All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Soft Curtains"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from G.B. Smith
Ahoha nui Sharyn
You have nailed this one. I love the artwork, it reminds me of nights I spent up on the North shore at night
Bear
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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Ahoha nui Sharyn
You have nailed this one. I love the artwork, it reminds me of nights I spent up on the North shore at night
Bear
Comment Written 01-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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Bless you, Bear - yes, our moon is incredibly bright here - no city lights to get in the way! :)S
Comment from Lulube
Well you certainly got me with wax poetic. Had to get the dictionary out, then again and I should still look again. I think I have the drift of it - so that we can enjoy the poetic mood of the reappearance. Am I close? Other than that I enjoyed the poem and your descriptive visions in passing.
Lulube
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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Well you certainly got me with wax poetic. Had to get the dictionary out, then again and I should still look again. I think I have the drift of it - so that we can enjoy the poetic mood of the reappearance. Am I close? Other than that I enjoyed the poem and your descriptive visions in passing.
Lulube
Comment Written 01-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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"to wax poetic" - an idiomatic expression simply meaning "to be profusely poetic". The moon through the month is either "waxing" or "waning" - i.e. growing bigger, or growing smaller - so this is where the expression actually came from. Hope that helps dear! :)))Sharyn
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Ya I read that. Didn't apply to my logic. Close but no cigar. Thxs for your reply with your explanation of wax poetic.
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"close but no cigar"??????
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Oh, it's an old slang term for almost getting, having, etc. for to achieve getting, having, etc. you win the cigar!
lol
lulube
Comment from ravenblack
tricky thing personifying the inanimate w/out it seeming silly. well, you definitely don't fall in that trap. really like " her blowing curtains of soft gray rain/ to peer at us"
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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tricky thing personifying the inanimate w/out it seeming silly. well, you definitely don't fall in that trap. really like " her blowing curtains of soft gray rain/ to peer at us"
Comment Written 01-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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I agree rb - the "odes" usually have me in fits of giggles (which is why I never write them!) :)S
Comment from wordsareus
I enjoyed reading your poem Soft curtains. It is beautifully written and the imagery is wonderful. My absolute favorite part is the last stanza.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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I enjoyed reading your poem Soft curtains. It is beautifully written and the imagery is wonderful. My absolute favorite part is the last stanza.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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thx so much my dear! :)Sharyn
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Bravo! You get my first six this week!
There's a round window << wonderful metaphor
glinting silver
in the sky tonight
Languid, << One of my favorite words
the full moon
slowly sweeps back
her blowing curtains of soft grey rain << Truly outstanding
to peer at us
in vast amusement
before she slides them closed again
and slips back into bed of velvet << Another fabulous metaphor
Like voyeurs,
we wait for her to reappear
so we can wax poetic
You are a word master... word mistress? Word PERSON! I think that's the PC word now. :)
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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Bravo! You get my first six this week!
There's a round window << wonderful metaphor
glinting silver
in the sky tonight
Languid, << One of my favorite words
the full moon
slowly sweeps back
her blowing curtains of soft grey rain << Truly outstanding
to peer at us
in vast amusement
before she slides them closed again
and slips back into bed of velvet << Another fabulous metaphor
Like voyeurs,
we wait for her to reappear
so we can wax poetic
You are a word master... word mistress? Word PERSON! I think that's the PC word now. :)
Comment Written 01-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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BLESS YOU FOR YOUR MAGIC SIX ON THIS ONE PHYLLIS! WHAT A LOVELY WAY TO START MY WEEK! THANK YOU THANK YOU THANK YOU! HAPPY TO ANSWER TO ALL THOSE DEFINITIONS - AND NOW HAVE A GOOFY GRIN ON MY FACE! :)))SHARYN
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Either your cap key is stuck or you are reeeealllly excited. LOL! Well, I'm glad, because a goofy grin looks good on you!
You should write more poetry. You really do have a flair! :)
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naah - just felt like writing in capitals dear! Glad you enjoy my poetry - so much easier than scripts! :)))S
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Easier to read, too. I am verrrry lazy. :)
Comment from words
As a long time moon lover, how I could I not love this one.
I especially loved:
Like voyeurs,
we wait for her to reappear
so we can wax poetic
Hugs, d
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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As a long time moon lover, how I could I not love this one.
I especially loved:
Like voyeurs,
we wait for her to reappear
so we can wax poetic
Hugs, d
Comment Written 01-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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thx d! :)Sharyn
Comment from vkmack
So soft and gentle and lovely. Do I hear Chopin in the background? I'll be darned. This is what we all think and want to say but can't, and you've captured it and Lady Luna so perfectly. Wouldn't change a line or word. I hate to keep gushing over your work, but come on. This is just fabulous. It won't let me give you another six because I've made a habit of it. Ahhh, whatever.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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So soft and gentle and lovely. Do I hear Chopin in the background? I'll be darned. This is what we all think and want to say but can't, and you've captured it and Lady Luna so perfectly. Wouldn't change a line or word. I hate to keep gushing over your work, but come on. This is just fabulous. It won't let me give you another six because I've made a habit of it. Ahhh, whatever.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2013
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2013
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well I'm delighted that you 'get' my work vk - that means a great deal to me! and yes, absolutely Chopin! was brought up with him instead of Beatles ... :)Sharyn
Comment from Deborah Marie
Nice progression, rhythm and flow. Nice color scheme and poem along with beautiful photo choice. Clever use of words, Deb
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2013
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Nice progression, rhythm and flow. Nice color scheme and poem along with beautiful photo choice. Clever use of words, Deb
Comment Written 31-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2013
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thx so much Deb! :)S
Comment from JM daSilva
What do I imagine? A noir movie. Cops on stakeout. Falling in love with a possible femme fatale. I don't know why my mind goes in that direction, but it's your fault.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2013
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What do I imagine? A noir movie. Cops on stakeout. Falling in love with a possible femme fatale. I don't know why my mind goes in that direction, but it's your fault.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2013
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of course it is!
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lol
Comment from Sasha
This is lovely. You convey such a strong, vivid image that you actually didn't need the illustration...yet it is also lovely. Very, very nice work with this one.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2013
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This is lovely. You convey such a strong, vivid image that you actually didn't need the illustration...yet it is also lovely. Very, very nice work with this one.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2013
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illustrations are always just the icing on the cake - though this one was uncannily like what I saw, I couldn't resist! :)s