All Those Puzzling Pieces
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Beach Sleep"What makes a life? How do the pieces fit?
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Comment from dannielleduran
The poem flows gracefully down the page and lulls the reading into peace. Excellent use of words, presentation and color. Great job.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2012
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The poem flows gracefully down the page and lulls the reading into peace. Excellent use of words, presentation and color. Great job.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2012
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thank you so much danielle ... always a pleasure to take "time out" occasionally, yes?
Best wishes,
Sharyn
Comment from Lilmerely
I like the poem. The image the poem transmits you and the feeling of wanting to be there. I like the poem structure and the words you used. Great poem!
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2012
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I like the poem. The image the poem transmits you and the feeling of wanting to be there. I like the poem structure and the words you used. Great poem!
Comment Written 01-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2012
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thanks so much Lm ... are you new to the site? don't remember seeing your name before ... if so, welcome!! :) Sharyn
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Yes I'm new, thank you :)
Comment from Joy Graham
Sounds wonderful but I don't have a beach anywhere near here. In fact, we are buried under a blanket of snow. I sure wish I could be where you are on that beach.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2012
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Sounds wonderful but I don't have a beach anywhere near here. In fact, we are buried under a blanket of snow. I sure wish I could be where you are on that beach.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2012
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oh dear ... best hop on over Joy - plenty of room at the beach and we're having a late summer! :) Sharyn
Comment from Doc Holiday
Your poem fills my senses with the salty air, warm winds, and peace of mind. Well-done relaxing soothing poem!
Where were you?
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2012
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Your poem fills my senses with the salty air, warm winds, and peace of mind. Well-done relaxing soothing poem!
Where were you?
Comment Written 01-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2012
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thx Doc - we live in Hawaii, so we're lucky! :) Sharyn
Comment from N.K. Wagner
Well some people just have all the luck. While we east-coasters are freezing our collective...noses...off, you're snoozing in the tropical breeze. Well, enjoy an umbrella drink for me! Perfect description of the gentle sounds and sensations of a lazy afternoon in Paradise, Sharyn. :) nancy
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2012
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Well some people just have all the luck. While we east-coasters are freezing our collective...noses...off, you're snoozing in the tropical breeze. Well, enjoy an umbrella drink for me! Perfect description of the gentle sounds and sensations of a lazy afternoon in Paradise, Sharyn. :) nancy
Comment Written 01-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2012
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oh dear - double pina coladas all round Nancy! Did you feel Sandy at all?
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I few stiff breezes and some clouds in central NC. It snowed heavily in the mountains an hour and a half west of us. I was supposed to go to NYC to visit the grandkids that day. (They're on the north end of Manhattan Island and just fine.) Now I'm waiting for the city to return to normal operation before I make that trip. TV pictures of the Jersey Shore - my teenage haunt; I grew up a few miles from Staten Island - show there's nothing left of what I remember. So sad. It should be back into the 60s next week. Well thaw out then. Stay warm. :) nancy
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wow! I didn't know you lived so close! My parents went through devastating floods in the 70's in Brisbane, Australia. When I went back last year, Brisbane had been wiped out again, almost 6 months before my visit. Homes were still in ruins, unoccupied ... it was really hard to comprehend that kind of devastation unless you're actually there.
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It was hard not to be close, Sharyn. There was damage all along the east coast, right from Florida all the way up. The storm crossed Pennsylvania and went up through western Maine as a tropical storm. Its moisture fed that Great Lakes snowstorm and there was snow all the way to Cleveland, Ohio and south to the Kentucky and Tennessee mountains, west of us. We sit in an untouched pocket. Pretty much everyone east of the Mississippi River was affected in some way. LaGuardia Airport (on Long Island, NY) just opened yesterday, but public ground transportation is spotty because gasoline is scarce - no electricity to run the gas pumps. They began pumping out the flooded subways yesterday. A friend on the Delaware coast says entire beaches were washed away - no houses, no sand, nothing left. The destruction was almost simultaneous with NJ/NY. The storm was nearly 1,000 miles wide. The death toll has reached 70. While very sad, it could have been so much worse.I can easily imagine the destruction in Brisbane. And it takes a long time to rebuild when there's destruction on that scale. Just getting enough materials and workmen will be a long-term challenge.
I rattle on. :) nancy
Comment from Nanette Mary
Hullo Visionary ....
I really enjoyed what you have written here, using relatively few words that are attractively presented.
This certainly stirs up great memories of my teen-years, when I lived in a warm climate and getting to the beach and into the breakers was my constant ambition.
There is nothing to suggest changing and I thank you
for sharing this with us.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2012
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Hullo Visionary ....
I really enjoyed what you have written here, using relatively few words that are attractively presented.
This certainly stirs up great memories of my teen-years, when I lived in a warm climate and getting to the beach and into the breakers was my constant ambition.
There is nothing to suggest changing and I thank you
for sharing this with us.
Love from .... Nanette Mary.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2012
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"Aloha" Nanette - thank you for reminescing and enjoying the beach snooze with me! :) Sharyn
Comment from Janet Foor
Fabulous picture that just makes you want to drop everything and fly to Hawaii and join you on the beach. The poem was delightful, filled with images and the lullaby sound of the sea. Excellent!
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2012
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Fabulous picture that just makes you want to drop everything and fly to Hawaii and join you on the beach. The poem was delightful, filled with images and the lullaby sound of the sea. Excellent!
Comment Written 01-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2012
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thx Jm! :) Sharyn
Comment from misscookie
Tha artwork looks so inviting and it tryly sets the mood for your poem.
i guess you wrote this before Sandy arrive
Still I love the meaning of your poem. Thank you foir sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2012
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Tha artwork looks so inviting and it tryly sets the mood for your poem.
i guess you wrote this before Sandy arrive
Still I love the meaning of your poem. Thank you foir sharing.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2012
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thx miss cookie - yes, it was written before Sandy arrived - ouch!
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You are very welcome, when things get back to normal you can dream again of that marvelous place, have a nice evening
Comment from The Moonwalker
Hi again :)
I'd say that it is not a wild guess saying that you have used both the form and alliteration on the letter 's' to lure the reader into a state of mind that is related to the title. Damn I feel tired... :) It's a great imitation of the sound of the Ocean.
It was a really nice read, thank you for sharing :)
Jim
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2012
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Hi again :)
I'd say that it is not a wild guess saying that you have used both the form and alliteration on the letter 's' to lure the reader into a state of mind that is related to the title. Damn I feel tired... :) It's a great imitation of the sound of the Ocean.
It was a really nice read, thank you for sharing :)
Jim
Comment Written 01-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2012
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no wild guess my dear - so glad you enjoyed sharing my beach with me - and a special thank you for your lovely '6'!
Best wishes
Sharyn
Comment from Maria C.
Okay don't rub it in. I'm already jealous. I can only imagine being on the warm beach as you describe the soft scented salty winds and rolling waves with their soothing sounds merging with the shore.
Excellent imagery in your free verse describing both sights and sounds. Great use of alliteration throughout. Love the picture. What a place for a hammock! Good color scheme too.
Blessings,
Maria C.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2012
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Okay don't rub it in. I'm already jealous. I can only imagine being on the warm beach as you describe the soft scented salty winds and rolling waves with their soothing sounds merging with the shore.
Excellent imagery in your free verse describing both sights and sounds. Great use of alliteration throughout. Love the picture. What a place for a hammock! Good color scheme too.
Blessings,
Maria C.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2012
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and bless you again - plenty of room at the beach dear! :) Sharyn