No Such Luck
Revision of an earlier poem145 total reviews
Comment from budlias
Superstitions can be interesting and imaginative.I prefer
the quantum field, physics, as the driving force that runs
the whole universe. Your conclusion is somewhat trite and
a little preachy.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2012
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Superstitions can be interesting and imaginative.I prefer
the quantum field, physics, as the driving force that runs
the whole universe. Your conclusion is somewhat trite and
a little preachy.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2012
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Thank you for the advice budlias.
Comment from LilHippie
Very beautifully written poem and written with a strong faith. These things we say, these superstitions are very silly. I like to think people do not believe them at all, but just say them because they think its fun, but you are probably right in your poem, they are probably so bored in their lives, so empty, they let these silly made up things worry them. Its sad really. Your poem is beautiful, the artwork you chose is beautiful. I completely understand why you would think of these superstitions and find it so absurd that anyone would waste their time, brains or hearts on them, when faith is all there is as far as any control over life. Let go and let God. There is nothing else. This is a beautiful, beautiful piece.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Very beautifully written poem and written with a strong faith. These things we say, these superstitions are very silly. I like to think people do not believe them at all, but just say them because they think its fun, but you are probably right in your poem, they are probably so bored in their lives, so empty, they let these silly made up things worry them. Its sad really. Your poem is beautiful, the artwork you chose is beautiful. I completely understand why you would think of these superstitions and find it so absurd that anyone would waste their time, brains or hearts on them, when faith is all there is as far as any control over life. Let go and let God. There is nothing else. This is a beautiful, beautiful piece.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Thank you hippie.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
You've picked the right title, Justin. Your faith is admirable, but do you really think people take superstition seriously... mostly I think the bulk of us treat them as a bit of fun. If people do believe these ideas, I agree it is a battle not to be judgemental. but I believe that is what God wants. It is not our place to judge our fellow man. Giddy
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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You've picked the right title, Justin. Your faith is admirable, but do you really think people take superstition seriously... mostly I think the bulk of us treat them as a bit of fun. If people do believe these ideas, I agree it is a battle not to be judgemental. but I believe that is what God wants. It is not our place to judge our fellow man. Giddy
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Thank you Giddy.
Comment from hollyinvesuvianite
Please accept a virtual six, as i am already depleted of them. Couldn't agree with you more- these superstitions are actually memes that are meant to brainwash people. Sorry to get psychoanalytical on you. But, yes, we only need Jesus to live and be happy. Great work with intelligent craftsmanship. Holly
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Please accept a virtual six, as i am already depleted of them. Couldn't agree with you more- these superstitions are actually memes that are meant to brainwash people. Sorry to get psychoanalytical on you. But, yes, we only need Jesus to live and be happy. Great work with intelligent craftsmanship. Holly
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Thank you Holly.
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You are very welcome. holly
Comment from MizKat
Bravo, Justin Chopin. This is one of the best poems I've read lately. I'm so happy to hear about your faith in God. I don't believe in all that other junk either, but it sure is wonderful having a relationship with the Trinity. Kat
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Bravo, Justin Chopin. This is one of the best poems I've read lately. I'm so happy to hear about your faith in God. I don't believe in all that other junk either, but it sure is wonderful having a relationship with the Trinity. Kat
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Thank you Kat.
Comment from Georgia333
A brilliant poem thatfix fillled with an abundance of sensible thinking and a Clear message that man's superstitions that have plagued us should be thrown away. A great piece well done
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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A brilliant poem thatfix fillled with an abundance of sensible thinking and a Clear message that man's superstitions that have plagued us should be thrown away. A great piece well done
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Thank you Georgia.
Comment from fanoffanstory
This is a very nice poem but your rhyme scheme seems to be a bit all over the place. I love the poem and I think it is telling a story about well, No Such Luck. It did bring me joy and I like the way everything comes together. One other thing is next time don't put your title on the poem itself. Otherwise I think it's great!
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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This is a very nice poem but your rhyme scheme seems to be a bit all over the place. I love the poem and I think it is telling a story about well, No Such Luck. It did bring me joy and I like the way everything comes together. One other thing is next time don't put your title on the poem itself. Otherwise I think it's great!
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Thank you for your honesty fanoff.
Comment from Cleo Belle
Yes, I see you relate to faith in God rather than having faith in any other object. I took a rabbit's foot to school when i was taking my GCE exams. I think i was the only one there with a rabbit's foot! My Mum had given it to me, and i got great strength from seeing it tucked into my pencil case. I still went to church, sang in the choir and believed in God - the rabbit's foot was something else! Perhaps we can have both sorts of faith in this world?
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Yes, I see you relate to faith in God rather than having faith in any other object. I took a rabbit's foot to school when i was taking my GCE exams. I think i was the only one there with a rabbit's foot! My Mum had given it to me, and i got great strength from seeing it tucked into my pencil case. I still went to church, sang in the choir and believed in God - the rabbit's foot was something else! Perhaps we can have both sorts of faith in this world?
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Thank you for the advice cleo.
Comment from Survivor48
this is a great poem! I agree with what you said, about 99%. this art is expressed very well through freeverse and rhyming. excellent job!
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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this is a great poem! I agree with what you said, about 99%. this art is expressed very well through freeverse and rhyming. excellent job!
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Thank you survivor.
Comment from Glasstruth
Interesting picture. I agree we have to make our own future. I don't believe in black cats, etc... but if luck didn't exist at all there wouldn't be a word for it. Someone once said it's 50% skill & 50% luck. A great thinking poem. Les
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Interesting picture. I agree we have to make our own future. I don't believe in black cats, etc... but if luck didn't exist at all there wouldn't be a word for it. Someone once said it's 50% skill & 50% luck. A great thinking poem. Les
Comment Written 02-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2012
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Thank you glass.