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Viewing comments for Chapter 203 "The Hangman Cometh."All of my poems of release.
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Comment from steevie
The stanza below is amazing. The expression, the noose has won another neck, is brilliant!
This is way I love poetry so much, when one comes across works like this that gives the reader such a descriptive and imaginative glimpse into your thoughts.
The hangman's noose,
knotted and tightened.
Sways as if a drunken man,
awaits the neck it has won.
well done
steve
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
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The stanza below is amazing. The expression, the noose has won another neck, is brilliant!
This is way I love poetry so much, when one comes across works like this that gives the reader such a descriptive and imaginative glimpse into your thoughts.
The hangman's noose,
knotted and tightened.
Sways as if a drunken man,
awaits the neck it has won.
well done
steve
Comment Written 14-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much Steve for your kind words. :) Jaq x
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you're very welcome
steve
Comment from Eliza M
Wow! This is a dark offering Jac!LOL! You create an incredibly vivid image of this gruesome and horrific scene. Superb word choices and phrasing sent a chill down my spine. To think that once this was regarded as entertainment is really stomach churning.You carry the reader through each stage, leaving no stone unturned!Well done! Liz.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2012
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Wow! This is a dark offering Jac!LOL! You create an incredibly vivid image of this gruesome and horrific scene. Superb word choices and phrasing sent a chill down my spine. To think that once this was regarded as entertainment is really stomach churning.You carry the reader through each stage, leaving no stone unturned!Well done! Liz.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2012
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Thanks for that Liz your critique means a lot to me. Dark seems to be where my head is at. :) Jaq x
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My pleasure Jaq. Hope things aren't too dark for you. Remember you can always PM or email me if you need a 'chat'. Been like that myself recently and I know Tammy's had a hard time, so you are not alone girl!x
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Thank you Liz, I sure will <3 x Jaq x
Comment from sibhus
What an excellent descriptive poem of hanging. I thought your approch to the subject was perfect. To often we forget that this grizzly affairs were actually forms of entertainment, oin the past. You have captured the feel and the attuides of this horrid act. Great poem.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2012
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What an excellent descriptive poem of hanging. I thought your approch to the subject was perfect. To often we forget that this grizzly affairs were actually forms of entertainment, oin the past. You have captured the feel and the attuides of this horrid act. Great poem.
Comment Written 14-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for your lovely review. :) x
Comment from Alexmi1984
This was great. It was fun to read (although the subject itself was dark), had a great flow and it was great that you used the free-rhyme structure in this poem. I also felt as if I was in the audience, witnessing the hanging. It was beautifully gruesome.
Great job!!
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2012
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This was great. It was fun to read (although the subject itself was dark), had a great flow and it was great that you used the free-rhyme structure in this poem. I also felt as if I was in the audience, witnessing the hanging. It was beautifully gruesome.
Great job!!
Comment Written 14-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2012
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Thank you Alexmi for your kind words :) Jaq x
Comment from TammyGail
Always love your writing - this made for a great read
well written and expressed like always but dark and
haunting so you know I loved it - your imagery and color scheme add the perfect touch - thanks for sharing always a pleasure
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2012
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Always love your writing - this made for a great read
well written and expressed like always but dark and
haunting so you know I loved it - your imagery and color scheme add the perfect touch - thanks for sharing always a pleasure
Comment Written 14-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much Tammy, means a lot from the 'Queen Scribe'. Total respect for you and your work. I'm humbled. :) Jaq x
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ever welcome sweetie
Comment from Scarbrems
Geez, dark stuff. Some great imagery. Sick that people watched this with evident enjoyment, wasn't it? On thing...I'd change "limply loose" to "limp and loose". You don't lose the rhythm, but you do lose a pesky adverb. Just a suggestion...
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2012
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Geez, dark stuff. Some great imagery. Sick that people watched this with evident enjoyment, wasn't it? On thing...I'd change "limply loose" to "limp and loose". You don't lose the rhythm, but you do lose a pesky adverb. Just a suggestion...
Comment Written 14-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2012
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Thanks emsey I will change that now. :) Much apppreciated. Jaq x
Comment from Katherine2
Haunting, eerie and sad, so sad. Your work is so descriptive and doomed, (I mean that as a compliment)I was taken a back. Visually I could see this poor soul a waiting death and dying." The hangman's noose,
knotted and tightened.
Sways as if a drunken man,
awaits the neck it has won."
Ominous line that leaves me almost speechless. I really enjoy some dark poerty. I write dark and I have an appreciation for it. I look forward to reading more of your work. The last lines were darkly divine.~Katherine
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2012
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Haunting, eerie and sad, so sad. Your work is so descriptive and doomed, (I mean that as a compliment)I was taken a back. Visually I could see this poor soul a waiting death and dying." The hangman's noose,
knotted and tightened.
Sways as if a drunken man,
awaits the neck it has won."
Ominous line that leaves me almost speechless. I really enjoy some dark poerty. I write dark and I have an appreciation for it. I look forward to reading more of your work. The last lines were darkly divine.~Katherine
Comment Written 13-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2012
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Thank you Katherine. Dark is always easier for me too. :)
Comment from hollyinvesuvianite
Wow! You really captured the picture of a man being hanged. I am a big fan of the western genre, and this is very common in those stories- yes, it is a sick spectator sport. Great work! Holly
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2012
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Wow! You really captured the picture of a man being hanged. I am a big fan of the western genre, and this is very common in those stories- yes, it is a sick spectator sport. Great work! Holly
Comment Written 13-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2012
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Cheers for your appraisal Holly. Enjoyed doing it too. :)
Comment from Kingsland
This is a rather gory piece of poetic art. It is rather morbid in its poetic thought transference, but well written. I enjoyed reading this poetic voice of deadly transference... John
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2012
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This is a rather gory piece of poetic art. It is rather morbid in its poetic thought transference, but well written. I enjoyed reading this poetic voice of deadly transference... John
Comment Written 13-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2012
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Thank you John, your kind words mean a lot. :)
Comment from msmadeleine
Some what morbid and the picture with it says it all.
It's well written and certainly makes my blood go cold!
Thanks for that just at my bedtime! lol
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2012
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Some what morbid and the picture with it says it all.
It's well written and certainly makes my blood go cold!
Thanks for that just at my bedtime! lol
Comment Written 13-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2012
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Hahaha. Sorry Madeleine, hope you slept OK. Thanks for taking the time to read and review it. :)