Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens

Excellent

I like this one, you are on a roll, is this another new write? I enjoyed; Life, on a platform of hope.
Good job and well written, Carolyn

 Comment Written 01-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Jul-2013

Hi: The poem i listed yesterday "Happy Days" is a new write.

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

excellent assonance in trees/green/leaves
good personification in the friendly trees who wave hello
you create a wonderfully upbeat tone
wonderful illustrative examples of things that cause enjoy joy to make this boy giggle :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2013

Thanks so much for the kind review. I think my connecting sentenceswere a little week.

Norm

Comment from zeldasmith

Excellent

This reminded me of one of those nice crisp Autumn days when children and adults are flying kites in a large wind driven field. I like this poem very much. I like the vivid imagery. Good job. Keep writing

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2013

Hi Zelda: My writers block may be coming to an end. I am writing a new poem. I hope you will like it

Comment from jjstar

Excellent

Awwww....very sweet and reflects so well the innocence and joy of childhood. I kept thinking it was going to end with a contrasting stanza about what happened to the little boy as he grew older and saw the world from a different point of view. Well done!

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2013

Thanks for the nice review.

Norm

Comment from Glasstruth

Excellent

So uplifting and positive. Great enjambment. Love how your lines begin and end. Helps with the read and message. This would really sound nice read aloud. Great job! Les

 Comment Written 29-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2013

Thanks for the nice review.

Norm