Marriage
A Haiku8 total reviews
Comment from RJ
An interesting poem that bring happiness of the wedding while thinking of a divorce. There seems to be so much divorce these days. The syllable count was well. I believe that in Haiku the beginning lines are not capitalized. Good luck. RJ
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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An interesting poem that bring happiness of the wedding while thinking of a divorce. There seems to be so much divorce these days. The syllable count was well. I believe that in Haiku the beginning lines are not capitalized. Good luck. RJ
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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did I get your vote..Thanks for the review
Comment from Galactia
This Fall seal the deal 5
We're together forever 7
Until the divorce 5
great little senryu not a Haiku i'm afraid. Haiku's relate to nature and season.
GL in te contest
REegards
Tia
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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This Fall seal the deal 5
We're together forever 7
Until the divorce 5
great little senryu not a Haiku i'm afraid. Haiku's relate to nature and season.
GL in te contest
REegards
Tia
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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thanks
Comment from elliejean
I love the picture. I love the poem. It displays many people's idea on the length of forever. They should probable say "I do until I don't" Great work.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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I love the picture. I love the poem. It displays many people's idea on the length of forever. They should probable say "I do until I don't" Great work.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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thanks much
Comment from Benjamin Valencia
Hello. Very cute Haiku. Good choice of words. I'm guessing "Fall" means as in the season correct? I'm surprised how many people here actually marry just for the citizenship. Great job and good luck. Cheers.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Hello. Very cute Haiku. Good choice of words. I'm guessing "Fall" means as in the season correct? I'm surprised how many people here actually marry just for the citizenship. Great job and good luck. Cheers.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Thanks Ben
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
This Fall seal the deal
We're together forever
Until the divorce
Oh dear, not a good thought.
but I like your entry - good luck, my friend.
Margaret
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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This Fall seal the deal
We're together forever
Until the divorce
Oh dear, not a good thought.
but I like your entry - good luck, my friend.
Margaret
Comment Written 25-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Thanks Margaret
Comment from janalma
Cute, funny and true. Pic goes well with this. Altho it is not a true haiku, the rules don't call for one. Enjoyed your pithy statement.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Cute, funny and true. Pic goes well with this. Altho it is not a true haiku, the rules don't call for one. Enjoyed your pithy statement.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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thanks Jan
Comment from Aaron James
Interesting take on marriage. Rather cynical to say the least, the last line makes the demise inevitable. Perhaps as an alternative to leave the door open to a successful marriage:
Unless we divorce
Although I guess a marriage that starts out considering it is perhaps destined to fail anyway.
A fun read.
Kind regards
Aaron
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Interesting take on marriage. Rather cynical to say the least, the last line makes the demise inevitable. Perhaps as an alternative to leave the door open to a successful marriage:
Unless we divorce
Although I guess a marriage that starts out considering it is perhaps destined to fail anyway.
A fun read.
Kind regards
Aaron
Comment Written 25-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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thanks Aaron
Comment from dorts
Well said. It is so sad in this day and age that so many marriages end in divorce. I guess it's the "ME" generation and nobody puts up with anything anymore. Did anyone think of compromise? Most of the time the pastures are not greener on the other side. I liked your poem.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Well said. It is so sad in this day and age that so many marriages end in divorce. I guess it's the "ME" generation and nobody puts up with anything anymore. Did anyone think of compromise? Most of the time the pastures are not greener on the other side. I liked your poem.
Comment Written 25-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2012
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Thanks Dorts