Comment from Mrs Happy Poet

Excellent

This is very well written my friend such a well written triolet it reads very well pondering life which is something we all do I feel when we reach a certain age well done regards Jill

 Comment Written 29-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 29-Dec-2012

Thanks Jill I've just been trying out different styles lately :) Jaq x

Comment from Spike the second

Excellent

What a lovely poem Jaq
Super observations as well. I often think blimey was it all those years ago a song we danced to one Christmas. But something took me by surprise the other day and that was a DVD we had for Christmas. It was a BBC3 program called Nighty Night. I could swear it was 2000 or earlier, but it was 2005. The year I was run over, so how the hell could I have forgot that. So some things do surprise me, but life does seem to be on fast forward since I was 21.

Great poem and so well written.

Blessings for 2013

Spike

 Comment Written 28-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012

Thanks Spike, great to see you about again. Life is indeed on the downward road now. :) Jaq xx

reply by Spike the second on 28-Dec-2012

Hi Jaq

I know it's only short bursts, as family are still around and New Year will soon be here. So more cooking, drinking and eating. I feel sick....LOL

Comment from October21

Excellent

Hi there Jaq, hoping you had a lovely Christmas- it went by so quickly!

I have one concern about this piece, though I am not sure. I am not too familiar on the triolet form so I am unsure of whteher or not there is a specific syllable count to follow for every line. If not, I believe you may have made a mistake in the line: Was there a time (when) love I did know?

Sorry if this is correct!:)

This poem is lovely as it shows a reflection one might make on there life- the first line sums it all up where you show how quickly time can pass. Excellent repetition of this line so that the message is really bold throughout and the poem keeps coming back to those words. I thought this was very cleverly written and liked the colour scheme as it relates to winter, which is mentioned in this piece:)

All the best,
Your friend,
Shenel

 Comment Written 27-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012

It is the syllable count that kept that line as is Shenel. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this, it's much appreciated my friend. :) Jaq x

Comment from Papabearua

Excellent

A difficult style handled very well. I am already in the winter of my life and am able to look back with some degree of satisfaction even though there are things I wish I had done differently.

 Comment Written 27-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012

Much appreciated as ever Papabearua :) Jaq x

Comment from Saucey

Excellent

For your 1st attempt you did absolutely wonderful. Right amount of syllables, ABAAABAB true Triolet. Well written, the poem makes sense (thought provoking), beautiful presentation. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 27-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012

Thank you very much Saucey for your in-depth and lovely review. :) Jaq x

Comment from Treischel

Excellent

Oh yes! Very nicely done! A beautiful format that echoes the lovely verse as it intertwines to make it sing and flow in lovely cascade. The lines all play so nicely together. That message is a wonderful realization of the seasons of life

 Comment Written 27-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 28-Dec-2012

Thank you so much for your lovely review as always Treischel :) Jaq x

Comment from Gungalo

Excellent

It's perfect girl and you didn't have to tell them I helped. LOL the repeating lines are wonderful in this one. I particularly liked this:

Where on earth did all the years go?
Now dawns the winter of my life.

 Comment Written 27-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2012

:) Credit where it's due my friend.

Thanks for your wonderful review. :) Jaq x

reply by Gungalo on 27-Dec-2012

Smiling.

Comment from el twelve

Excellent

that was beautifully written and congrats for you first time with this style you did great, love the picture because you can feel standing by the stream contemplating your questions

 Comment Written 27-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2012

Thank you so much el twelve your review is appreciated. :) Jaq x

Comment from Rondeno

Excellent

Very heartfelt, very sad. Does it fit in with what we were talking about earlier? You know, about having the urge to live more intensely?

 Comment Written 27-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2012

It does indeed Michael. Thanks for reading and commenting :) Jaq xx

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

Hi Jaq, a lovely work to read and thought provoking too. Time flies, and the older we get the quicker it seems to go.
This is a well penned work, though the technical parts of a triolet I'm not familiar with. I still loved reading it.
Thanks for sharing, Happy New Years!
Maureen

 Comment Written 27-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 27-Dec-2012

Thank you very much Maureen. Time does seem to fly by when as age creeps up on you. Thanks for reading this. :) Jaq xx