Final Decision.
Leaving the door open a crack.7 total reviews
Comment from Nebukadneser
Absolutely brilliant! This is so true it made me take a step back as it sunk in. you are the other side of brilliant, my friend with this well written poem you show us your talent.
Well done
you rock
Good luck with the competition.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Absolutely brilliant! This is so true it made me take a step back as it sunk in. you are the other side of brilliant, my friend with this well written poem you show us your talent.
Well done
you rock
Good luck with the competition.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Thank you for the glowing review. Have a good day or evening if that is the case.
Comment from BeasPeas
Very interesting and good lines to live by. 'Never say never!' Yes, leave the door open a crack. I find most decisions can be altered, rectified, modified in some way.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Very interesting and good lines to live by. 'Never say never!' Yes, leave the door open a crack. I find most decisions can be altered, rectified, modified in some way.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from RYME4U
This message is so true. It is wise advice. The owl and hourglass are very appropriate.You have done the tetracyts style perfectly . Good job!
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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This message is so true. It is wise advice. The owl and hourglass are very appropriate.You have done the tetracyts style perfectly . Good job!
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Martin Chan
A good simple Tetractys poem. Also an illustration of good thinking in writing the poem, a good idea, i.e. to show flexibility in making decisions.The poem also conformed to the rules of a Tetractys poem. The only thing to say is that if you put it in a straight it is more like a statement, the line statement divided to look like a poem.But if it is the right way to write it is ok. Otherwise I would make a few modifications so as not to look like a split sentence.
Good idea and a good poem indeed.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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A good simple Tetractys poem. Also an illustration of good thinking in writing the poem, a good idea, i.e. to show flexibility in making decisions.The poem also conformed to the rules of a Tetractys poem. The only thing to say is that if you put it in a straight it is more like a statement, the line statement divided to look like a poem.But if it is the right way to write it is ok. Otherwise I would make a few modifications so as not to look like a split sentence.
Good idea and a good poem indeed.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2013
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Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this tetractys poem about the way some people put off making decisions. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2013
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this is very well written, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this tetractys poem about the way some people put off making decisions. i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2013
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Thanks for the kind review.
Comment from donaldww
The writing prompt instructions for this contest, which are printed directly below your poem, say that the last stanza should have 10 syllables. That is a typo, since the poem only has one stanza. It is referring to the last line, which should have 10 syllables. The last line of your poem has 5 syllables.
The hour is upon you to make corrections.
Cheers,
DW
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Corrections made!
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2013
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The writing prompt instructions for this contest, which are printed directly below your poem, say that the last stanza should have 10 syllables. That is a typo, since the poem only has one stanza. It is referring to the last line, which should have 10 syllables. The last line of your poem has 5 syllables.
The hour is upon you to make corrections.
Cheers,
DW
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Corrections made!
Comment Written 27-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2013
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Done. Thanks
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Great. I've upgraded to excellent!
Cheers, DW
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thanks
Comment from RodG
You do not have a true Tetractys re: syllables.
Unclear how/why we have arrived at this final juncture. Too ambiguous.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2013
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You do not have a true Tetractys re: syllables.
Unclear how/why we have arrived at this final juncture. Too ambiguous.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2013
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Please advise where am I off on syllable count? Intended to be a mystery. Thanks
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Last line is supposed to have 10 syllables.
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Made all changes. Thanks for heads up.