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Viewing comments for Chapter 158 "Do I believe? (Nonet style)"All of my poems of release.
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Comment from missy98writer
Poet,
Your Nonet is extremely well written with strong imagery painted in nine lines of verse.
Your Nonet poem is in proper form with spot on syllable count.
The art work you used is wicked awesome.
Excellent metaphors cap off your Nonet along with great alliteration with the C words.
You also used very good rhymes: heart apart.
I enjoyed your lines:
love advertised as faithful and true
crept up devouring my reason
consuming all my senses
playing my fragile heart
I wish you good luck in the contest.
Would I recommend your Nonet poem to other reviewers?
Yes, I would.
Missy.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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Poet,
Your Nonet is extremely well written with strong imagery painted in nine lines of verse.
Your Nonet poem is in proper form with spot on syllable count.
The art work you used is wicked awesome.
Excellent metaphors cap off your Nonet along with great alliteration with the C words.
You also used very good rhymes: heart apart.
I enjoyed your lines:
love advertised as faithful and true
crept up devouring my reason
consuming all my senses
playing my fragile heart
I wish you good luck in the contest.
Would I recommend your Nonet poem to other reviewers?
Yes, I would.
Missy.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2012
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Thank you so much missy your review is much appreciated as always :) Jaq x
Comment from poetster
Hello,
I think this is a good attempt at the subject but could have been done a little better. Good fortune in this contest and in your ongoing writing endeavors.
God Bless,
Fairon Spears
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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Hello,
I think this is a good attempt at the subject but could have been done a little better. Good fortune in this contest and in your ongoing writing endeavors.
God Bless,
Fairon Spears
Comment Written 26-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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Thank you so much Fairon for your kind review.
Comment from Shirlena
Really enjoyed reading this. It wasn't such syrup that it made me role my eyes back in my head. I don't know about you but I'm getting to the point I'm having difficulty with the same ole rhythm and rhyme poems so this is take on wrong love is refreshing to read.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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Really enjoyed reading this. It wasn't such syrup that it made me role my eyes back in my head. I don't know about you but I'm getting to the point I'm having difficulty with the same ole rhythm and rhyme poems so this is take on wrong love is refreshing to read.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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Thanks so much for your kind review.
Comment from Joannforsberg
love advertised as faithful and true
crept up devouring my reason
consuming all my senses
Great use of modern dating sites.
Excellent poem.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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love advertised as faithful and true
crept up devouring my reason
consuming all my senses
Great use of modern dating sites.
Excellent poem.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2012
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Thank you so much for your very kind review.
Comment from atlas-manoftherain
I like the formalistic interpretation I got out of this so I went 5. The poem was meant to be shaped like a heart correct? But an odd shaped heart at that.... one almost molded by a human. And we mold things in our image; misshapen and misfit. The "For now, No" was the best: we all get our hearts broke and we all think love sucks and will never come around to us again. But it does... curse the thing. Well done and write on.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012
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I like the formalistic interpretation I got out of this so I went 5. The poem was meant to be shaped like a heart correct? But an odd shaped heart at that.... one almost molded by a human. And we mold things in our image; misshapen and misfit. The "For now, No" was the best: we all get our hearts broke and we all think love sucks and will never come around to us again. But it does... curse the thing. Well done and write on.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012
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Thank you for your very insightful appraisal.
Comment from RYME4U
This poem is very well written and well expressed. The message is clear and the nonet style is well done. I like that you matched the broken heart artwork to your poem.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012
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This poem is very well written and well expressed. The message is clear and the nonet style is well done. I like that you matched the broken heart artwork to your poem.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012
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Much appreciated review RYME4U.
Comment from Sally Carter
What I most like about your nonet is that your lines end in natural places. So often in a nonet, the words just seem to be chopped up where convenient, simply to fit the syllable count.
I also like the way you personify love as some living creature that has won your trust and then let you down.
Excellent conclusion, building (or descending!) gradually to that emphatic NO!
Best of luck with this, and I hope the glimmer of hope bursts into a warm flame.
Yours
Sally
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012
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What I most like about your nonet is that your lines end in natural places. So often in a nonet, the words just seem to be chopped up where convenient, simply to fit the syllable count.
I also like the way you personify love as some living creature that has won your trust and then let you down.
Excellent conclusion, building (or descending!) gradually to that emphatic NO!
Best of luck with this, and I hope the glimmer of hope bursts into a warm flame.
Yours
Sally
Comment Written 25-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012
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Thank you so much Sally, always appreciate your reviews.
Comment from thecoe
very creative and powerful. i like how you comment on love devouring your reason. it is so true how love can affect us. i enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012
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very creative and powerful. i like how you comment on love devouring your reason. it is so true how love can affect us. i enjoyed it.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012
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Thank you so much for your understanding review.
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you are welcome
Comment from prayingpoet
There are times for all of us when we feel that love no longer exists, and yes it is advertised as always being faithful and true but as we all know that is not always the case. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012
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There are times for all of us when we feel that love no longer exists, and yes it is advertised as always being faithful and true but as we all know that is not always the case. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012
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Thanks for your insightful review.
Comment from EMB
Well, love definitely exists, but unfortunately so does things like deceit, disloyalty, and a whole bunch of other things that can overshadow love's existences. :)
Nice poem, though.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012
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Well, love definitely exists, but unfortunately so does things like deceit, disloyalty, and a whole bunch of other things that can overshadow love's existences. :)
Nice poem, though.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2012
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2012
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Thank you so much Edward.