My Life in words
Viewing comments for Chapter 198 "My plea."All of my poems of release.
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Comment from rgabel
Such a heartfelt prayer in poem form. It is difficult for me to rhyme every other line as you did. Nice job on that. Simply and beautifully put. Good job.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2012
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Such a heartfelt prayer in poem form. It is difficult for me to rhyme every other line as you did. Nice job on that. Simply and beautifully put. Good job.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2012
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Thank you for your kind words.
Comment from notdeadyet
This is an absolutely beautiful poem. Your faith shines forth like a blossom in the rain. I appreciate your writing from the stand point of someone going through the trials that we must all face, sooner or later.Very well done!
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2012
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This is an absolutely beautiful poem. Your faith shines forth like a blossom in the rain. I appreciate your writing from the stand point of someone going through the trials that we must all face, sooner or later.Very well done!
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2012
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Thank you for you much appreciated comments.
Comment from MAMONIA
How very sweet and meaningful is this prayer
for your dad. I can see how your heart was in
every word that you wrote.
I am so sorry that you are going through such
a difficult time, but you did the right thing.
Let go and let God take care from here on in.
Just trust Him to do your bidding.
Best of luck, my friend.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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How very sweet and meaningful is this prayer
for your dad. I can see how your heart was in
every word that you wrote.
I am so sorry that you are going through such
a difficult time, but you did the right thing.
Let go and let God take care from here on in.
Just trust Him to do your bidding.
Best of luck, my friend.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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I do trust that God will bring him through, thank you for your lovely words.
Comment from missy98writer
Poet,
Your poem is a beautifully written and heartfelt with rich imagery.
The art work you used is lovely.
You used excellent alliteration with the H words.
Your rhyme and meter are both great.
You used very good metaphors.
I enjoyed your second and third stanzas:
Help my Dad through this spell,
his health has downward gone,
in hospital he must now dwell,
until major surgery's done.
His heart has let him down you see,
his breathing is laboured also,
we need you now to set him free,
of pain, of fear, of tears that flow.
I'd recommend your emotional spiritual verse poem to other reviewers.
I wish you good luck in the contest.
I pray your father is okay,
Missy.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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Poet,
Your poem is a beautifully written and heartfelt with rich imagery.
The art work you used is lovely.
You used excellent alliteration with the H words.
Your rhyme and meter are both great.
You used very good metaphors.
I enjoyed your second and third stanzas:
Help my Dad through this spell,
his health has downward gone,
in hospital he must now dwell,
until major surgery's done.
His heart has let him down you see,
his breathing is laboured also,
we need you now to set him free,
of pain, of fear, of tears that flow.
I'd recommend your emotional spiritual verse poem to other reviewers.
I wish you good luck in the contest.
I pray your father is okay,
Missy.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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Thank you for your very kind appraisal and words.
Comment from seren james
I like this prayer. It comes from the heart, not intended to be a pun. I am sorry for your dad and hope God looks upon him. Your prayer contains good verses, and a good contest entry.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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I like this prayer. It comes from the heart, not intended to be a pun. I am sorry for your dad and hope God looks upon him. Your prayer contains good verses, and a good contest entry.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much seren I do hope He hears me.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes this is very well written this is how I felt not too long ago about my mother she is on the mend now I hope your father has a full recovery soon this is a very honest well written prayer regards Jill
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2012
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Yes this is very well written this is how I felt not too long ago about my mother she is on the mend now I hope your father has a full recovery soon this is a very honest well written prayer regards Jill
Comment Written 18-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for your kind words my friend. x
Comment from J. Dark
This is a really special piece of heartfelt poetry. It has great rhyme and flow and a beautiful message. I hope you do well in the contest.
Kindest of regards,
Mrs D
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2012
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This is a really special piece of heartfelt poetry. It has great rhyme and flow and a beautiful message. I hope you do well in the contest.
Kindest of regards,
Mrs D
Comment Written 18-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2012
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Thank you Mrs. D for your very kind appraisal. x
Comment from terry drake
Your prayer is indeed a marvelous appeal for saving your father from deaths grip. I hope it was answered and that he was able to contribute to your life in days to come.
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2012
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Your prayer is indeed a marvelous appeal for saving your father from deaths grip. I hope it was answered and that he was able to contribute to your life in days to come.
Comment Written 18-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2012
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The op is tomorrow Terry. Thank you for your review.
Comment from GE Parson
Verry good poem and easy reading. This prayer might be used by others who loved one is in a serious health spiro.Thank you for sharing it. -The Parson
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2012
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Verry good poem and easy reading. This prayer might be used by others who loved one is in a serious health spiro.Thank you for sharing it. -The Parson
Comment Written 18-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for your kind words. It was just a simple plea.