I Choose Rainbows
Viewing comments for Chapter 125 "Shadowed Reality"Thoughts from the dark side
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Comment from rhonny
It's a good poem and flows nicely despite so many capitals which I think detract from the actual flow. I also think the word WHYS needs to be "whys' to make it clear. Also the words IN SPOIL seem out of place to me. :)
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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It's a good poem and flows nicely despite so many capitals which I think detract from the actual flow. I also think the word WHYS needs to be "whys' to make it clear. Also the words IN SPOIL seem out of place to me. :)
Comment Written 21-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Do you think that using all small letterswill b better. I know e.e. cummings wrote everything with no caps.
Norm
Comment from DanielEkine
Darkness can be a very horrible feeling.
My best part.
"So persistent in gloom
I screech
The whys
Of blackness
So sad
So inwardly
Driven
That only my darkness
Knows the answers
To my soul"
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Darkness can be a very horrible feeling.
My best part.
"So persistent in gloom
I screech
The whys
Of blackness
So sad
So inwardly
Driven
That only my darkness
Knows the answers
To my soul"
Comment Written 21-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Thanks for the nice review.
Norm