My Life in words
Viewing comments for Chapter 39 "Lonely Life."All of my poems of release.
10 total reviews
Comment from Earl of Oxford
Excellent and sad metaphors do describe loneliness, Jaq.
It's so easy to just chug along alone with the intention of doing something about it...tomorrow! Of course, being alone often knocks our confidence and ability to do something positive about it, when it seems easier for now to leave things as they are. Of course, new friends rarely come knocking on the front door.
I hope this isn't too bio, as I thought the hospital where you work must have various clubs and events to attend, and friends made at work are easier than complete strangers in a new and sometimes scary environment.
Best wishes, Ray
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Excellent and sad metaphors do describe loneliness, Jaq.
It's so easy to just chug along alone with the intention of doing something about it...tomorrow! Of course, being alone often knocks our confidence and ability to do something positive about it, when it seems easier for now to leave things as they are. Of course, new friends rarely come knocking on the front door.
I hope this isn't too bio, as I thought the hospital where you work must have various clubs and events to attend, and friends made at work are easier than complete strangers in a new and sometimes scary environment.
Best wishes, Ray
Comment Written 16-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2013
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Awwww thank you Ray, this is a wonderful review, but fear not, I'm fine ;-). I tend to just write things out of my system and then all is ok. Great to see you back. :) Jaq xx
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Thank goodness for the outlet of writing, Jaq. xx
Comment from adewpearl
excellent alliteration in your opening
good pairing of cloaked and confined
I love the powerful imagery of the mind's virtual cell
strong verbs and alliteration in wither and wilt
you capture the essence of loneliness well
mind's barbed wire - a very compelling image to close
Brooke
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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excellent alliteration in your opening
good pairing of cloaked and confined
I love the powerful imagery of the mind's virtual cell
strong verbs and alliteration in wither and wilt
you capture the essence of loneliness well
mind's barbed wire - a very compelling image to close
Brooke
Comment Written 15-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2013
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Thanks so very much Brooke great as always to hear your thoughts xx
Comment from mruss1
Good morning and this is really quite excellent. I looked for it in the voting booths but couldn't find the catagory:)You definitely caught the essense of lonliness very much like being a prisoner within ones own mind. Have a great day and take care my friend....Mark
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2013
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Good morning and this is really quite excellent. I looked for it in the voting booths but couldn't find the catagory:)You definitely caught the essense of lonliness very much like being a prisoner within ones own mind. Have a great day and take care my friend....Mark
Comment Written 14-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2013
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Thanks so much for your wonderful review and rating Mark, as always your words mean a lot to me. :) Jaq xx
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You know you are always welcome:) Don't forget that poem that might have been a wee bit charming:) All I can say is the words are truly mine. Take care and great job:)
Comment from Perp Ihebom
This is well written to show the pain in a life of loneliness. Many times like the poem suggests, it is self inflicted. Well done
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2013
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This is well written to show the pain in a life of loneliness. Many times like the poem suggests, it is self inflicted. Well done
Comment Written 14-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2013
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Thank you as always Perp, much appreciated xx
Comment from CR Delport
This poem is very well written. You did very well to reflect that state of loneliness as a very dark and terrifying place. Well done and good luck.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2013
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This poem is very well written. You did very well to reflect that state of loneliness as a very dark and terrifying place. Well done and good luck.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2013
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Thanks for your review much appreciated. The competition is finished but it didn't get a vote :) maybe next time xx
Comment from Isaac Kavik
Nice poem of despair here. It has well written and thought out imagery.Thanks for posting and goood luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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Nice poem of despair here. It has well written and thought out imagery.Thanks for posting and goood luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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Many thanks Isaac, much appreciated. x
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very wel lwritten, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about the loneliness that locks us away in our minds. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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this is very wel lwritten, mystery writer, you did an excellent job writing this free verse poem about the loneliness that locks us away in our minds. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2013
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Thank you so much swj, much appreciated.
Comment from wiljacro
HI! I once lodged with a Lady who had severe Agrophobia, it was like sharing a house with a Zombe. She would not go outside even to take milk bottles off the front door step, and if the cat managed to escape outside, she would beg me to go out to find it and be in tears as she asked because she knew she was ill but could not find a cure! I had to leave after a month of listening to her sad excuses for not coping. wiljacro.
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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HI! I once lodged with a Lady who had severe Agrophobia, it was like sharing a house with a Zombe. She would not go outside even to take milk bottles off the front door step, and if the cat managed to escape outside, she would beg me to go out to find it and be in tears as she asked because she knew she was ill but could not find a cure! I had to leave after a month of listening to her sad excuses for not coping. wiljacro.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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Awww bless her wiljacro, it's not autobiographical. :) Thanks for reviewing
Comment from Indie Skreet
this is a very powerful write my friend and you have illustrated loneliness a bit too accurately. I see this is a competition entry too, so I wish you luck ........ think this one is a strong contender, warmly Indie xx
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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this is a very powerful write my friend and you have illustrated loneliness a bit too accurately. I see this is a competition entry too, so I wish you luck ........ think this one is a strong contender, warmly Indie xx
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review Indie my friend and good wishes x
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always a pleasure for one of my faves :) xx
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oh by the way - forgive me, I have been a-flirtin' a bit today with you know who lol xx
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hahahahahahhaha I'm not sure I do as I'm not sure who you are :) xx
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snap! lol
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what I mean is I haven't a f..k who I am either lol
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LMAO !! xx
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me too you nutter! lol lol lol xxx
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes you have expressed your thoughts very strongly in this poem it reads very well and I liked the way you closed the poem very creative well done regards Jill
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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Yes you have expressed your thoughts very strongly in this poem it reads very well and I liked the way you closed the poem very creative well done regards Jill
Comment Written 12-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2013
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This is much appreciated Jill, thank you :) x