Joseph
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Joseph Part 3 Spies"The story of Joseph told in verse.
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Comment from nancy_e_davis
Another great addition to one of my favorite Bible stories. You do a wonderful job on these stories and then fully explain them in your notes. Well done Roxie. Nancy
reply by the author on 02-May-2013
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Another great addition to one of my favorite Bible stories. You do a wonderful job on these stories and then fully explain them in your notes. Well done Roxie. Nancy
Comment Written 02-May-2013
reply by the author on 02-May-2013
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Thank you Nancy, Rox
Comment from Writingfundimension
Interesting to see how Joseph turns the tables in this abbreviated version of the Bible story. I'm impressed with your rhyming, Rox. Very nice write!
Hugs, Bev
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
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Interesting to see how Joseph turns the tables in this abbreviated version of the Bible story. I'm impressed with your rhyming, Rox. Very nice write!
Hugs, Bev
Comment Written 01-May-2013
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
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Thank you Bev. Rox
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You're welcome, Rox!
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
This is well written my friend you are translating this story so well I liked the way this reads and its presentation well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
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This is well written my friend you are translating this story so well I liked the way this reads and its presentation well done regards Jill
Comment Written 01-May-2013
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
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Thank you Jill, Rox
Comment from dmt1967
'Jacob says, "In Egypt they have wheat to sell,Take the wagons, please don't fail."' this doesn't fit in with the poem
If we don't return he will die!""Then do this to prove (you're not spies.) in my opinion (you're not a spy) sounds better
Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
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'Jacob says, "In Egypt they have wheat to sell,Take the wagons, please don't fail."' this doesn't fit in with the poem
If we don't return he will die!""Then do this to prove (you're not spies.) in my opinion (you're not a spy) sounds better
Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 01-May-2013
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
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Okay I'll look at it again, thank you.
Comment from barkingdog
I'd forgotten that they'd left Simeon and not gone back for him. Poor Jacob thinks he's lost another son.
Fine rhyming couplets and good use of enjambment to keep the lines flowing smoothly.
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
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I'd forgotten that they'd left Simeon and not gone back for him. Poor Jacob thinks he's lost another son.
Fine rhyming couplets and good use of enjambment to keep the lines flowing smoothly.
Comment Written 01-May-2013
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
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Yes poor Simeon, in jail for months. ={ But I'm sure he was well treated, maybe. Thank you. Rox
Comment from God's Writer
Oops! I got it backwards. Sorry. Another wonderful message and sermon. You took me back in time in a different way from the scriptures. I like that. Thank you
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
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Oops! I got it backwards. Sorry. Another wonderful message and sermon. You took me back in time in a different way from the scriptures. I like that. Thank you
Comment Written 01-May-2013
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
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Thank you Erick, rox
Comment from mumsyone
A good retelling of Joseph's story, in rhyme. Good rhyme and meter, and you stuck to the true order of events, which is very important.
But found their money was in each mans (man's) sack.
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
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A good retelling of Joseph's story, in rhyme. Good rhyme and meter, and you stuck to the true order of events, which is very important.
But found their money was in each mans (man's) sack.
Comment Written 01-May-2013
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
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Thanks you, I'll make that correction. I always miss something. =} Rox
Comment from conroy11
This is a clever poem and very accurate concerning the Biblical details involving Jacob's twelve sons. The story of Joseph is a well-known one and one of my personal favorites. The rhyme scheme works well and the imagery is vivid.
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
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This is a clever poem and very accurate concerning the Biblical details involving Jacob's twelve sons. The story of Joseph is a well-known one and one of my personal favorites. The rhyme scheme works well and the imagery is vivid.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
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Thanks so much.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
The story of Joseph from Genesis: 42 is retold interestingly, truth ultimately is on verge of test, a state of recognition appears and proof surmounts, nice taletelling, smooth progression, interesting, inspirational. 28/304
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
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The story of Joseph from Genesis: 42 is retold interestingly, truth ultimately is on verge of test, a state of recognition appears and proof surmounts, nice taletelling, smooth progression, interesting, inspirational. 28/304
Comment Written 30-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 01-May-2013
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Thank you, Roxanna