Comment from adewpearl

Excellent

I love the listing of such strong verbs in feel/embrace/devour
great expression of desire
touch/taste/engulf - more high-impact verbs to intensify emotion
nice listing in my love/heart/soul - a good balance of passion and romantic love :-) Brooke

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2013

Thank you as always Brooke for your very detailed and lovely review :) Jaq xx

reply by the author on 04-Jan-2013

Thank you as always Brooke for your very detailed and lovely review :) Jaq xx

Comment from Black_Oxygen

Excellent

WOW - This poetry should come with a warning label.
You need to wear a heat glove when reading and handling.
The meaning is powerful, the flow is perfect, and message
is HOT. Thank You for the fantasy and the thrill.

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2013

Glad you liked it Black_Oxygen. Your review is much appreciated. :) Jaq x

Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

Hello my friend I am playing catch up forgive me this is very well written very passionate and romantic brought to life very well with your words well done regards Jill

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 04-Jan-2013

Thanks for your review Jill, great as always. Hope you are keeping better. :) Jaq xx

Comment from Spike the second

Excellent

Hi Jaq
I hope Hogmanay was a craic for you. I got rather merry on rum and coke but am back in the real world again and I have a lot of catching up reviewing to do. Plus a lot of work. The family have now gone so the house is back to normal (Phew!)

Great poem my friend and a super piece of writing

have a great 2013.

Spike

 Comment Written 03-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2013

Thank you so much Spike, glad you survived the onslaught :). What I can remember of Hogmanay was wonderful ;). Always a prleasure to hear from you. You have a great 2013 too my friend. :) Jaq x

Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

come a little closer
taste my essence
as it flows
in rivulets of
passion
see it cascade
across my being


Experimenting with wanton desire I see. Well you do it very well and the lack of punctuation here doesn't even get missed. LOL.

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 03-Jan-2013

Thanks for your review, it always means a lot from you. I just feel it is lacking something, can't pt my finger on it. :) Jaq x

reply by Gungalo on 03-Jan-2013

Leave it for awhile.

reply by the author on 03-Jan-2013

Yea I may stay off for a little bit. :) xxx

reply by Gungalo on 03-Jan-2013

Sigh.

Comment from Jamezy

Excellent

Wow... You've started the new year in terrific form Mo Chara... I thought that was awesome.... Your words had a wonderful warmth. You can create such emotion in so few words... You just keep getting better and better Jaq Cee... Very well done........... With the French sounding name... Didn't have 6 stars to give you Jaq Cee so shall have to downgrade to five.. Sorry... Lol... X

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2013

Thanks mo chara it means a lot xx

reply by the author on 02-Jan-2013

Thanks mo chara it means a lot xx

Comment from Earl of Oxford

Excellent

Lovely profile pic of three good-lookers, Jaq.

I think 'lack of punstuation' works best in this form, which you present perfectly, and even go further and de-capitalise ALL 1st words in lines.

I'm not always a lover of repetition, but it works very well and dramatically here.

totally consumed' and 'rivulets of passion' are particularly strong in this beautifully raunchy but very tasteful poem.

Excellent!

Best wishes, Ray

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2013

Thanks for your lovely and detailed review Ray. You are another one I have missed being about. I will take out the capitals, thanks for that. I wanted the repetition on this to make a point. :) Jaq xx

reply by Earl of Oxford on 02-Jan-2013

Just took another peek, my pretty friend, and I think it looks much better now. xx

reply by the author on 02-Jan-2013

Thanks for your help as always Ray xxx

Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens

Excellent

You've written a very sexual poem and in good taste. It lets the emotional imagination soar yet without vulgarity. The poem has it's own way of emphasizing in areas and commas are not that necessary to this style. Good work, Carolyn

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2013

Thank you for this review Carolyn. It's always a pleasure to have people read my poems, :) Jaq x

Comment from reconciled

Excellent

Really Really good stuff Jax....i'm out of sixes...or you'd be wearing one -smile- your choice of words is excellent...and the poem dances a ballet...because of it. Love Michael

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2013

Thanks so much Michael for your very kind review, it's great to have you back. :) Jaq x

Comment from October21

Excellent

Flows beautifully Jaq though there is no constant rhyme. Sometimes this makes a lovely change:) glad this was clean enough or me to read. You describe heat and passion excellently. Great vocab: cascade, engulf, devour:)

 Comment Written 02-Jan-2013

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reply by the author on 02-Jan-2013

Ahhh Shenel I'll never write anything too raunchy for you to read my wee friend. Glad you liked it. :) Jaq xx