haiku (soft pitter patter)
one of the sounds of autumn16 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
Your haiku is in excellent 5/7/5 form
I really like the sensory appeal to the sense of sound and the idea that the falling leaves sound like rain hitting the ground
good consonant pairing of soft/fall and good alliteration in crisp leaves cascade :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
Your haiku is in excellent 5/7/5 form
I really like the sensory appeal to the sense of sound and the idea that the falling leaves sound like rain hitting the ground
good consonant pairing of soft/fall and good alliteration in crisp leaves cascade :-) Brooke
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Thanks so much, Brooke, for your review. :>)
Comment from yonashalom
I love the sound of this. This is my favorite time of year too. I love the colors in the photo. You did a great job appealing to the senses. :)
Best wishes.
~Yona
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
I love the sound of this. This is my favorite time of year too. I love the colors in the photo. You did a great job appealing to the senses. :)
Best wishes.
~Yona
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much for your very thoughtful review. :>)
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Thank you so much for your very thoughtful review. :>)
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Thank you so much for your very thoughtful review. :>)
Comment from RJ
I enjoyed your poem. It gave a nice visual of a fall day when the seasons change and the leaves begin to fall in the wind. I saw nothing to change here. Good luck. RJ
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
I enjoyed your poem. It gave a nice visual of a fall day when the seasons change and the leaves begin to fall in the wind. I saw nothing to change here. Good luck. RJ
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much, RJ, for your thoughtful review.
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Thank you so much, RJ, for your thoughtful review.
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Thank you so much, RJ, for your thoughtful review.
Comment from MissMerri
Oh, this is so beautiful. I can actually hear the clatter of the leaves falling, like autumn rain. The vivid appeal to the senses makes this outstanding. I guess you've gotten your allotment of sixes for the month, but this is still deserving. Just lovely.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
Oh, this is so beautiful. I can actually hear the clatter of the leaves falling, like autumn rain. The vivid appeal to the senses makes this outstanding. I guess you've gotten your allotment of sixes for the month, but this is still deserving. Just lovely.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much, MissMerri, for your delightful review.
I always enjoy hearing from you. :>)
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Thank you so much, MissMerri, for your delightful review.
I always enjoy hearing from you. :>)
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Thank you so much, MissMerri, for your delightful review.
I always enjoy hearing from you. :>)
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a terrific use of the format. This is a glorius snapshot and a great depiction of the tip-tapping of the cast-offs.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
This is a terrific use of the format. This is a glorius snapshot and a great depiction of the tip-tapping of the cast-offs.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much, Bill, for your thoughtful review.
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Thank you so much, Bill, for your thoughtful review.
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Thank you so much, Bill, for your thoughtful review.
Comment from elliejean
I love the picture. Falling leaves can take the place of rain. They make a gentle pattering sound on their way down to the ground. I like it better than rain in the fall. The rain can get just too cold. Great work.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
I love the picture. Falling leaves can take the place of rain. They make a gentle pattering sound on their way down to the ground. I like it better than rain in the fall. The rain can get just too cold. Great work.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much for such a thoughtful review.
Comment from Benjamin Valencia
Very neat imagery here gathered from your soothing words. Even the choice of words to articulate the sounds are well noted. Mistaking the sound of rain for falling leaves is brilliant. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
Very neat imagery here gathered from your soothing words. Even the choice of words to articulate the sounds are well noted. Mistaking the sound of rain for falling leaves is brilliant. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much, Benjamin, for such a thoughtful review.
Comment from Galactia
soft pitter patter
but no rain out my window
Fall's crisp leaves cascade
wonderful little haiku in perfect 5'7'5 syllable format. picture represents poem well.
GL in the contest
Regards
tia
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
soft pitter patter
but no rain out my window
Fall's crisp leaves cascade
wonderful little haiku in perfect 5'7'5 syllable format. picture represents poem well.
GL in the contest
Regards
tia
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much, Tia, for your encouraging review.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
soft pitter patter
but no rain out my window
Fall's crisp leaves cascade
I like your haiku about Autumn
and the picture is so apt.
Good luck with the contest, my friend.
Margaret
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
soft pitter patter
but no rain out my window
Fall's crisp leaves cascade
I like your haiku about Autumn
and the picture is so apt.
Good luck with the contest, my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Thank you very much, Margaret, for your review and good luck
wishes.
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This haiku has great visual and auditory imagery. I know just the fall sights and sounds you mean, that fool you into thinking it's raining. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
This haiku has great visual and auditory imagery. I know just the fall sights and sounds you mean, that fool you into thinking it's raining. Good luck to you, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 25-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 25-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much, Jeanie, for your review. So good to hear from you. :>)