haiku (gentle April breeze)
haiku 5-7=526 total reviews
Comment from Reddy Rimer
Your poem is unique in its description of the blossoms falling from the ruffling of the boughs. The tempo of the poem reveals an author of gentle nature.
It is hopeful, beautiful and original.
Connie
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2013
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Your poem is unique in its description of the blossoms falling from the ruffling of the boughs. The tempo of the poem reveals an author of gentle nature.
It is hopeful, beautiful and original.
Connie
Comment Written 14-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2013
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I wish I was of gentle nature, but I fear I'm not. But spring does bring out the best in all of us, and I'm so glad you liked my little haiku. This is a very well written review. Thank you
Comment from Rondeno
Congratulations on winning the haiku contest, and on writing such a beautiful little poem. It really evokes those balmy days of May!
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2013
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Congratulations on winning the haiku contest, and on writing such a beautiful little poem. It really evokes those balmy days of May!
Comment Written 13-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2013
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THank you Rondeno, this is a very lovely review
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Val
Delightful presentation, a perfect complement to your poem. Love the assonance of 'e' in your first line and consonance of 'f' in you satori. Fantastic satori line. I can just see that "pink confetti fall(s)". An excellent observation of the season. Spot on syllable count as per the rules of the contest. Congratulations ... a fine win, well deserved. Warm Regards - Lovinia
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2013
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Hi Val
Delightful presentation, a perfect complement to your poem. Love the assonance of 'e' in your first line and consonance of 'f' in you satori. Fantastic satori line. I can just see that "pink confetti fall(s)". An excellent observation of the season. Spot on syllable count as per the rules of the contest. Congratulations ... a fine win, well deserved. Warm Regards - Lovinia
Comment Written 13-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2013
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Thank you, Lovinia I cherish every exceptional I recieve. I'm so glad you enjoyed my haiku, and thank you for all your kind words.
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Hi Val
My pleasure! I love a good haiku..... and you nailed it. Hugs - Lovinia xoxo
Comment from minihawke
I really like this Haiku. Well chosen words create a beautiful image...gentle breeze, cherry boughs, pink confetti. No unnecessary words
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2013
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I really like this Haiku. Well chosen words create a beautiful image...gentle breeze, cherry boughs, pink confetti. No unnecessary words
Comment Written 12-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2013
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Thank you so much for this exceptional review! I really do cherish everyone I receive. I agree with you it is so important in haiku never to waste a syllable let alone a word. Thank you again.
Comment from October21
Beautiful imagery here! Loved your chosen artwork and colour scheme. Also I thought the metaphor of confetti at the end was lovely. You set the atmosphere to be calm and lovely which reflects the season of spring. Excellent description of the wind as 'gentle' to do this. Brilliant work I enjoyed reading:-)
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2013
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Beautiful imagery here! Loved your chosen artwork and colour scheme. Also I thought the metaphor of confetti at the end was lovely. You set the atmosphere to be calm and lovely which reflects the season of spring. Excellent description of the wind as 'gentle' to do this. Brilliant work I enjoyed reading:-)
Comment Written 12-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2013
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This is such a lovely review, thank you very much for taking the time to review this little haiku
Comment from honeytree
Nature allows her gifts to be shared.
The pink confetti falls to the ground
Sharing her beauty that can brighten up ones life.
Honey tree
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2013
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Nature allows her gifts to be shared.
The pink confetti falls to the ground
Sharing her beauty that can brighten up ones life.
Honey tree
Comment Written 12-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2013
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Thank you so much for the generous review, Honey tree.
Comment from l.raven
These are truly beautiful trees. My next door neighbor had ones. You can smell them for blocks. I love the wording and the colors .And the picture is beautiful. Very nicely written.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2013
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These are truly beautiful trees. My next door neighbor had ones. You can smell them for blocks. I love the wording and the colors .And the picture is beautiful. Very nicely written.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2013
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Thank you. I love cherry trees also.
Comment from adewpearl
your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 syllable count
I really like ruffle as your verb choice - it is exactly what a gentle breeze does
you create a very pretty scene that appeals to the sense of touch as well as sight
nice alliteration in breeze/blossom bough
and a really pretty, lighthearted image in your satori line :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2013
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your poem is in excellent 5/7/5 syllable count
I really like ruffle as your verb choice - it is exactly what a gentle breeze does
you create a very pretty scene that appeals to the sense of touch as well as sight
nice alliteration in breeze/blossom bough
and a really pretty, lighthearted image in your satori line :-) Brooke
Comment Written 11-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2013
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Thank you, Brooke. Great review as always.
Comment from expressions9
This is a lovely haiku with great imagery.
I like the last line "pink confetti falls" - a truly beautiful scene when it happens.
Great photo accompaniment. Well done on this write!
Christine
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2013
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This is a lovely haiku with great imagery.
I like the last line "pink confetti falls" - a truly beautiful scene when it happens.
Great photo accompaniment. Well done on this write!
Christine
Comment Written 11-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2013
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Thank you so much, Christne. This is a lovely review
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You're very welcome :)
Comment from L. Sherman
I think confetti is fairly appropriate for the showers those delicate blooms rain upon people. Nice alliteration in the second line, and a gorgeous, well-place picture.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2013
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I think confetti is fairly appropriate for the showers those delicate blooms rain upon people. Nice alliteration in the second line, and a gorgeous, well-place picture.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2013
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2013
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Thank you so much for this great review.