All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "As Trade Winds Sing"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from Bina1
What a lovely poem, had to read it twice to be sure I got the story. Thank you for sharing, good luck in the contest. A fine entry you offer here.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2013
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What a lovely poem, had to read it twice to be sure I got the story. Thank you for sharing, good luck in the contest. A fine entry you offer here.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2013
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Goodness, that was so sweet of you to review for two cents Bina! You're such a sweetheart!
:)Sharyn
Comment from poetbear
Stunning poem.
Can't wait to see Hawaii this fall.
This is a serenade of joy and beauty.
Reads well and make sense.
Makes you want to say awwhhh!!
Gem!!
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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Stunning poem.
Can't wait to see Hawaii this fall.
This is a serenade of joy and beauty.
Reads well and make sense.
Makes you want to say awwhhh!!
Gem!!
Comment Written 21-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2013
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Which island are you coming to??? we're on Maui! thank you so much for reviewing this one, my dear! :)S
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If we come, would love to meet u.
PB
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Please do! I'll give you my web site and ph#, ok? (PM)
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Please do.
Maddy (PB)
Comment from alexgeorge
The poor souls. They fell in love by the waves and it's only fitting that she should part with him there. I don't know much about poems, though I've read excellent examples on this site. This one seems to follow the rondeau rule.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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The poor souls. They fell in love by the waves and it's only fitting that she should part with him there. I don't know much about poems, though I've read excellent examples on this site. This one seems to follow the rondeau rule.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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It does indeed, Alex - thank you so much!
:) Sharyn
Comment from ephraim crud, COS.
beautifully composed my dear Sharyn as one would only expect from your gifted little hand :) sending warm wishes your way from Connie Linctus and brother Eph xx
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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beautifully composed my dear Sharyn as one would only expect from your gifted little hand :) sending warm wishes your way from Connie Linctus and brother Eph xx
Comment Written 04-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2013
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well bless you and your lovely sister eph! Thank you both VERY much for a wonderful sixer! Tell her I'll be posting a short story about a bloody MONKEY later on in the week, probably Saturday. God, the things we do! :))))
Comment from Jendowoz
Great poem, Sharyn. Love the last verse when you cast a lover's ashes into the tradewinds, very nice. Like it was their special place once and now returned to bless one of them passing.
Regards, Jen
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2013
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Great poem, Sharyn. Love the last verse when you cast a lover's ashes into the tradewinds, very nice. Like it was their special place once and now returned to bless one of them passing.
Regards, Jen
Comment Written 03-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2013
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You've got it - thx so much Jen! :)Sharyn
Comment from adewpearl
strong rhymes in good rondeau form
nice alliteration in sing through silken
vivid detail of setting with good sensory appeal
lovely alliteration in soft-spun sand/smile/slide
more good alliteration follows
good use of enjambment to create good flow
what a poignant closing as we learn the speaker is tossing her beloved ashes into the ocean where they spent so much loving time together :-)
I almost forgot to say I really like your choice of refrain line Brooke
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2013
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strong rhymes in good rondeau form
nice alliteration in sing through silken
vivid detail of setting with good sensory appeal
lovely alliteration in soft-spun sand/smile/slide
more good alliteration follows
good use of enjambment to create good flow
what a poignant closing as we learn the speaker is tossing her beloved ashes into the ocean where they spent so much loving time together :-)
I almost forgot to say I really like your choice of refrain line Brooke
Comment Written 03-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2013
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thx so much Brooke! :)S
Comment from wordsareus
It seems like you're a pro at writing a rondeau even if it is your first attempt. :) I truly loved your poem. It is worthy of a six. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2013
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It seems like you're a pro at writing a rondeau even if it is your first attempt. :) I truly loved your poem. It is worthy of a six. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 03-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2013
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Bless you for a lovely six for my first rondeau! yeah!!!!
big hugs,
Sharyn
Comment from Vampires kiss
This is a great poem, I really like the message its sending about love. We as a race are truly blessed if we find someone who makes us feel that way!! Great job and keep up the great work!
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2013
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This is a great poem, I really like the message its sending about love. We as a race are truly blessed if we find someone who makes us feel that way!! Great job and keep up the great work!
Comment Written 03-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2013
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Thx so much Vk! :)Sharyn
Comment from fairy77
Way to go!That was an indeed marvelous piece. I loved it and this rondeau style:)Your vocabulary is wonderful and adieu was priceless:)Well done!beth fairy77.
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2013
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Way to go!That was an indeed marvelous piece. I loved it and this rondeau style:)Your vocabulary is wonderful and adieu was priceless:)Well done!beth fairy77.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2013
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Bless you Beth! :)Sharyn
Comment from donaldww
I like your rondeau, as trade winds sing, and can imagine them blowing across my face standing on the beach, one of my favourite places to be.
Excellent!
Cheers,
DW
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2013
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I like your rondeau, as trade winds sing, and can imagine them blowing across my face standing on the beach, one of my favourite places to be.
Excellent!
Cheers,
DW
Comment Written 02-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2013
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mine too, DW - though I'd think they'd be a little in short supply in your neck of the woods?
:)S
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I live near Lake Ontario, and do travel to the ocean. LOL