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Viewing comments for Chapter 104 "(Lune) Piece missing."All of my poems of release.
6 total reviews
Comment from Gungalo
Congratulations JC for a job well done. It was a real winner girl and you deserved to take top honors for this one. Again, awesome.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2012
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Congratulations JC for a job well done. It was a real winner girl and you deserved to take top honors for this one. Again, awesome.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2012
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Awww thank you so much. I wasn't sure I'd read the rules right ;)) xxxx
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Smile. You did girl.
Comment from Galactia
broken heart 3
like damaged jigsaw 5
piece missing 3
perfect 3'5'3 syllable count but unfortunately not a Haiku but a very well written and presented senryu.
GL in the conteswt
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2012
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broken heart 3
like damaged jigsaw 5
piece missing 3
perfect 3'5'3 syllable count but unfortunately not a Haiku but a very well written and presented senryu.
GL in the conteswt
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 20-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2012
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Its not meant to be a haiku it's a Lune but thanks for reviewing Tia
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I read this on Google before posting my poem. Maybe i haven't got the gist of it :(
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http://www.writersdigest.com/editor-blogs/poetic-asides/poets/poetic-form-lune
Comment from suep
I enjoyed this very much. It is short and simple, yet it speaks volumes. I love your choice of artwork and presentation also and wish you well in the contest! Excellent work!! :)
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2012
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I enjoyed this very much. It is short and simple, yet it speaks volumes. I love your choice of artwork and presentation also and wish you well in the contest! Excellent work!! :)
Comment Written 19-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much for your great review and fantastic rating suep.
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You're very welcome! :)
Comment from Melissa Regester
The lune is more challenging to create an image of nature due to the reduced amount of syllables. Yours hit 3:5:3 and smoothly told a story.
Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2012
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The lune is more challenging to create an image of nature due to the reduced amount of syllables. Yours hit 3:5:3 and smoothly told a story.
Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 19-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2012
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Thanks for your kind review Melissa, much appreciated.
Comment from Papabearua
11 syllables to define a broken heart. Very well done. The use of the jigsaw puzzle with the art work make the work easy to identify with. Your 3-5-3 held up as well.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2012
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11 syllables to define a broken heart. Very well done. The use of the jigsaw puzzle with the art work make the work easy to identify with. Your 3-5-3 held up as well.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much for your kind review.
Comment from Cariboubill
Perfect syllable count. You have captured the feelings of having a broken heart in a very clever way. The poem and picture make a complete story, even though there is a piece missing.
...Bill
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2012
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Perfect syllable count. You have captured the feelings of having a broken heart in a very clever way. The poem and picture make a complete story, even though there is a piece missing.
...Bill
Comment Written 19-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review and rating.