Comment from pRINCEssStar

Excellent

Hello there most talented poet. These are fantastic couplets from start to finish. I would rate this a 10 star because you are a shining writer. Fantastic to feel and fly free as the lovely gem you are.

 Comment Written 09-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 10-Jan-2013

Thanks so much for your very kind words J4A your review is much appreciated. :) Jaq xx

Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

good alliteration in depths of despair
strong use of rhyming couplets
excellent alliteration in torrential torment tumbles
good assonance of long I sounds in try/smile/hide
nice imagery in the diamond bright line
strong expression of intense emotion in engulfed in blackest hue
good alliteration and imagery in swan song
and in fly free
:-) Brooke

 Comment Written 07-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2013

Thank you so much Brooke, once again, for your very detailed and lovely review. :) Jaq xx

Comment from RJ

Excellent

Your poem was well written with a good flow and rhyming. A person does go through different stages in the life love themselves at time. I liked your ending.

It's time to be brave, to fly free,
start to love the person that's me.

Thank you for sharing.
RJ

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2013

Thanks RJ, you review is much appreciated. :) Jaq x

Comment from Black_Oxygen

Excellent

It's time to be brave, to fly free,
start to love the person that's me.

I like this poetry a lot. The flow is wonderful. It
holds the reader's attention from start to finish.
The meaning is powerful and enjoyable. Thank You
for your creation.

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 07-Jan-2013

Thanks so much for your very kind review, always a pleasure. :) Jaq x

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Hello my friend until you love yourself I never feel that you can love somebody else because you done understand the true meaning well done on this write regards Jill

 Comment Written 06-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 06-Jan-2013

Thanks Jill and you are so right as ever. You know what it's like I'd guess. Take care :) Jaq x

Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

Was this once again so wrong?
Will this be my final swan song?

Unsure of my path once again,
lost on a road that's closing in.

It's time to be brave, to fly free,
start to love the person that's me.

That is so right JC and I'm all for it girl. You can make or break your world so I suggest you love yourself.

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013

Gungalo I know you are right indeed. I just needed to see it on paper/computer screen. Thanks once again for your kind words. :) Jaq xx

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

Hi Jaq, I think this can fit into many peoples lives at the present. It does come like two steps forward and three back at times. Strong imagery and emotion in this piece. I could feel the pain, the deeper ache of accepting the journey to loving the inner self.

Well done, and thanks for sharing it.
Maureen

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013

Thanks you so much for your very kind words Maureen, appreciated as ever. :) Jaq xx

Comment from Jim McLean

Excellent

What is see is loneliness then courage finding a true love, loosing that love then finding the courage to try again.

I don't know if that was your intension I hope I did not get it too wrong.
I really liked it

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013

Hi Jim, you are spot on. 'If at first you don't succeed' and all that. Thanks for reading my poem. :) Jaq x

Comment from Walu Feral

Excellent

Great work. It is a tough subject but i hear you! Keep up the good effort and before you know it you will see the people who care about you. congrats, i loved it.

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013

Thanks for a much appreciated review Feral. :) Jaq x

Comment from Rondeno

Excellent

Where is he, Jacqueline? I'll give him a good hiding for you.
To be serious for a moment, it's a rather touching poem, in rhyming couplets, detailing the hurt suffered by a woman, and her ultimate realisation that self-esteem is the way forward. Nice one! (And, looking like you do, I can't see this being your "swan song"!)

 Comment Written 05-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 05-Jan-2013

Lol Michael self-esteem is definitely the way forward. I need to dig seep to find mine, but dig I shall. Thanks for your kind words. :) Jacqueline xx