Mother Earth
My land is burning, wildlife perish, people homeless.18 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
This free verse give strong images of a sere landscape that needs rain. It also says that man has mistreated the land and that is why it is the way it is. If people go back to the old ways and let nature control things than the land will prosper again.
The woman in the picture looks worried about her land.
I like the red background that could be fire.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2015
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This free verse give strong images of a sere landscape that needs rain. It also says that man has mistreated the land and that is why it is the way it is. If people go back to the old ways and let nature control things than the land will prosper again.
The woman in the picture looks worried about her land.
I like the red background that could be fire.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 15-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2015
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Thank you friend. I wrote this some time ago. You must have been peeking in my portfolio. Blessings, Kay.
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You're welcome. I got to it my hitting the READ prompt and Recognized nature writing.
Joan
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Thanks Joan, I try to write about my country and the aboriginal folks, my grandma was aboriginal. :-)XX
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You're welcome, Aussie.
Joan
Comment from artisart4u
This is truly a poem about Mother Earth and how new growth will come again.
You have the thoughts of the aboriginal people in you description of how they feel as they see what is going and how the White race feels about growth, expansion.
Good luck with your poem.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2015
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This is truly a poem about Mother Earth and how new growth will come again.
You have the thoughts of the aboriginal people in you description of how they feel as they see what is going and how the White race feels about growth, expansion.
Good luck with your poem.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2015
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2015
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Bless you for reading and reviewing. I have written 12 chapters for a little book on Aboriginal Dreaming. Cheers, Kay.
Comment from Carolyn Hilliard
Like the Aboriginals, the Indians in our country knew how to take care of Mother Earth to help her renew herself. I wish too the original people had been learned from, they were wiser. May God bless our countries.
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Like the Aboriginals, the Indians in our country knew how to take care of Mother Earth to help her renew herself. I wish too the original people had been learned from, they were wiser. May God bless our countries.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2013
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Thank you so much Carolyn. Blessings, Kay.
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Aussie .....
What you have presented here, with your descriptive words about the fires that have raged in your country, brings to life that which we have heard of in News Reports.
There is just one small change to suggest ...
* You have - that lay on her breast ... I suggest -
that lie on her breast.
The vast destruction of trees and natural vegetation caused by fires is terrible but my heart goes out to all the little animals and even birds and insects that are killed through such infernos.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Hullo Aussie .....
What you have presented here, with your descriptive words about the fires that have raged in your country, brings to life that which we have heard of in News Reports.
There is just one small change to suggest ...
* You have - that lay on her breast ... I suggest -
that lie on her breast.
The vast destruction of trees and natural vegetation caused by fires is terrible but my heart goes out to all the little animals and even birds and insects that are killed through such infernos.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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Interesting; Adewpearl suggested 'that laid on her breast' what to do? Thank you my friend for reading and reviewing. Love, kay.
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Lay is past tense - lie is present tense - and as your poem is written in the present tense, that is why I may my suggestion.
Love from ... Nanette Mary.
Comment from oNray
I will give five stars for the presentation- not content. I feel this is more of the voice of frustration. "White Men" sorry dumb is not a racial issue.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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I will give five stars for the presentation- not content. I feel this is more of the voice of frustration. "White Men" sorry dumb is not a racial issue.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2013
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It is not about presentation dear, it is about a poem. I am not racial, I am aboriginal. My people have managed the land for 54,000 years, well before the white men came. Australia is burning over five states (we only have seven states) this is caused through lack of Spring rains, westerly winds whipping fires up and of course the arsonist that think it is fun to watch.
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I understand your aboriginal with racial tones- sorry but that is what the poem says
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why did the "white man" stop burns? Do you think they said lets not burn and piss off the Aussies? Could there be an enviromental issue (such as pollution, wild life loss, danger to villages- towns etc'
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you see I as sorry about the terrable things that this has caused.I hear what you are saying but the two words "white man" jump out as Hitle and his officers- had to be a better way to give your message
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Sorry, don't understand your comments 'as Hitle and his officers had to be a better way to give your message' Are you referring to Hitler? You have lost me mate.
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The white Australians didn't understand how vital burning off before winter was, so they stopped it. No environmental issue, the land belongs to the Govt except the land they gave given back to the tribal elders of the Aborigines that are the original land owners.
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No, you don't understand at all. I am not a racist; Britain took this country by force, raped our women, chained our men and forced the children to become Christians.
Comment from LAFraser
Dear Kay, this is a beautiful poem filled with strong emotions, for our Blessed Mother Earth. My Native peoples continue to resist the white man's ways here. We have a strong movement now, Idle No More. Major corporations raping our Mother for more resources which will kill our natural resources we need to survive. My heart goes out to our cousins, the Aboriginals, as they are indeed wise, and would gladly share their wisdom with those who would listen. Thank you for sharing your gift with us, yet again, my friend. Blessings, Lisa
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2013
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Dear Kay, this is a beautiful poem filled with strong emotions, for our Blessed Mother Earth. My Native peoples continue to resist the white man's ways here. We have a strong movement now, Idle No More. Major corporations raping our Mother for more resources which will kill our natural resources we need to survive. My heart goes out to our cousins, the Aboriginals, as they are indeed wise, and would gladly share their wisdom with those who would listen. Thank you for sharing your gift with us, yet again, my friend. Blessings, Lisa
Comment Written 20-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2013
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Eilish, And so we have a common bond; whites have caused untold misery in every country they have invaded. Our women were raped, men told to cover up in what looks like diapers - children taught religious fairytales - 54,000 years our people have owned our land, now they own nothing not even their dignity. Bless you, Kay.
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That is so true, Kay. Blessings to you, as well, my friend. ~Lisa
Comment from mermaids
Excellent poem that captures the history of your country. It reminds me of the Native Americans in my country and how they always worked with the worked with the environment, not against it. I applaud your words and the message they give the world.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2013
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Excellent poem that captures the history of your country. It reminds me of the Native Americans in my country and how they always worked with the worked with the environment, not against it. I applaud your words and the message they give the world.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2013
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Thank you my friend; American Indians suffered the same fate in the hands of the white men. Blessings, Kay.
Comment from Taffspride
Oh how well you convey the message here. I think that we could all learn much from our native ancestors. The earth was sacred to them, they looked after it. They returned to the earth what they took out of it. The way it should be.
Your poem was so extremely well written, and powerful. I loved it. You painted the picture so well in so very few words.
Cannot wait to read more of your works.
Thank you for sharing.
Iechyd da
Ann
PS. Stay safe from the Wildfires.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2013
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Oh how well you convey the message here. I think that we could all learn much from our native ancestors. The earth was sacred to them, they looked after it. They returned to the earth what they took out of it. The way it should be.
Your poem was so extremely well written, and powerful. I loved it. You painted the picture so well in so very few words.
Cannot wait to read more of your works.
Thank you for sharing.
Iechyd da
Ann
PS. Stay safe from the Wildfires.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2013
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Hello Ann, Thank you for your kind review; glad you loved the poem. We can learn much from our ancestors. Blessings, Kay.
Comment from yonashalom
Nice poem.
Good imagery of these fires and the clouds unreleased.
Your poem is informative about Australia's landscape of which I did not know.
The end of your poem springs hope and I pray it does rain.
Thanks for the author notes. It's good to learn things from a firsthand experience shared.
~Yona
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2013
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Nice poem.
Good imagery of these fires and the clouds unreleased.
Your poem is informative about Australia's landscape of which I did not know.
The end of your poem springs hope and I pray it does rain.
Thanks for the author notes. It's good to learn things from a firsthand experience shared.
~Yona
Comment Written 20-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2013
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My people have been here for 54,000 years and we have no written language. The fires persist but we know that The Rainbow Serpent that formed the land will bring rains. Blessings, Kay.
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I've never heard of a Rainbow Serpent. Is that legend or a god? The only serpent I know is the cunning one, Satan.
Keep safe.
~Yona
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In our country, the Rainbow Serpent was sent by the Creator to make the land viable - he made his way across the land and formed the rivers. Our ancestors formed the trees and living creatures, when they had finished they did not leave, they made the trees their home (spirit.) Much to learn about Australia - we had no written language and our caves are sacred places, painted with colors from the earch. Telling tales of fishing, hunting and the coming of the white man. The white man came, brought influenza, raped our women, chained our men like cattle.I could go on!
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Wow, girlfriend. Interesting beliefs. Quite different from my beliefs and I think you know those from my writing.
The white men came here to America and well similar story with the A. Indians. What's up with that? The sin nature of man, greed.
So, I am curious, what ethnic groups are in Austrailia? Do you guys label people according to ethnicity or colors there like they do here in the States. Here (in common language) people are clasiified as White, Black, Spanish, Asian, A. Indian, or "Other." Some forms will have "multiracial" on them as so many have mixed with one another.
Comment from donaldww
I love pondering this poignant poem about the fires that ravage Australia.
Waiting for the rains, mother earth can't do much other than watch the animals run and the trees burn.
It is an amazing story that the first Australians were better at controlling the fire than the new settlers. The newbies have been there a long time now, yet haven't learned from the people that preceded them.
Excellent read!
Cheers,
DW
Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2013
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I love pondering this poignant poem about the fires that ravage Australia.
Waiting for the rains, mother earth can't do much other than watch the animals run and the trees burn.
It is an amazing story that the first Australians were better at controlling the fire than the new settlers. The newbies have been there a long time now, yet haven't learned from the people that preceded them.
Excellent read!
Cheers,
DW
Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2013
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Hello Donald, My people have been here for 54,000 years, managed the land and now they live on welfare and drink white man's firewater. So sad. Thank you - blessings, Kay.