledge and expertise has so much value. I appreciate your time to do this.

Comment from playinaround

Exceptional

The last line has 8 syllables. did you mean satiates? This was so much fun to read and experience. I really love this tanka. The sights and tastes... So well done!!

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2013

Thanks so much for your gift of an exceptional six stars.
This is my first attempt at a Tanka poem so this is an extra special review. I appreciate your review and your "heads up" on the syllable count. I appareciate it.

Comment from rhonny

Good

I can appreciate the basis of your poem, but I don't really know (becasuse of a comma in every line) whether the 3rd line is connected to the second or the third.

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2013

Thanks . This is my first attempt at a Tanka poem so I was hoping for some clues as to where I may have strayed from the requirements of this style.

reply by rhonny on 25-Jul-2013

I'm not familiar with this style, but to me, the punctuation carries a lot of weight here. It can make or break a poem when there are only a few lines or stanzas to tell a story. I think you should be ok though. :)

reply by the author on 25-Jul-2013

Thanks for your reply. I'm trying my hand at new styles so informed feedback is essential to know if you have missed the mark. I appreciate your input.

reply by rhonny on 25-Jul-2013

that' ok "O)

Comment from lorijean

Excellent

Nature gives us so much to write about as it changes everyday, so a beautiful picture you paint a pleasure to read.......

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2013

Thank you so much for stopping by to review. I appreciate your comments and generous five stars.
Nature plays a new symphony every moment. Okay,there may be some repeats but I am truly in awe of the ever-changing tapestry of nature.