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All Those Puzzling Pieces

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What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?

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Comment from Angels27
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Wow! It is indeed deemed fit to be a winner. The passion and consuming want and desire flows through every single word in the poem. Very passionate with layers left for the reader's imagination to unfold.

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2012

reply by the author on 13-Dec-2012
    thx so much Angels - I had a lot of fun writing this one!
    Blessings,
    Sharyn
Comment from Glasstruth
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I can see why this one was a winner. You have an awesome, continuous flow of words that sound like one long sentence, but without any awkwardness. Your imagination is artistic and playful. Superb! Les

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2012

reply by the author on 13-Dec-2012
    thx so much Les!! and congrats on your lovely and well deserved award, too! :) Sharyn
Comment from Amanda Laiq
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"That sinful sax plays low enough to honeycomb down your white satin gown." Such a fantastic way of opening a really incredible work of literary art! The language was so beautiful, and it was a pleasure to read!

 Comment Written 13-Dec-2012

reply by the author on 13-Dec-2012
    thank you so much, Amanda - as you can tell, I had fun writing this one! :) Sharyn
Comment from Selina Stambi
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Sharyn - I am out of stars: please receive a virtual six.

You have such a unique style of poetry writing. I just love it -

That sinful sax plays low enough ....

Brilliant! I am fanning you NOW!

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2012

reply by the author on 12-Dec-2012
    bless you for your virtual '6' my dear - and I'd be totally delighted to have you 'fan' me! I shall return the favor!
    Blessings
    Sharyn
Comment from Janet Foor
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Congratulations!!! I can see why this poem won the contest. Sexy, hot and sultry. Great presentation with the black and white color scheme. Nice alliteration and great imagery as you combine music into this passionate piece. Best wishes, Janet

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2012

reply by the author on 12-Dec-2012
    thx so much Janet! :) Sharyn
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
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WOW! No wonder this won first prize! Well deserved! You have a poet's mind for sure.. what a way with words! Lovvve this part:

I'll play the dark and folded valleys of your body
and take you soaring over white-capped peaks of fire

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2012

reply by the author on 12-Dec-2012
    thx so much Phyllis ... soft porn mind, hmm? :)))
reply by Phyllis Stewart on 13-Dec-2012
    Indeed! LOL! At least NOW I know what WINS with FS folks. Haha. :)
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2012
    or God :)
reply by Phyllis Stewart on 13-Dec-2012
    Right! What a dichotomy, eh? LOL!
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2012
    certainly makes life interesting sometimes, in the reviewing department!
Comment from MidnightWriter4U
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Hot! Hot! Hot! "Get down and Bogey!" Great artwork choice for this theme. I really liked this: "drifting down, surrounding you with sultry light scent of musk, and husky laughter...." Ambiance is everything, don't you think? Great read!

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2012

reply by the author on 12-Dec-2012
    thx so much my dear - I had a lot of fun with this one! :)
reply by MidnightWriter4U on 13-Dec-2012
    yw, MN :)
Comment from fictionwriter
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I love the way you've worked the music into this romantic poem. I too think most things move to the music, and especially love. Nicely done.

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2012

reply by the author on 12-Dec-2012
    thx so much my dear! :) Sharyn
Comment from juliedickson55
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Well, what a steamy and provocative poem you have here!
I love the progressively more and more seductive lines, building to crescendo...the rhymes and the held-back lines, wait, not yet...

Well done.

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2012

reply by the author on 12-Dec-2012
    thx so much, Julie - this was a fun write. Blessings for your lovely SIX!!! I'm thrilled! :) Sharyn
Comment from Mai Mai
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This is an interesting piece. I like the way the music is used as both a person and an entity, capable of expressing very noticeable characteristics. Good job and good luck.

Mai Mai

 Comment Written 12-Dec-2012

reply by the author on 12-Dec-2012
    thx Mai Mai - I won with this one - yeah!
reply by Mai Mai on 13-Dec-2012
    Congratulations