All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "Pineapple Paradise?"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from sgalletti
Hi Sharyn! Excellent entry in this Abstract contest, and a strong contender, for sure. I always appreciate your unique approach (often light and extremely humorous) to prompts. This is no exception. You chose a travel poster instead of abstract art, and yet abstracted the pineapple with strong, vivid images and strong active verbs. My favorite stanza is the one that begins with Whales glide and ends with what price Paradise? I especially appreciate the alliteration you incorporate, your enjambment and choices about where to punctuate (and not) and line length. Best of luck in the contest. Hugs, Sue
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2012
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Hi Sharyn! Excellent entry in this Abstract contest, and a strong contender, for sure. I always appreciate your unique approach (often light and extremely humorous) to prompts. This is no exception. You chose a travel poster instead of abstract art, and yet abstracted the pineapple with strong, vivid images and strong active verbs. My favorite stanza is the one that begins with Whales glide and ends with what price Paradise? I especially appreciate the alliteration you incorporate, your enjambment and choices about where to punctuate (and not) and line length. Best of luck in the contest. Hugs, Sue
Comment Written 23-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2012
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thank you so much Sue, for reading and reviewing ... though I believe the prompt did not call for inspiration from an abstract art piece if you read it carefully - you take a concrete image and abstract from that, yes?
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I agree. However, your entry was the only one I saw that did use a non-abstrract piece of art work. I value uniqueness and was complimenting you LOL! Sue
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no no, no biggie - just wanted to clarify, Sue. Blessings, Sharyn
Comment from Espresso momma
Until I read the author notes, I was puzzeled when reading this. Then it all made sense. Sad sense all the same. How cruel can people be? Thanks for sharing, good luck.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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Until I read the author notes, I was puzzeled when reading this. Then it all made sense. Sad sense all the same. How cruel can people be? Thanks for sharing, good luck.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2012
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Thx so much Em - a strange prompt, hmm???
Comment from Eric Corsten
Wow you have an extremely creative mind...very impressive ..you make me wonder what a stranded conversation is like for you.. LOL Great poem
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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Wow you have an extremely creative mind...very impressive ..you make me wonder what a stranded conversation is like for you.. LOL Great poem
Comment Written 14-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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I'm relatively sane Eric, no worries! But stream-of-consciousness, aaahhh, now THAT is more interesting, yes? :) Sharyn
Comment from Gianinas
Interesting how even the verse centered on the page suggested to me the idea of pineapple on the yellow page. I enjoyed the poem, only for me to then appreciate the extensive notes. Thank you!
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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Interesting how even the verse centered on the page suggested to me the idea of pineapple on the yellow page. I enjoyed the poem, only for me to then appreciate the extensive notes. Thank you!
Comment Written 14-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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thank you so much my dear, for taking the time to read both the poem and the notes - this was quite a fascinating and challenging prompt!
Best wishes
Sharyn
Comment from fictionwriter
It's hard to know that such horrible things happen to the wildlife in the name of science. I loved this poem, and wish it all was over and done with. I want the paradise to be the sparkling waters and pristine beaches. Well done.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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It's hard to know that such horrible things happen to the wildlife in the name of science. I loved this poem, and wish it all was over and done with. I want the paradise to be the sparkling waters and pristine beaches. Well done.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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Me too fw! Me too. :) Sharyn
Comment from cheyennewy
Hi Sharyn,
You have done a stellar job in writing this abstract poem for the contest. I appreciated your author's notes as it made the poem come clear in my mind (or what's left of it!) Your word choices and imagery are both excellent and I love the theme. Well done and good luck in the contest....blessings, chey
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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Hi Sharyn,
You have done a stellar job in writing this abstract poem for the contest. I appreciated your author's notes as it made the poem come clear in my mind (or what's left of it!) Your word choices and imagery are both excellent and I love the theme. Well done and good luck in the contest....blessings, chey
Comment Written 14-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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thank you so much Chey! :) Sharyn
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
A very well written poem using pineapple as a metaphor. Sounds like some things there aren't as wonderful as those of us who haven't been there think. An eye-opening poem for me. Thanks again for your help yesterday!!! Debbie
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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A very well written poem using pineapple as a metaphor. Sounds like some things there aren't as wonderful as those of us who haven't been there think. An eye-opening poem for me. Thanks again for your help yesterday!!! Debbie
Comment Written 14-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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wow! Debbie - I'm so honored. Thank you so much for your wonderful six!! (And you are always, always, so welcome).
Best wishes
Sharyn
Comment from Janet Foor
Interesting form and subject. Along with the excellent alliteration throughout and great internal rhyming, you gave us an education as well. Great descriptive words to give a contract to paradise. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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Interesting form and subject. Along with the excellent alliteration throughout and great internal rhyming, you gave us an education as well. Great descriptive words to give a contract to paradise. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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Thx Jm! :) Sharyn
Comment from Anisa-
...Oh...Okay. I really didn't get this until I read through the notes. Now that I understand the aim was to make it abstract, well done! Lol.
Really, though, it was very interesting. I just didn't get it at first.
Anisa
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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...Oh...Okay. I really didn't get this until I read through the notes. Now that I understand the aim was to make it abstract, well done! Lol.
Really, though, it was very interesting. I just didn't get it at first.
Anisa
Comment Written 14-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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that's fine Anisa - it was a very strange prompt!
Comment from justatuna
You know, I'm glad I read your author's notes, but it wouldn't have mattered. I got a sense of what you were saying throughout. How you spin things the way you do is beyond me. Always intelligent. Heavy and light simultaneously. Yes, that is what I would say about some of your work. A simple complexity of intelligence. Great job.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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You know, I'm glad I read your author's notes, but it wouldn't have mattered. I got a sense of what you were saying throughout. How you spin things the way you do is beyond me. Always intelligent. Heavy and light simultaneously. Yes, that is what I would say about some of your work. A simple complexity of intelligence. Great job.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2012
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thx so much Rob - this was a strange but rather intriguing prompt, wasn't it?