Comment from donkeyoatey

Excellent

Nice flow, and nice mind pictures you have painted. I am so not a fan of cities, so this is how I always imagine them in the depth of night, while most peopke sleep. thank you so much for choosing my picture. Donkeyoatey

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2013

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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2013

Ditto. You do nice work.

reply by donkeyoatey on 27-Jul-2013

Thank you! Donkeyoatey

Comment from Selina Stambi

Excellent

Sop the corpse
Of yesterday's pride ... an effectively evocative picture.

A short poem, but a stark portrait of the urban jungle is painted with simple, well chosen words.

Nicely done, shoelessjo. You gave me a lovely review and I thought I'd pop in to check you out. Glad I did.

Welcome to Fanstory and have a super weekend. :)

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2013

Thanks for the comments.

Comment from june prescott

Excellent

A very forlorn picture you worded here about city life behind the facades.
"And nests of insects
Sop the corpse
Of yesterday's pride" is a very powerful phrase.
I really liked the physical form of the poem, like a tall building. But, for me, bring on the sun! :) ~JP

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2013

Thanks for the comment. I was suffering from depression when I wrote this poem.

reply by june prescott on 15-Jun-2013

Peace to you. Hope your spirits are doing better. ~JP

Comment from Darkhorse555

Excellent

as the rain falls upon the city from the gutters to yesterdays pride you came up with an interesting piece and I enjoyed

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2013

Thanks for the review. I am glad you like it.

Norm