Animated Stills
Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Maiden in the Ice"Inspiration of Life from Photographs
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Comment from STEPHEN A CARTER
Took a risk, paid the price. Risked all and paid the price.
Can freeze up a whole bay. Can freeze up Thunder Bay.
Maiden took bad advice, And served with bad advice,
Just a few suggestions to make the lines flow better. Regretfully this poem is not up to your usual high standards. However, I offered constructive criticism and not hearty verbiage that would stroke a poet's ego. I would expect no less the same from you.
With respect and warm regards:
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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Took a risk, paid the price. Risked all and paid the price.
Can freeze up a whole bay. Can freeze up Thunder Bay.
Maiden took bad advice, And served with bad advice,
Just a few suggestions to make the lines flow better. Regretfully this poem is not up to your usual high standards. However, I offered constructive criticism and not hearty verbiage that would stroke a poet's ego. I would expect no less the same from you.
With respect and warm regards:
Comment Written 06-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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Thanks Steve. I take your point, you're trying to get it iambic, which I didn't claim it to be. I like the Thunder Bay idea, and used it.
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My dear Treishal: Thanks and I'm glad there was no animosity generated between like minded scribes. As brothers of the written word, I admire your ability as a professional.
Again with warm regards:
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None at all. I appreciate good input and dialog. I consider that's what this site is about. Best regards.
Comment from fastdigits
A fascinating tale of the lore
of the mighty lake and of the
damsel who found distress and
is now forever immortal as she
remains frozen in time for all
who do not heed the advice of
not going on the ice.
Well done
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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A fascinating tale of the lore
of the mighty lake and of the
damsel who found distress and
is now forever immortal as she
remains frozen in time for all
who do not heed the advice of
not going on the ice.
Well done
Comment Written 06-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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Thank you fastdigits. Like your poetic review.
Comment from poseytoon
ooooooh! Scawwy. Great story and poem. I think I might have married that women once:) [sorry] You ARE really a talented poet and photographer, I look forward to your 'Animated Stills Poetry Book'. Thank you for this ... and good luck.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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ooooooh! Scawwy. Great story and poem. I think I might have married that women once:) [sorry] You ARE really a talented poet and photographer, I look forward to your 'Animated Stills Poetry Book'. Thank you for this ... and good luck.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2013
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Thank you poseytoon. Got a few more to write. Want to get it to 25 poems. I'm at 19 right now.
Comment from Johnny-artist
"Superior's howling winds
Stiffened up sodden clothes
Image now forever
Remains right where she froze."
Wow! A wonderful piece~ imagery of grandness... receiving the brilliance of "Maiden in the Ice"... delighted in and impressed with familiarity. I'm figuring that it's one of your colossal works Treischel!! Thanks for sharing!!! uncleJohn
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2013
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"Superior's howling winds
Stiffened up sodden clothes
Image now forever
Remains right where she froze."
Wow! A wonderful piece~ imagery of grandness... receiving the brilliance of "Maiden in the Ice"... delighted in and impressed with familiarity. I'm figuring that it's one of your colossal works Treischel!! Thanks for sharing!!! uncleJohn
Comment Written 05-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2013
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Thank you uncleJohn. I'm very pleased with your review and high ranking.
Comment from Robin Gilmor
Great idea and an interesting story you authored. Very creative to match your photo to verse. The picture and colors add dramatic effect to your verse.
lI truly love it. Smiles, Robin :)
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Great idea and an interesting story you authored. Very creative to match your photo to verse. The picture and colors add dramatic effect to your verse.
lI truly love it. Smiles, Robin :)
Comment Written 04-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2013
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Thank you Robin, the old Muse was awake!
Comment from Black_Oxygen
This poetry is written well and very detailed. The
rhymes are used skillfully and it is easy to read.
It held my interest from start to finish. The
attached photo is a befitting accent the helps the
reader to visualize the message of the poem. Thank
You for your creation.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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This poetry is written well and very detailed. The
rhymes are used skillfully and it is easy to read.
It held my interest from start to finish. The
attached photo is a befitting accent the helps the
reader to visualize the message of the poem. Thank
You for your creation.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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Thank you Black_Oxygen. I was a fun write.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I loved it, what a wonderful story you've made up here. It is really sad though, but you came out with an excellent reason for the way the ice looks. It does too! A pleasure to read. xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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I loved it, what a wonderful story you've made up here. It is really sad though, but you came out with an excellent reason for the way the ice looks. It does too! A pleasure to read. xsx Sandra
Comment Written 03-Mar-2013
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2013
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Thank you Sandra. I was a fun read.